The document is an argumentative essay submission by Mutiu Olokodana that received a grade of 0/100 due to significant issues with plagiarism, specifically recycling content from previously submitted works. The grading report indicates deficiencies in areas such as thesis development, support and development of arguments, organization, and formatting, leading to an overall lack of clarity and coherence. Consequently, the instructor requires a complete rewrite of the essay on a new topic to meet academic standards.

1. Argumentative Essay
by mutiu Olokodana
Submission date: 28-Jan-2020 02:37AM (UTC-0500)
Submission ID: 1247589300
File name:
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Word count: 841
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10. Recycled
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Argumentative Essay
ORIGINALITY REPORT
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FINAL GRADE
0/100
Argumentative Essay
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
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10. Recycled
Unfortunately, your essay is reworded from a paper that was
already submitted to Straighterline or
another university. This is a type of plagiarism called recycling,
which is unacceptable by
Straighterline policy. Therefore, you will need to completely

4. rewrite a new essay with a new topic in
order for a submission under this assignment to be accepted and
graded.
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RUBRIC: ENG101 V6:ARGUMENTATIVE FINAL
THESIS (20%)
POINTS
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POINTS
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POINTS
(3)
POINTS
(3.50)
POINTS
(4)
POINTS
(5)
SUPPORT & DEV (15%)

5. POINTS
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POINTS
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POINTS
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POINTS
(3.50)
0 / 5
0 / 5
Thesis, central idea, audience, purpose, digressions
Thesis or potential thesis is neither present in any portion of the
essay, nor is it implied in
any manner. Thesis may be present but incorrect for the
assignment’s
objectives/approach. Thesis may be present but the submission
overall fails to meet most
assignment objectives (such as the essay is only a paragraph)
that determining the thesis’
viability is problematic.
Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of
audience and purpose. Readers
cannot discern the essay’s central idea.
Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently
addressed. Reveals limited
awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either lacking
or inconsistently

6. addressed.
Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or
otherwise problematic.
Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent.
Central idea is perhaps too
general and supported by irrelevant examples.
Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout
most of the paper.
Awareness of audience is sufficient. Central idea is clear and
maintained in most of the
essay.
Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the
entire paper. Paper
demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and
purpose. Central idea/focus
maintained throughout.
0 / 5
Thesis support, thesis development, use of examples, logic, and
reason
Support is more than lacking, such that it is insufficient for
review (assignment does not
meet length requirements). Body paragraphs may be very
limited in original material for
evaluation due to too much borrowed information and a
problematic similarity report which
qualifies the paper for an account hold and “similarity match:
low” QuickMark.
No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or
evidence. No topic

7. development. Little-to-no argument is present. Topic
development is flawed or non-
existent.
Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. At least
two arguments are
present, but counterargument and refutation may be weak or
missing. Topic development
may have been attempted, but does not form conclusions and/or
fails to exhibit clear
reasoning. The body paragraphs have an insufficient mix of
cited quotes, paraphrases,
and summaries.
More support is needed. Some examples may be vague. More
development needed for
supporting reasons or evidence. Some irrelevant support may be
present, but most
evidence supports thesis. The body paragraphs have an adequate
mix of cited quotes,
POINTS
(4)
POINTS
(5)
COHERENCE (10%)
POINTS
(0)
POINTS
(2)

8. POINTS
(3)
POINTS
(3.50)
POINTS
(4)
POINTS
(5)
LANGUAGE (15%)
POINTS
(0)
paraphrases, and summaries.
Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way. At least
three strong arguments, a
counterargument, and a refutation are present. Examples are
sufficient. Thesis is
supported and developed in most paragraphs. The body
paragraphs have a sufficient mix
of cited quotes, paraphrases, and summaries.
Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement
of evidence. At least three
strong arguments, a counterargument, and a refutation are
present. All assertions are
supported and relate to thesis. The body paragraphs have an
exceptional mix of cited
quotes, paraphrases, and summaries.

9. 0 / 5
Introduction, conclusion, body paragraphs, transitions, topic
sentences
Two or more major organizational elements are missing, such as
an introduction and
conclusion. Essay be one long paragraph with no discernible
separation of ideas.
No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no
transitions. Demonstrates little-to-no
understanding of organization. Many sentences within
paragraphs do not relate to each
other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May contain no discernible
topic sentences.
Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic.
Few transitions. Perhaps
numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic topic
sentences. Demonstrates little
understanding of organization.
Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one
significant weakness is present:
undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion, illogical
paragraph order. Adequate
transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some paragraphs may
lack clear topic sentences.
Demonstrates basic understanding of organization.
Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although
improvements could be made. Most
paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a clear
plan of development.
Transitions are clear throughout most of the paper.

