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Media Analysis
by Kelechi Onyekwere
Submission date: 07-Jul-2021 10:31PM (UTC-0400)
Submission ID: 1616968636
File name:
oodle_temp_turnitintool_1301193303.Media_Analysis_Onyekw
ere.docx (17.87K)
Word count: 617
Character count: 3105
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Include evid
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Media Analysis
ORIGINALITY REPORT
PRIMARY SOURCES
theloraxfilm.wikia.com
Internet Source
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FINAL GRADE
1/1
Media Analysis
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
Hello, Kelechi! I enjoyed reading your media
analysis essay. You have a great draft going here
as you've included many specific details and
examples throughout to examine how one part
affects the whole media production.
I've made some rubric-specific notes throughout
for your consideration. For example, you'll need to
clarify your introduction to introduce the film right
from the beginning.
Also, you should revise your thesis a bit as well as
add content throughout. Make sure to use
citations in MLA style as well.
I look forward to reading more of your work,
Kelechi.
JV
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Hello!
My name is J.V. I hope these comments will assist you as you
continue to learn about the
writing process. I look forward to reading your work!
*Revise Title* | Format
Here, instead of using the topic of the assignment or a shortened
title, you could create a
title which captures the reader's attention. Example:
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A narrative essay on a first road trip: Waterfalls and Concrete
A compare and contrast essay: Is One Mode of Technology
Better?
A research/argumentative essay: Spyware: What Matters Most
A persuasive letter: Families Should Spend Time Together
What do you think?
Wordy | Language
Wordy:
If you use too many words to describe a relatively minor point,
your paper may seem wordy.
In order to be as concise as possible, trim your sentences down
and use longer, more
meaningful words. Try to use fewer two- and three-letter words,
passive constructions, and
weak verbs such as "seem" and "appear."
Additional Comment
Instead, introduce the film or book you'll be discussing (the
Lorax).
*Format citation to meet MLA style | Research
You should punctuate/format your citations correctly (here's a
link to MLA In-Text Citations
Basics).
Also, here's an example:
Paraphrase:
...and then the economy would flourish (Smith 45).
Direct quote:
"...and the economy would do well" (Smith 45).
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla
_formatting_and_style_guide/mla_in_text_citations_the_basics.
html
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Or, you'll use part of the name of the article (1-3 words) if there
is no author, like this:
("Global Warming" 562).
No page numbers:
("Global Warming").
Always place the period at the end of the parenthetical citation.
In addition, make sure to add the page number if your source is
a downloadable file with
page numbers (or a print source).
Comment 1 | Thesis
Be more specific here. Look at body paragraph two and three to
see how you could clarify
your thesis.
Review topic sentence | Organization
Review your claim to be sure it specifically and completely
addresses the task.
CTRL - C | Research
This section of writing appears to be "CTRL - C," a reference to
the keyboard shortcut for
copy. “CTRL - C” plagiarism occurs when a significant portion
of text is copied without any
changes or alterations. Paraphrase by writing the statement in
your own words and adding a
citation.
Comment 2
no comment
*Format citation to meet MLA style | Research
You should punctuate/format your citations correctly (here's a
link to MLA In-Text Citations
Basics).
Also, here's an example:
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla
_formatting_and_style_guide/mla_in_text_citations_the_basics.
html
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Paraphrase:
...and then the economy would flourish (Smith 45).
Direct quote:
"...and the economy would do well" (Smith 45).
Or, you'll use part of the name of the article (1-3 words) if there
is no author, like this:
("Global Warming" 562).
No page numbers:
("Global Warming").
Always place the period at the end of the parenthetical citation.
In addition, make sure to add the page number if your source is
a downloadable file with
page numbers (or a print source).
*Develop ideas further | Support
Here, you could develop this idea much further. Think about
this: How does this
situation/event/evidence support my idea/claim? How can I use
this idea to connect to my
claim? How can I help readers see the connection between this
event and my thesis?
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Include evidence | Research
Specific evidence (such as examples, facts, or quotes from a
source) is needed to support
your ideas. Find and include evidence from the source(s) to
support this idea.
Additional Comment
Don't forget to use evidence to support your ideas.
