This document contains 15 sentences that have been corrected to improve aspects of communication such as completeness, clarity, conciseness, courtesy, concreteness, and consideration. The corrections address issues such as missing details, wordiness, politeness, vagueness, and sensitivity. For example, sentence 1 is corrected to include more details about the meeting time and location. Sentence 2 is made more concise. Sentence 13 changes the wording to be more considerate when addressing an unpaid bill. The corrections demonstrate how to effectively edit sentences to enhance different components of effective communication.

1. BCE ASSIGNMENT
TOPIC: 7CS OF COMMUNICATION
GROUP TASK
CH-19035 (ABDUL SUBHAN)
CH-19042 (MOHMMED HAMZA ADIL)
CH-19043 (FEROZ AHMED KHAN)
Course Teacher
DR. RAHILA ANWAR

2. Correct the following sentences
1) Meeting will be held at NED university on 30th
of March 2022
(Completeness and Clarity)
Meeting regarding industrial collaboration will be held at NED university on
30th
of March 2022 at 3 pm.
2) You should learn to be punctual so then you won’t miss out any
information i.e., given in the beginning of briefing
(Conciseness)
Be on time, in order to get complete information about briefing
3) Your complain is rejected as it is invalid
(Courtesy)
Your complain is not up to the mark
4) We don’t entertain members below 18
(Courtesy)
We feel repentant about our company policy of entertaining members above 18.
5) Since the inflation rate has increased at an alarming pace last year, we
have no choice but to increase the monthly subscription a little bit
(Concreteness)
We regret to inform you that our monthly subscription will increase 5% to
account for rising inflation rate.
6) I beg to state that I shall not be able to pay my fees right now can you
allow me to pay the fee later
(Completeness and Consideration)
I am currently facing some financial problems; would you please allow me to
pay the fee by next month
7) Please kindly accept my request
(Clarity and Correctness)
Kindly accept my business proposal which I have discussed with you yesterday.
8) Please send us the related relevant details as soon as possible
(Concreteness)

3. Please send us related details regarding new education plan immediately
9)There is a board meeting scheduled for which agenda is to be discussed.
come and see me at your earliest
(Correctness and Clarity)
There is a board meeting scheduled on 10th of April 2022 for which agenda is
undecided, kindly meet me at your earliest with your idea.
10) We treat you with respect and our staff will always surely be able to
satisfy you in order to build a good image of our organization
(Consideration and Conciseness)
Your respect and satisfaction are always our main objectives, in order to create
. pleasant image for the customers
11)Your request is disapproved
(Courtesy and Clarity)
We apologise that your request is not accepted, as it was placed after the due
Date
12)You have to pay a high cost for the benefits you get when you use our
product
(Correctness and Consideration)
As our company is offering exceptional products and valuable after sale
Services our cost is approximately 10% more than our competitor’s price.
13)You haven’t paid your bill; you are required to made an urgent
payment
(consideration)
As per our records your last month dues are still pending, kindly have them
settled in current week.
14) Mr. Ahmed is a good employ, and an asset to the organization
(Clarity)
Mr. Ahmed is a hard working and a loyal employee and is considered an asset
to this organization
15) Sir! we are happy to enjoy your company in the function, I think we
have this courtesy again and again
(Correction)
We are dignified that you are able to attend our function and we hope that we
will have courtesy to meet with you again