1 6 Who Should Pay College Education in California? English 103 January 31, 2020 Who Should Pay College Education in California? In the recent decade, the number of people graduating with a college degree has declined while most of the cost of higher education in college has continued to increase. The education standard has also declined to fail to match with the high cost of fee payment. [How are standards connected with costs? Review the two concepts.] The California state and its public higher education system have made it difficult on how to account for [?] the college education despite the increasing recession [?] of the education system and standards. [This sentence is not clear because your word choices don’t fit.] It has led the significant discussion on who support [?] pay for the college fee, therefore, the need for decision making in tuition payment method and facilitation from the state. The state should subsidize college fee in California while student contributes less amount. [The larger question of who should pay for college education does not just cover college fees or tuition, but also costs like buildings, infrastructure, employees, living expenses for students, technical resources. Though fees have gone up for all three public higher education in California, they still do not pay for all these costs, and never have.] [You need a more complete introduction. Since this is a research essay, your introduction needs to tell your readers that, and then tell your readers the focus of the research and the questions you plan to answer as a result of your research. In research papers, you often do not even need a thesis. Research questions take the place of the thesis, and come at the end of your intro. They then are repeated in your Findings as headers for subsections, and help really organize the presentation of your results.] The California college education has been for long under financial aids that can be more effective when students contribute to their education (Bell, 2020). [ss—not clear] Total college education cost includes more than tuition fee that has proven to be expensive for the low-income group. Most of students who comes from low-income group segments face various challenges to raise the required fee after the given aid. [Figuring out how to pay living expenses while attending college is actually often more difficult for poor students.] It has led to a declining number of students graduating with a college degree due to the low enrollment of students coming from a low-income group in society. The state government needs to increase its financial aid in college to increase enrollment of college students. It is the role of the government to ensure equality of all sectors, including education where a member of society is not discriminated in terms of their income group (Bell, 2020). For the state governmen ...

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Who Should Pay College Education in California?
English 103
January 31, 2020
Who Should Pay College Education in California?
In the recent decade, the number of people graduating with a
college degree has declined while most of the cost of higher
education in college has continued to increase. The education
standard has also declined to fail to match with the high cost of
fee payment. [How are standards connected with costs? Review
the two concepts.] The California state and its public higher

2. education system have made it difficult on how to account for
[?] the college education despite the increasing recession [?] of
the education system and standards. [This sentence is not clear
because your word choices don’t fit.] It has led the significant
discussion on who support [?] pay for the college fee, therefore,
the need for decision making in tuition payment method and
facilitation from the state. The state should subsidize college
fee in California while student contributes less amount. [The
larger question of who should pay for college education does
not just cover college fees or tuition, but also costs like
buildings, infrastructure, employees, living expenses for
students, technical resources. Though fees have gone up for all
three public higher education in California, they still do not pay
for all these costs, and never have.] [You need a more complete
introduction. Since this is a research essay, your introduction
needs to tell your readers that, and then tell your readers the
focus of the research and the questions you plan to answer as a
result of your research. In research papers, you often do not
even need a thesis. Research questions take the place of the
thesis, and come at the end of your intro. They then are repeated
in your Findings as headers for subsections, and help really
organize the presentation of your results.]
The California college education has been for long under
financial aids that can be more effective when students
contribute to their education (Bell, 2020). [ss—not clear] Total
college education cost includes more than tuition fee that has
proven to be expensive for the low-income group. Most of
students who comes from low-income group segments face
various challenges to raise the required fee after the given aid.
[Figuring out how to pay living expenses while attending
college is actually often more difficult for poor students.] It has
led to a declining number of students graduating with a college
degree due to the low enrollment of students coming from a
low-income group in society.
The state government needs to increase its financial aid in
college to increase enrollment of college students. It is the role

3. of the government to ensure equality of all sectors, including
education where a member of society is not discriminated in
terms of their income group (Bell, 2020). For the state
government to achieve this role, it needs to fund the college
education to ensure low-income group enrollment to college.
[And where does the money come from?]
According to California law that offers free first-year tuition
fees to college students, the program should extend for the rest
of the year one spends on college (Legend, 2017). [This law
only applies to community colleges, the cheapest California
system of publicly funded higher education.] Facilitation one
year for the student was coming middle-income group and low-
income group. [ss—not clear] The government should ensure
the program process to a final year to cater for the student who
is unable to raise the fee.
The program offers [offered?] by the state of free first-year
tuition should be universals. [ss—not clear] The program only
covers students with certain eligibility standards mostly based
on the income (Legend, 2017). The programs should cover all
the students without any disparities. The program ensures the
government provides a full scholarship to all students under the
subsidized program. The program can also be integrated to
ensure another student contributes the lowest amount while the
government pays the highest amount. [You need to get much
more detailed here. What is a full scholarship? Does it pay cost
of living? Housing? What real numbers are you writing about?
And again, where would the money to provide scholarships
come from?]
The college education fee is more than college tuition that
includes other tuition costs such as food, text, housing, and
other accommodations fee. The government should change the
policies concerning the free tuition program to be inclusive of
other basic needs required by a student to accomplish their
education (Finney, Riso, Orosz, & Boland, 2014). This is
because of high living costs in California that have forced many
students coming from low-income groups fails to join college