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*Develop ideas further | Support
Here, you could develop this idea much further. Think about
this: How does this
situation/event/evidence support my idea/claim? How can I use
this idea to connect to my
claim? How can I help readers see the connection between this
event and my thesis?
*Revise parenthetical citations in MLA | Research
You'll want to reformat your parenthetical citations to meet
MLA style. Here is a helpful
resource for revising your citations.
Connect to claim | Support
This sentence is starting to relate to your position on the topic.
Explain to your readers how
this idea supports your claim.
Revise conclusion | Organization
A conclusion works to bring your argument to a close, leaving
your reader fully persuaded
about your position on this scientific topic. Include a clear
conclusion at the end of your
writing in order to bring the claim, evidence, and reasoning that
you have discussed to an
effective conclusion.
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https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla
_formatting_and_style_guide/mla_in_text_citations_the_basics.
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RUBRIC: ENG102V3 MEDIA ANALYSIS_DRAFT
THESIS
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
SUPPORT
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
Above
Average
Thesis & Focus: Thesis, focus on single element of media,
central idea, audience, purpose, digressions
Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of
audience and purpose.
Focus is unclear. Readers cannot discern the essay’s central
idea.
Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently
addressed. Focus might
be unclear or muddled between more than one part of chosen
media. Reveals
limited awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either
lacking or
inconsistently addressed.
Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or
otherwise problematic.
Focus is clear but perhaps digresses some. Awareness of
audience may be
adequate but inconsistent. Central idea is perhaps too general
and supported by
irrelevant examples.
Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout
most of the paper.
Focus is limited to ONE part of chosen media. Awareness of
audience and purpose
is sufficient. Central idea is clear and maintained in most of the
essay.
Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the
entire paper. Focus is
limited to ONE part of chosen media. Paper demonstrates a
sophisticated
awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea/focus
maintained throughout.
Below
Average
Support & Development Thesis support, thesis development,
analysis of media, use of examples, logic,
and reason
No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or
evidence. Body of
essay fails to analyze chosen media. Topic development is
flawed or non-existent.
Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. Body of
essay analyzes
chosen media very ineffectively. Topic development may have
been attempted, but
does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear
reasoning.
More support is needed. Some examples may be vague. Body of
essay analyzes
chosen media, perhaps ineffectively. Some irrelevant support
may be present, but
most evidence supports thesis.
Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way. Body of
essay analyzes
chosen media effectively. Examples are sufficient. Thesis is
supported and
developed in most paragraphs.
Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement
of evidence. Body
of essay analyzes chosen media very effectively. All assertions
are supported and
relate to thesis.
ORGANIZATION
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
LANGUAGE
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
Average
Coherence & Organization: Introduction, conclusion, body
paragraphs, transitions, topic sentences
No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no
transitions. Demonstrates
little-to-no understanding of organization. Many sentences
within paragraphs do
not relate to each other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May
contain no discernible
topic sentences.
Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic.
Few transitions.
Perhaps numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic
topic sentences.
Demonstrates little understanding of organization.
Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one
significant weakness is
present: undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion,
illogical paragraph
order. Adequate transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some
paragraphs may
lack clear topic sentences. Demonstrates basic understanding of
organization.
Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although
improvements could be made.
Most paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a
clear plan of
development. Transitions are clear throughout most of the
paper. Demonstrates
good understanding of organization.
Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion:
Introduction establishes
the essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and
main ideas without
merely copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and
effective transitions
are present throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent
understanding of
organization.
Superior
Language & Style: Word choice, repetition, redundancy,
awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form
(their/there, etc.), typos/misspellings, vocabulary
May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness,
redundancy, or
awkwardness. May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate
language for
academic audience. Fails to demonstrate competent language
use; sentences and
vocabulary are inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent.
May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or
awkwardness. May
contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic
audience. Contains
repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure
and/or limited
vocabulary.
May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness,
redundancy, or awkwardness.
May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic
audience.
Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence
constructions and
vocabulary may be limited or repetitive.
May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness,
redundancy, or awkwardness.
May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic
audience.
Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied
sentence construction
and vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor.
