This document contains feedback from teachers, peers, and self-assessment on draft 7 of an opening sequence for Assignment 11. The assessments suggest improving the character representation, distinguishing between real life and flashbacks, adding close-up shots of writing and changing the editing, ending, and using a voice over. Further feedback recommends putting titles in a different place, including a background song and pictures of a crime scene, and using more camera techniques like pans and zooms.

1. Assignment 11 Draft 7 – opening
sequence draft 4.
Luara Pires
Kauana Labaldi
Chantelle Gilkes

2. Results for draft #3
Teacher Assessment. Peer Assessment. Self Assessment.

3. Even better if:
• Have 2 folders
• Have close-up shots of him writing.
• Distinct way of real life and flashback.
• Improve on character representation.
• Not being dead, but missing.
• Change editing.
• Change ending.
• Have her with a voice over.

4. Even better if :
• Put titles in a different place.
• Have a background song for the whole opening
sequence
• Put pictures of crime scene.
• More match on action
• Usa camera pan and zoom to concentrate on
specific words.
• Panning from bottom
• Last shot her face.
• Variety of shots of her sitting down.