10. Demonstrates good understanding of
organization.
Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion:
Introduction establishes the
essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and main
ideas without merely
copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and effective
transitions are present
throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent understanding of
organization.
0 / 5
Word choice, repetition, redundancy, awkwardness, article
misuse, wrong word form (their/there, etc.),
typos/misspellings, vocabulary
May contain more than 8 errors in word choice, wordiness,
redundancy, or awkwardness.
<br />May contain more than 8 errors in inappropriate language
for academic audience.
<br />Fails to demonstrate clarity in most sentences throughout
the paper. The lack of
lucidity makes it difficult for the reader to determine the
paper’s focus.
POINTS
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POINTS
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POINTS

11. (3.50)
POINTS
(4)
POINTS
(5)
GRAMMAR (10%)
POINTS
(0)
POINTS
(2)
POINTS
(3)
POINTS
(3.50)
POINTS
(4)
POINTS
(5)
PUNCTUATION (10%)
POINTS
(0)
POINTS
May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness,

12. redundancy, or awkwardness.
<br />May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate language
for academic audience.
<br />Fails to demonstrate competent language use; sentences
and vocabulary are
inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent.
May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or
awkwardness. <br />May
contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic
audience. <br />Contains
repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure
and/or limited vocabulary.
May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness,
redundancy, or awkwardness. <br
/>May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for
academic audience. <br
/>Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence
constructions and
vocabulary may be limited or repetitive.
May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness,
redundancy, or awkwardness. <br
/>May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for
academic audience. <br
/>Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied
sentence construction and
vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor.
May contain 1 error in inappropriate language for academic
audience. <br />Demonstrates
sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex
sentence construction and
vocabulary. Little-to-no unnecessary repetition.

13. 0 / 5
Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors, verb form
errors, run-ons, pronoun agreement
Contains more than 7 different grammar errors. <br />The
identical 5+ errors may be
repeated throughout. <br /><br />
Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors.
<br />The identical 3 – 4
errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The
identical 2 – 3 errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The
identical 1 – 2 errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be
repeated throughout the essay.
Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2
different errors with no
repetition.
0 / 5
Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization
errors, semicolon errors, colon errors
Contains more than 7 different punctuation/capitalization errors.
<br />The identical 5+
errors may be repeated throughout.

14. Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors.
<br />The identical 3 – 4
(2)
POINTS
(3)
POINTS
(3.50)
POINTS
(4)
POINTS
(5)
FORMAT (10%)
POINTS
(0)
POINTS
(2)
POINTS
(3)
POINTS
(3.50)
POINTS
(4)

15. POINTS
(5)
RESEARCH (10%)
POINTS
(0)
errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The
identical 2 – 3 errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The
identical 1 – 2 errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be
repeated throughout the essay.
Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2
different errors with no
repetition.
0 / 5
heading, title, margins, spacing, length*, underlined thesis
*Length for argumentative is 750 words minimum
Format or word minimum is completely lacking. Formatting
may be missing five or more
elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate
spacing or margins, and/or
thesis not underlined). Essay is severely underdeveloped, such

16. that it includes only a
paragraph or two.
Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be
missing four or more elements
(either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or
margins, or thesis not
underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.
Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be
missing three elements
(either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or
margins, or thesis not
underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.
Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be
missing two elements (either no
title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or
thesis not underlined).
Length may not meet minimum requirements (an essay that does
not meet length
minimum will score no higher than 3 in this category)
Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be
repeated throughout the essay.
Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be
missing one element (either no
title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or
thesis not underlined).
Length meets minimum requirements of 750 words.
Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of
heading, title, margins,
spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum
requirements of 750 words.

17. 0 / 5
Source minimums, incorporation of sources (including use of
signal phrases), use of research to argue topic,
MLA in-text quote formatting, Works Cited list This paper
requires at least three sources.
Sources are neither present on the Works Cited page nor
employed in the paper. No
attempt or implied intention to use sources. At least seven
different errors in documenting
sources. Similarity report may present potential plagiarism
concerns, so much so that
POINTS
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POINTS
(3)
POINTS
(3.50)
POINTS
(4)
POINTS
(5)
grading the paper is acceptable but the paper must be placed on
an account hold due to
qualifying for the “similarity match: low” QuickMark.
Source minimum requirements are not met. Research is

18. insufficient, irrelevant, or
inadequate. Sources are not incorporated at all, or are done very
poorly. Five or more
errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present.
Works Cited page either
omitted or formatted very poorly. It may be difficult or
impossible to discern which sources
are in the list.
Source minimum requirements may not be met (Note: If source
minimum is not met, the
essay will score no higher than 2 in this category). Research is
superficial and/or sources
are incorporated poorly. No more than four different errors in
documenting sources using
MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be
repeated. Works Cited page
may contain significant formatting errors, and some sources
may be omitted from the list.
Source minimum requirements (three credible sources) are met.
Research may be
superficial, sources may be poorly incorporated. No more than
three different errors in
documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These
identical errors may be
repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting
errors, but all sources are
listed.
Source minimum requirements (three credible sources) are met.
Fairly thorough research
with mostly effective use of sources. No more than two
different errors in documenting
sources using MLA style. These identical two errors may be
repeated. Works Cited page

19. may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly
listed.
Source minimum requirements (three credible sources) are met.
Thoroughly researches
the topic, uses sources effectively. No more than one different
error in documenting
sources using MLA style. This identical error may be repeated.
Works Cited page may
contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly
listed.
Argumentative Essayby mutiu OlokodanaArgumentative
EssayORIGINALITY REPORTPRIMARY
SOURCESArgumentative EssayGRADEMARK REPORTFINAL
GRADEGENERAL COMMENTSInstructorRUBRIC: ENG101
V6:ARGUMENTATIVE FINAL 0 / 5