SUPERIOR
GRAMMAR
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
PUNCTUATION
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
FORMAT
INADEQUATE
May contain 1 error in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or
awkwardness. May
contain 1 error in inappropriate language for academic
audience. Demonstrates
sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex
sentence construction
and vocabulary. Little-to-no unnecessary repetition.
Superior
Grammar: Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors,
verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun
agreement
Contains more than 5 different grammar errors. The identical 3
– 4 errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 4 – 5 different grammar errors. The identical 2 – 3
errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 2 – 3 different grammar errors. The identical 1 – 2
errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 1 grammar error, which may be repeated throughout
the essay.
Contains either no grammar errors, or 1 – 2 different errors with
no repetition.
Superior
Punctuation & Capitalization: Comma errors, comma splices,
apostrophe errors, capitalization errors,
semicolon errors, colon errors
Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors.
The identical 3 –
4 errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The
identical 2 – 3
errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capi talization errors. The
identical 1 – 2
errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be
repeated throughout
the essay.
Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2
different errors with
no repetition.
Above
Average
Format: heading, title, margins, spacing, length, underlined
thesis, other assignment-specific required
elements *Length for Media Analysis is 500 words minimum
Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be
missing four or more
elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate
spacing or margins, or
thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum
requirements.
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
RESEARCH
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be
missing three
elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate
spacing or margins, or
thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum
requirements.
Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be
missing two elements
(either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or
margins, or thesis
not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.
Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be
missing one element
(either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or
margins, or thesis
not underlined). Length meets minimum requirements of 500
words.
Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of
heading, title,
margins, spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum
requirements of 500
words.
Average
Source minimums, incorporation of sources (including use of
signal phrases), use of research to argue
topic, MLA in-text quote formatting, Works Cited list This
paper requires at least two sources: chosen
media + one other source.
Source minimum requirements are not met. Research is
insufficient, irrelevant, or
inadequate. Sources are not incorporated at all, or are done very
poorly. Five or
more errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be
present. Works Cited
page either omitted or formatted very poorly. It may be difficult
or impossible to
discern which sources are in the list.
Source requirements may not be met (Note: If source minimum
is not met, the
essay will score no higher than 2 in this category). Research is
superficial and/or
sources are incorporated poorly. No more than four different
errors in
documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These
identical errors may
be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant
formatting errors, and
some sources may be omitted from the list.
Source requirements are met. Research may be superficial,
sources may be poorly
incorporated. No more than three different errors in
documenting sources using
MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be
repeated. Works Cited
page may contain significant formatting errors, but all sources
are listed.
Source requirements are met. Fairly thorough research with
mostly effective use
of sources. No more than two different errors in documenting
sources using MLA
style. These identical two errors may be repeated. Works Cited
page may contain
minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.
Source requirements are met. Thoroughly researches the topic,
uses sources
effectively. No more than one different error in documenting
sources using MLA
style. This identical error may be repeated. Works Cited page
may contain minor
formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.
Illustration Essay
by Kelechi Onyekwere
Submission date: 07-Jul-2021 10:32PM (UTC-0400)
Submission ID: 1616969271
File name:
e_temp_turnitintool_1983475431.Illustration_Essay_Onyekwere
.docx (17.08K)
Word count: 559
Character count: 3037
Welcome
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underline thesis 4 5
6
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Illustration Essay
ORIGINALITY REPORT
PRIMARY SOURCES
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FINAL GRADE
1/1
Illustration Essay
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
Dear Kelechi,
This essay is off topic. According to the
requirements of this assignment, you have to
select one of the topics mentioned in the
assignment and write an esay on it.
Please go carefully through the assignment
descriptin and rewrite this assignment.
Please go through my comments in thesis, support,
organization, punctuation, and format
DMK
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Welcome
Hello!
Good day! Glad to grade your paper today!
DMK
Comment 1 | Thesis
This indicates that this is an off topic essay. The description
provided in this introduction
does not conform with any topic presented in the assignment
thus makingthis assignment
off topic.
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Comment 2 | Organization
This introduction cannot be graded as this is an off topic essay.
Please introduce the topic
from the list given in the essay.
Comment 3 | Thesis
No identifable thesis. Frame a thesis identifing the main idea
and the poits of illustration.
underline thesis | Format
Thesis not underlined.
