This document contains feedback from multiple reviewers on a project called "The Birthday Wish". Daniel Smith noted that the computer screen was not shown and the story dragged on repetitively. Sam Hardingham provided constructive criticism on a "cartoony" bomb sound effect and short credits. Radhika Munthanna was confused by an unclear narrative at the beginning. Millie Milton was the only one to point out a lack of dialogue, which caused confusion about understanding the story. Hannah Knowles also found the repetitive countdown to the birthday was boring, weakening the climax.

1. THE BIRTHDAY WISH

2. This is some feedback I got from
Daniel Smith.
It was interesting that he picked up
on the fact there is no showing of the
computer screen as this was
something I hadn’t really thought
about. I don’t think it was ever really
necessary to show it.
I also take his point about it dragging
on, and I can see why it could be seen
as repetitive!

3. This is a review from Sam Hardingham. He
gave really good constructive criticism and
picked out some interesting points! For
example the point about the ‘cartoony’ bomb
sound effect, and the credits being too short
at the end.

4. This is a review from Radhika
Munthanna. I understand where
she may have been confused at
the beginning, as the narrative
isn’t 100% clear throughout.

5. This is a review from Millie Milton. She
was the only person to pick up on no
dialogue, and it is clear that this was
necessary or at least some form of
description or clearer narrative as from this
review it seems she didn’t quite
understand it.

6. This is a review from Hannah
Knowles.
Hannah has not been the only one
to pick up on the repetitiveness of
counting down to her birthday
and the fact this could get boring.
From this I assume she found that
because the countdown became
boring, the climax didn’t really
work.