4. despite having free tuition fees provided. The cost of
accommodation is high due to the increasing cost of housing
and access to affordable food. [Better, but add real details, real
numbers from projected budgets.]
The state should provide the highest tuition fee to a student to
achieve the goal in the education sector of providing
affordability, access, and quality education to all citizens
despite their originality. [ss—not clear] According to Lay
(2010), for California state to achieve affordably, they need to
develop and additive, categorical incentive in the funding
model. [ss—not clear] The program focuses on ensuring the
funding system of a college education is based on the money
distribution upon the improvement of student performance and
institution. [Again, you need some real numbers here.] The
program ensures all the students benefit from the funding
system hence reducing the burden of tuition feed [?] to a
student. An increase in college fee affordability funded by the
government lead to many students having easy access to quality
education despite their financial need.
The enrollment fee should be moderated by the government to
promote easy access to a college education. Most of the students
find it hard to join college despite being eligible to join due to
the high cost of enrollments that continues to increase every
year (Lay, 2010). It makes it difficult for students and well -
wishers to predict the next enrollment fee. The government
should integrate the first-year free tuition program to
accommodate [?] the enrollment fee to a college education. It
[What?] should be evaluated based on the supplement resources
previous year and current requirements rather than just
approximation of current year enrollment expenses.
The government, together with the board of governor in college
education, [Which one? Each system has one.] should provide a
financial waiver aligned with the federal aids to increase
financial sources for college education (Lay, 2010). In
California, the federal government and board of governor are
the two largest sources of college education finance hence

5. making it easy to provide enough revenue for all college
programs. It ensures even the student coming from the low -
income group have access to affordable and quality education
which is the primary goal of the education ministry in
California.
In conclusion, the government should be the primary financier
in college education to achieve affordability, access, and quality
education to Californian. It should integrate the financial aid
program that already exists to cover all students and find other
sources or students to access finance to cate for non-tuition
costs.
[Your references look well-formatted below, using APA.]
References
Bell, E. (2020). The Politics of Designing Tuition-Free College:
How Socially Constructed Target Populations Influence Policy
Support. The Journal of Higher Education, 1-39.
Finney, J. E., Riso, C., Orosz, K., & Boland, W. C. (2014).
From master plan to mediocrity: Higher education performance
& policy in California.
Lay, S. M. (2010). A Report of the Commission on the Future of
the Community College League of California. 2020 Vision:
Student Success. Community College League of California.
Legend, N. P. (2017). What College Costs for loW-InCome
CalIfornIans.
Evaluation Criteria for English 103 Research Essays

6. Required elements:
Introduction with research topic and/or research questions
Not yet
Paragraphs presenting findings from research Some
Paragraphs presenting reflections about findings Some
Conclusion paragraph(s) Some
References or Works Cited So far
Ideas & Content:
Do you clearly identify the research topic and/or research
questions? Consider adding some research questions at the end
of your introduction when you have developed a real
introduction.
Topic
Do you discuss materials from your inquiry that answer your
research questions?
Some
Do you discuss both sides of the issue? You only discuss one
position, and write the whole essay about the need for ‘the
government’ to pay for college education in California. For this
essay, you need to consider an opposing viewpoint, such as
students and their families should pay for college education
because they are the immediate beneficiaries. You then should
look at the supporting reasons for each position, as well as their
bases.
Not yet
Do you integrate researched material from your sources with
your own ideas?
Do you use good transitions and cite your sources?
Some
Do you report your findings in a well-organized sequence?
So far
Do you present your own reflections about your findings?
Some
Do you summarize and explain researched material sufficiently?

7. You don’t have that much research, and you only discuss one
position. You need to research and then present a second
position, and that will increase your research.
Not yet
Do you explain your ideas enough?
Not yet
Is your essay/report complete?
Not yet
Do you use mostly correct manuscript and citation formats?
So far
Do you need to edit for problems with sentence structure, verbs,
word choice?
Yes
Grade for research & analysis
C-
Grade for writing & format
D+
Don’t take these grades too seriously—the main reason for each
grade is that your essay is not well-developed yet, and is
missing significant parts. Your essay does not yet have a proper
introduction. It only discusses one position. And even that one
position is discussed in overly general terms, with no real
numbers. I’d say your essay is less than 50% complete as
written. The grade is for information purposes only, and will
not count.
With the grace period, you have until February 7 to write the
second half of your essay.
Codes:
ss = sentence structure (run-on or fragment)
sc = sentence connection (review connecting words and make
sure the ideas are connected correctly)

8. w = word/vocabulary problem (wrong word; wrong word form;
inconsistent plural/singular)
v = verb problem (tense or agreement)
sp = spelling
p = punctuation, sometimes quotation issues
q = problem with quotation (wrong format, incomplete
integration, dropped quotation)
12=A 11=A- 10=B+ 9=B 8=B- 7=C+ 6=C 5=C- 4=D+ 3=D

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