Comment 4 | Thesis
Specific: If you are illustrating qualities that make up
something: In order for a friend to be
considered a true friend, he or she must be loyal, honest, and
trustworthy. OR If you are
illustrating a recipe: Fresh produce, mixing utensils, and about
a half an hour are all you
need to create excellent guacamole.
Comment 5 | Thesis
General: If you are illustrating qualities that make up
something: In order for a friend to be
considered a true friend, he or she must be (characteristic 1),
(characteristic 2), and
(characteristic 3). OR If you are illustrating a recipe: (Add a
range of ingredients), (add major
utensils needed), and (add time necessary) are all that are
required to make (add dish).
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Comment 6 | Support
This paragraph cnnot be graded as this is an off topic
assignment. Choose a topic from one
given in the list and develop suppport for the same.
Comment 7 | Support
This paragraph cannot be graded as this is an off topic essay.
Comment 8 | Organization
This is not a relevant conclusion as it is off topic. Frame a
conclusion summng u the points of
one of the topics given in the list.
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RUBRIC: ENG 102V3 ILLUSTRATION_DRAFT
THESIS
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
SUPPORT
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
ORGANIZATION
Thesis & Focus: Thesis, central idea, audience, purpose,
digressions
Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of
audience and purpose.
Readers cannot discern the essay’s central idea.
Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently
addressed. Reveals
limited awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either
lacking or
inconsistently addressed.
Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or
otherwise problematic.
Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent.
Central idea is perhaps
too general and supported by irrelevant examples.
Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout
most of the paper.
Awareness of audience is sufficient. Central idea is clear and
maintained in most
of the essay.
Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the
entire paper. Paper
demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and
purpose. Central
idea/focus maintained throughout.
Thesis support, thesis development, use of details and examples,
logic, and reason
No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or
evidence. No topic
development. Little-to-no details or examples provided. Topic
development is
flawed or non-existent.
Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. Poor
use of details and
examples to support the thesis. Topic development may have
been attempted, but
does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear
reasoning.
More support is needed. Some examples may be vague.
Adequate use of details
and examples that show, explain, and support the thesis. Some
irrelevant support
may be present, but most evidence supports thesis.
Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way. Good use
of details and
clear examples that show, explain, and support the thesis.
Thesis is supported and
developed in most paragraphs.
Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement
of evidence.
Excellent use of details and clear examples that show, explain,
and support the
thesis. All assertions are supported and relate to thesis.
Coherence & Organization: Introduction, conclusion, body
paragraphs, transitions, topic sentences
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
LANGUAGE
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no
transitions. Demonstrates
little-to-no understanding of organization. Many sentences
within paragraphs do
not relate to each other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May
contain no discernible
topic sentences.
Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic.
Few transitions.
Perhaps numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic
topic sentences.
Demonstrates little understanding of organization.
Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one
significant weakness is
present: undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion,
illogical paragraph
order. Adequate transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some
paragraphs may
lack clear topic sentences. Demonstrates basic understanding of
organization.
Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although
improvements could be made.
Most paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a
clear plan of
development. Transitions are clear throughout most of the
paper. Demonstrates
good understanding of organization.
Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion:
Introduction establishes
the essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and
main ideas without
merely copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and
effective transitions
are present throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent
understanding of
organization.
Superior
Language & Style: Word choice, repetition, redundancy,
awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form
(their/there, etc.), typos/misspellings, vocabulary
May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness,
redundancy, or
awkwardness. May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate
language for
academic audience. Fails to demonstrate competent language
use; sentences and
vocabulary are inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent.
May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or
awkwardness. May
contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic
audience. Contains
repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure
and/or limited
vocabulary.
May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness,
redundancy, or awkwardness.
May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic
audience.
Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence
constructions and
vocabulary may be limited or repetitive.
May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness,
redundancy, or awkwardness.
May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic
audience.
Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied
sentence construction
and vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor.
May contain 1 error in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or
awkwardness. May
contain 1 error in inappropriate language for academic
audience. Demonstrates
GRAMMAR
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
PUNCTUATION
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
FORMAT
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex
sentence construction
and vocabulary. Little-to-no unnecessary repetition.
