You did a nice job researching your topic and have some very interesting information.  However, your paper still has more than 30% of the total text in direct quotations.  The general rule of thumb is that no more than 10% of the total text should be in quotes.  The rest of the material should be paraphrased from your original source.  Reserve the use of quotations for material that is very difficult to paraphrase.  Please remove the quotations and paraphrase the material.  Once you have finished editing the paper, please re-submit it and I will grade.  This was the response I received from my teacher after I submitted my paper on Canada... Stage 1: 1800’s Major event in the country: The key events that took place were the depopulation of Aboriginal peoples, which was largely due to the spread of diseases and the arrival of the white men as, early as the 16 th century. Also Slavery was outlawed in Canada in 1807. In 1812 the America went to was with Great Brittan and attacked Canada in 1812. Birth and death rate at this time: The country had a very high birth rate until the around mid 1900 and it grew, in fact the country grew steadily over the years and still is today. Events that impacted the Environmental: The French was among the first to come to Canada in search of natural resources, such as goal and established trading post in the country. Stage 2: 1900”s Major event in the country: The First World War had a major negative effect on the country. However the second world war had and positive effect on Canada. Birth and death rate at this time: The birth rate was down and deaths were up at this time. However the birth rate was back on the raise during and after the Second World War and is still growing today. Events that impacted the Environmental: The country had an Economic growth after the war and became very prosperous. Environmentalist going by the name Grey Owl went on a mission to save the Beaver Stage 3: 1960’s Major event in the country: None reported other than the end of the Baby boom area. Birth and death rate at this time: There was well over 18 million people living in the country and the country’s birth rate grew 2.7 % each year. Events that impacted the Environmental: The local Natives are given their right’s to vote. Also English and French becomes the National languages Stage 4: 1990”s Major event in the country: Immigration number set at 225,000 and the country would elect its first female Leaded or Prim Mister. Also in the first for Canada, the country would experience its first recession. The country would see its first female go to space. Birth and death rate at this time: Today Canada has one of the lowest death rates in the world among infants. This is due to the countries advances it has made in the medical field. Assignment 2: Demographic Transitions Demographic transition is the process in which a nation transitions from being a less industrialized society, wit.

1. You did a nice job researching your topic and have some very
interesting information. However, your paper still has more
than 30% of the total text in direct quotations. The general rule
of thumb is that no more than 10% of the total text should be in
quotes. The rest of the material should be paraphrased from
your original source. Reserve the use of quotations for material
that is very difficult to paraphrase. Please remove the
quotations and paraphrase the material. Once you have finished
editing the paper, please re-submit it and I will grade. This was
the response I received from my teacher after I submitted my
paper on Canada...
Stage 1: 1800’s
Major event in the country:
The key events that took place were the
depopulation of Aboriginal peoples, which was largely due to
the spread of diseases and the arrival of the white men as, early
as the 16
th
century. Also Slavery was outlawed in Canada in 1807. In 1812
the America went to was with Great Brittan and attacked
Canada in 1812.
Birth and death rate at this time:
The country had a very high birth rate until the around mid
1900 and it grew, in fact the country grew steadily over the
years and still is today.

2. Events that impacted the Environmental:
The French was among the first to come to Canada in search of
natural resources, such as goal and established trading post in
the country.
Stage 2: 1900”s
Major event in the country:
The First World War had a major negative effect on the country.
However the second world war had and positive effect on
Canada.
Birth and death rate at this time:
The birth rate was down and deaths were up at this time.
However the birth rate was back on the raise during and after
the Second World War and is still growing today.
Events that impacted the Environmental:
The country had an Economic growth
after the war and became very prosperous.
Environmentalist going by the name Grey Owl went on a
mission to save the Beaver
Stage 3: 1960’s
Major event in the country:

3. None reported other than the end of the Baby boom area.
Birth and death rate at this time:
There was well over 18 million people living in the country and
the country’s birth rate grew 2.7 % each year.
Events that impacted the Environmental:
The local Natives are given their right’s to vote. Also English
and French becomes the National languages
Stage 4: 1990”s
Major event in the country:
Immigration number set at 225,000 and the country would elect
its first female Leaded or Prim Mister.
Also in the first for Canada, the country would experience its
first recession. The country would see its first female go to
space.
Birth and death rate at this time:
Today Canada has one of the lowest death rates in the world
among infants. This is due to the countries advances it has made
in the medical field.

4. Assignment 2: Demographic Transitions
Demographic transition is the process in which a nation
transitions from being a less industrialized society, with high
birth and death rates, to an industrialized nation, with lower
birth and death rates. Many countries have already been through
this transition including the United States, England, and
Canada.
The demographic transition to an industrialized society is
detrimental for the environment because industrialized societies
tend to use up nonrenewable resources and give off pollution.
Industrialized nations have the largest ecological and carbon
footprint relative to developing or nonindustrialized countries.
Fortunately, there are some benefits to the process of
demographic transition, including lower birth and death rates.
Essentially, people in industrialized countries have fewer
children and this in turn helps control the overall population
size.
Demographic transition involves the following five stages:
Stage 1
High birth rate, high death rate, low population size
Stage 2
High birth rate, decreasing death rate, increasing population
size
Stage 3
Decreasing birth rate, decreasing death rate, increasing
population size
Stage 4
Low birth rate, low death rate, high population size
Stage 5
Low birth rate, low death rate, population size decreasing
It should be noted that stage 5 is controversial, and it is
sometimes not considered to be a stage. This is partially
because so few countries are at this stage.
The following graph depicts the various stages of demographic

5. transition:
Using the stages listed above, create a demographic and
environmental timeline for one industrialized country,
excluding the United States. The following are a few suggested
industrialized nations:
Canada
England
Germany
Russia
Italy
You can
download
the Demographic and Environmental Timeline—United States
of America to review an example of such a timeline.
Include the following points in your timeline in order to
examine the advantages and drawbacks of demographic
transition in your selected country:
Major historical changes that caused the shift from one stage to
another (if available).
Changing population size through time (increasing or
decreasing).
Increase or decrease of birth and death rates through time—
particularly when considering the process of industrialization.
Environmental impact of this transition.
Dates (if available), series of events, and scholarly references
for these items.
Support your timeline with appropriate examples and a
minimum of three credible resources.
Present your timeline in a media that best displays the
information you researched. This can be in Microsoft Word, or
Microsoft PowerPoint. Apply APA standards to citation of
sources. Use the following file naming convention:
LastnameFirstInitial_M2_A2.doc,
LastnameFirstInitial_M2_A2.xls, or
LastnameFirstInitial_M2_A2.ppt.
By

6. Wednesday, October 5, 2016
, deliver your assignment to the
M2: Assignment 2 Dropbox
.
Assignment 2 Grading Criteria
Maximum Points
Created a detailed, demographic and environmental timeline for
a selected industrialized country, focusing on the shift from one
stage to the next and the environmental consequences that were
an outcome of this change.
60
Supported statements with appropriate examples and at least
three credible sources.
20
Wrote in a clear, concise, and organized manner; demonstrated
ethical scholarship in accurate representation and attribution of
sources; displayed accurate spelling, grammar, and punctuation.
20
Total:
100

7. Reference
Argosy University Online library (2016).
Source
www.
environmental
history.org