The document summarizes feedback from the client on two drafts of a script. For the first draft, the client suggested adding scene numbers, changing a word, making the script less formal and including more context in conversations. They also recommended emphasizing the character's desire to participate in Christmas celebrations. For the second draft, the client requested a description of the main character and minor edits, and said once those changes were made the script would be complete.

1. Diary
Tuesday 27th
November 2018
Today, I sat down and talked with my client about the firstdraft of my script.
The feedback was as follows;
 Must add in scenenumbers.
 “Joyousness” is nota word and I need to change that to “Joyfulness”
 I should make my script slightly less formaland should act as though
India is talking to a friend. Itneeds to include full sentences so that we
understand whatis going on better.
 When talking about Christmas Eve, I should make it as more of a plea,
showing shereally wants to enjoy the festivities and get involved in it.
 When the text is shown, justcontinue in the direction description.
 Check line formatting.
 Allude to an incident in the past, in the winter, being the main route of
the depression.
Thursday 29th
November 2018
Today, I sat down and talked with my client about the firstdraft of my script.
The feedback was as follows;
 Add a description of India at the startas it is the firsttime that weare
meeting her and she is the main character.
 Apostropheon day’s should be days.
 My client particularly liked my language use.
 Move scene 14 down so that it is on one page.
 Once this is completed, I will have my completed script.