Superior
Grammar: Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors,
verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun
agreement
Contains more than 5 different grammar errors. The identical 3
– 4 errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 4 – 5 different grammar errors. The identical 2 – 3
errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 2 – 3 different grammar errors. The identical 1 – 2
errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 1 grammar error, which may be repeated throughout
the essay.
Contains either no grammar errors, or 1 – 2 different errors with
no repetition.
Superior
Punctuation & Capitalization: Comma errors, comma splices,
apostrophe errors, capitalization errors,
semicolon errors, colon errors
Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors.
The identical 3 –
4 errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The
identical 2 – 3
errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The
identical 1 – 2
errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be
repeated throughout
the essay.
Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2
different errors with
no repetition.
Superior
Format: heading, title, margins, spacing, length, underlined
thesis, other assignment-specific required
elements *Length for Illustration is 500 words minimum
Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be
missing four or more
elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate
spacing or margins, or
thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum
requirements.
Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be
missing three
elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate
spacing or margins, or
thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum
requirements.
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
RESEARCH
INADEQUATE
BELOW AVERAGE
AVERAGE
ABOVE AVERAGE
SUPERIOR
Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be
missing two elements
(either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or
margins, or thesis
not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements
(an essay that does
not meet length minimum will score no higher than 3 in this
category)
Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be
missing one element
(either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or
margins, or thesis
not underlined). Length meets minimum requirements.
Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of
heading, title,
margins, spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum
requirements.
Superior
Source minimums, incorporation of sources (including use of
signal phrases), use of research to argue
topic, MLA in-text quote formatting, Works Cited list. This
paper requires at least one source.
Source minimum requirements are not met. Research is
insufficient, irrelevant, or
inadequate. Sources are not incorporated at all, or are done very
poorly. Five or
more errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be
present. Works Cited
page either omitted or formatted very poorly. It may be difficult
or impossible to
discern which sources are in the list.
Source minimum requirements may not be met (Note: If source
minimum is not
met, the essay will score no higher than 2 in this category).
Research is superficial
and/or sources are incorporated poorly. No more than four
different errors in
documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These
identical errors may
be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant
formatting errors, and
some sources may be omitted from the list.
Source minimum requirements are met. Research may be
superficial, sources may
be poorly incorporated. No more than three different errors in
documenting
sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors
may be repeated.
Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, but
all sources are
listed.
Source minimum requirements are met. Fairly thorough research
with mostly
effective use of sources. No more than two different errors in
documenting
sources using MLA style. These identical two errors may be
repeated. Works Cited
page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are
clearly listed.
Source minimum requirements are met. Thoroughly researches
the topic, uses
sources effectively. No more than one different error in
documenting sources
using MLA style. This identical error may be repeated. Works
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Media Analysisby Kelechi OnyekwereSubmission date 07-Ju

  • 1. Media Analysis by Kelechi Onyekwere Submission date: 07-Jul-2021 10:31PM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: 1616968636 File name: oodle_temp_turnitintool_1301193303.Media_Analysis_Onyekw ere.docx (17.87K) Word count: 617 Character count: 3105 1 Hello! *Revise T Wordy *Format citati 1 Review to CTRL - C 2 *Format citatio
  • 2. *Develop id Include evid *Develop id *Revise parenthet Connect to Revise conclus 3% SIMILARITY INDEX 3% INTERNET SOURCES 0% PUBLICATIONS 0% STUDENT PAPERS 1 3% Exclude quotes Off Exclude bibliography On
  • 3. Exclude matches < 3 words Media Analysis ORIGINALITY REPORT PRIMARY SOURCES theloraxfilm.wikia.com Internet Source QM QM FINAL GRADE 1/1 Media Analysis GRADEMARK REPORT GENERAL COMMENTS Instructor Hello, Kelechi! I enjoyed reading your media analysis essay. You have a great draft going here as you've included many specific details and examples throughout to examine how one part affects the whole media production. I've made some rubric-specific notes throughout for your consideration. For example, you'll need to clarify your introduction to introduce the film right
  • 4. from the beginning. Also, you should revise your thesis a bit as well as add content throughout. Make sure to use citations in MLA style as well. I look forward to reading more of your work, Kelechi. JV PAGE 1 Hello! My name is J.V. I hope these comments will assist you as you continue to learn about the writing process. I look forward to reading your work! *Revise Title* | Format Here, instead of using the topic of the assignment or a shortened title, you could create a title which captures the reader's attention. Example: QM QM A narrative essay on a first road trip: Waterfalls and Concrete A compare and contrast essay: Is One Mode of Technology Better?
  • 5. A research/argumentative essay: Spyware: What Matters Most A persuasive letter: Families Should Spend Time Together What do you think? Wordy | Language Wordy: If you use too many words to describe a relatively minor point, your paper may seem wordy. In order to be as concise as possible, trim your sentences down and use longer, more meaningful words. Try to use fewer two- and three-letter words, passive constructions, and weak verbs such as "seem" and "appear." Additional Comment Instead, introduce the film or book you'll be discussing (the Lorax). *Format citation to meet MLA style | Research You should punctuate/format your citations correctly (here's a link to MLA In-Text Citations Basics). Also, here's an example: Paraphrase: ...and then the economy would flourish (Smith 45). Direct quote: "...and the economy would do well" (Smith 45).
  • 6. https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla _formatting_and_style_guide/mla_in_text_citations_the_basics. html QM QM QM Or, you'll use part of the name of the article (1-3 words) if there is no author, like this: ("Global Warming" 562). No page numbers: ("Global Warming"). Always place the period at the end of the parenthetical citation. In addition, make sure to add the page number if your source is a downloadable file with page numbers (or a print source). Comment 1 | Thesis Be more specific here. Look at body paragraph two and three to see how you could clarify your thesis. Review topic sentence | Organization Review your claim to be sure it specifically and completely addresses the task.
  • 7. CTRL - C | Research This section of writing appears to be "CTRL - C," a reference to the keyboard shortcut for copy. “CTRL - C” plagiarism occurs when a significant portion of text is copied without any changes or alterations. Paraphrase by writing the statement in your own words and adding a citation. Comment 2 no comment *Format citation to meet MLA style | Research You should punctuate/format your citations correctly (here's a link to MLA In-Text Citations Basics). Also, here's an example: https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla _formatting_and_style_guide/mla_in_text_citations_the_basics. html QM QM Paraphrase: ...and then the economy would flourish (Smith 45). Direct quote:
  • 8. "...and the economy would do well" (Smith 45). Or, you'll use part of the name of the article (1-3 words) if there is no author, like this: ("Global Warming" 562). No page numbers: ("Global Warming"). Always place the period at the end of the parenthetical citation. In addition, make sure to add the page number if your source is a downloadable file with page numbers (or a print source). *Develop ideas further | Support Here, you could develop this idea much further. Think about this: How does this situation/event/evidence support my idea/claim? How can I use this idea to connect to my claim? How can I help readers see the connection between this event and my thesis? PAGE 2 Include evidence | Research Specific evidence (such as examples, facts, or quotes from a source) is needed to support your ideas. Find and include evidence from the source(s) to support this idea. Additional Comment Don't forget to use evidence to support your ideas.
  • 9. QM QM QM QM *Develop ideas further | Support Here, you could develop this idea much further. Think about this: How does this situation/event/evidence support my idea/claim? How can I use this idea to connect to my claim? How can I help readers see the connection between this event and my thesis? *Revise parenthetical citations in MLA | Research You'll want to reformat your parenthetical citations to meet MLA style. Here is a helpful resource for revising your citations. Connect to claim | Support This sentence is starting to relate to your position on the topic. Explain to your readers how this idea supports your claim. Revise conclusion | Organization A conclusion works to bring your argument to a close, leaving your reader fully persuaded about your position on this scientific topic. Include a clear conclusion at the end of your
  • 10. writing in order to bring the claim, evidence, and reasoning that you have discussed to an effective conclusion. PAGE 3 https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla _formatting_and_style_guide/mla_in_text_citations_the_basics. html RUBRIC: ENG102V3 MEDIA ANALYSIS_DRAFT THESIS INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR SUPPORT INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR
  • 11. Above Average Thesis & Focus: Thesis, focus on single element of media, central idea, audience, purpose, digressions Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of audience and purpose. Focus is unclear. Readers cannot discern the essay’s central idea. Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently addressed. Focus might be unclear or muddled between more than one part of chosen media. Reveals limited awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either lacking or inconsistently addressed. Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or otherwise problematic. Focus is clear but perhaps digresses some. Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent. Central idea is perhaps too general and supported by irrelevant examples. Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout most of the paper. Focus is limited to ONE part of chosen media. Awareness of audience and purpose is sufficient. Central idea is clear and maintained in most of the essay.
  • 12. Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the entire paper. Focus is limited to ONE part of chosen media. Paper demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea/focus maintained throughout. Below Average Support & Development Thesis support, thesis development, analysis of media, use of examples, logic, and reason No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or evidence. Body of essay fails to analyze chosen media. Topic development is flawed or non-existent. Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. Body of essay analyzes chosen media very ineffectively. Topic development may have been attempted, but does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear reasoning. More support is needed. Some examples may be vague. Body of essay analyzes chosen media, perhaps ineffectively. Some irrelevant support may be present, but most evidence supports thesis. Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way. Body of essay analyzes chosen media effectively. Examples are sufficient. Thesis is supported and
  • 13. developed in most paragraphs. Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement of evidence. Body of essay analyzes chosen media very effectively. All assertions are supported and relate to thesis. ORGANIZATION INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR LANGUAGE INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE Average Coherence & Organization: Introduction, conclusion, body paragraphs, transitions, topic sentences
  • 14. No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no transitions. Demonstrates little-to-no understanding of organization. Many sentences within paragraphs do not relate to each other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May contain no discernible topic sentences. Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic. Few transitions. Perhaps numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic topic sentences. Demonstrates little understanding of organization. Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one significant weakness is present: undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion, illogical paragraph order. Adequate transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some paragraphs may lack clear topic sentences. Demonstrates basic understanding of organization. Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although improvements could be made. Most paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a clear plan of development. Transitions are clear throughout most of the paper. Demonstrates good understanding of organization. Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion: Introduction establishes the essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and main ideas without
  • 15. merely copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and effective transitions are present throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent understanding of organization. Superior Language & Style: Word choice, repetition, redundancy, awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form (their/there, etc.), typos/misspellings, vocabulary May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Fails to demonstrate competent language use; sentences and vocabulary are inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent. May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Contains repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure and/or limited vocabulary. May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence constructions and vocabulary may be limited or repetitive.
  • 16. May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied sentence construction and vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor. SUPERIOR GRAMMAR INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR PUNCTUATION INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR
  • 17. FORMAT INADEQUATE May contain 1 error in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 1 error in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex sentence construction and vocabulary. Little-to-no unnecessary repetition. Superior Grammar: Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors, verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun agreement Contains more than 5 different grammar errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 4 – 5 different grammar errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 2 – 3 different grammar errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 1 grammar error, which may be repeated throughout the essay. Contains either no grammar errors, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition.
  • 18. Superior Punctuation & Capitalization: Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization errors, semicolon errors, colon errors Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capi talization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay. Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition. Above Average Format: heading, title, margins, spacing, length, underlined thesis, other assignment-specific required elements *Length for Media Analysis is 500 words minimum Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing four or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate
  • 19. spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements. BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR RESEARCH INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing three elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements. Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing two elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or
  • 20. margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements. Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing one element (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length meets minimum requirements of 500 words. Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of heading, title, margins, spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum requirements of 500 words. Average Source minimums, incorporation of sources (including use of signal phrases), use of research to argue topic, MLA in-text quote formatting, Works Cited list This paper requires at least two sources: chosen media + one other source. Source minimum requirements are not met. Research is insufficient, irrelevant, or inadequate. Sources are not incorporated at all, or are done very poorly. Five or more errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. Works Cited page either omitted or formatted very poorly. It may be difficult or impossible to discern which sources are in the list. Source requirements may not be met (Note: If source minimum is not met, the
  • 21. essay will score no higher than 2 in this category). Research is superficial and/or sources are incorporated poorly. No more than four different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, and some sources may be omitted from the list. Source requirements are met. Research may be superficial, sources may be poorly incorporated. No more than three different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, but all sources are listed. Source requirements are met. Fairly thorough research with mostly effective use of sources. No more than two different errors in documenting sources using MLA style. These identical two errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed. Source requirements are met. Thoroughly researches the topic, uses sources effectively. No more than one different error in documenting sources using MLA style. This identical error may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.
  • 22. Illustration Essay by Kelechi Onyekwere Submission date: 07-Jul-2021 10:32PM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: 1616969271 File name: e_temp_turnitintool_1983475431.Illustration_Essay_Onyekwere .docx (17.08K) Word count: 559 Character count: 3037 Welcome 1 2 3 underline thesis 4 5 6 7 8
  • 23. 0% SIMILARITY INDEX 0% INTERNET SOURCES 0% PUBLICATIONS 0% STUDENT PAPERS Exclude quotes Off Exclude bibliography On Exclude matches < 3 words Illustration Essay ORIGINALITY REPORT PRIMARY SOURCES QM FINAL GRADE 1/1 Illustration Essay GRADEMARK REPORT GENERAL COMMENTS
  • 24. Instructor Dear Kelechi, This essay is off topic. According to the requirements of this assignment, you have to select one of the topics mentioned in the assignment and write an esay on it. Please go carefully through the assignment descriptin and rewrite this assignment. Please go through my comments in thesis, support, organization, punctuation, and format DMK PAGE 1 Welcome Hello! Good day! Glad to grade your paper today! DMK Comment 1 | Thesis This indicates that this is an off topic essay. The description provided in this introduction does not conform with any topic presented in the assignment thus makingthis assignment off topic.
  • 25. QM Comment 2 | Organization This introduction cannot be graded as this is an off topic essay. Please introduce the topic from the list given in the essay. Comment 3 | Thesis No identifable thesis. Frame a thesis identifing the main idea and the poits of illustration. underline thesis | Format Thesis not underlined. Comment 4 | Thesis Specific: If you are illustrating qualities that make up something: In order for a friend to be considered a true friend, he or she must be loyal, honest, and trustworthy. OR If you are illustrating a recipe: Fresh produce, mixing utensils, and about a half an hour are all you need to create excellent guacamole. Comment 5 | Thesis General: If you are illustrating qualities that make up something: In order for a friend to be considered a true friend, he or she must be (characteristic 1), (characteristic 2), and (characteristic 3). OR If you are illustrating a recipe: (Add a
  • 26. range of ingredients), (add major utensils needed), and (add time necessary) are all that are required to make (add dish). PAGE 2 Comment 6 | Support This paragraph cnnot be graded as this is an off topic assignment. Choose a topic from one given in the list and develop suppport for the same. Comment 7 | Support This paragraph cannot be graded as this is an off topic essay. Comment 8 | Organization This is not a relevant conclusion as it is off topic. Frame a conclusion summng u the points of one of the topics given in the list. PAGE 3 RUBRIC: ENG 102V3 ILLUSTRATION_DRAFT THESIS INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE
  • 27. ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR SUPPORT INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR ORGANIZATION Thesis & Focus: Thesis, central idea, audience, purpose, digressions Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of audience and purpose. Readers cannot discern the essay’s central idea. Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently addressed. Reveals limited awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either lacking or inconsistently addressed. Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or otherwise problematic. Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent. Central idea is perhaps
  • 28. too general and supported by irrelevant examples. Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout most of the paper. Awareness of audience is sufficient. Central idea is clear and maintained in most of the essay. Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the entire paper. Paper demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea/focus maintained throughout. Thesis support, thesis development, use of details and examples, logic, and reason No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or evidence. No topic development. Little-to-no details or examples provided. Topic development is flawed or non-existent. Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. Poor use of details and examples to support the thesis. Topic development may have been attempted, but does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear reasoning. More support is needed. Some examples may be vague. Adequate use of details and examples that show, explain, and support the thesis. Some irrelevant support may be present, but most evidence supports thesis.
  • 29. Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way. Good use of details and clear examples that show, explain, and support the thesis. Thesis is supported and developed in most paragraphs. Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement of evidence. Excellent use of details and clear examples that show, explain, and support the thesis. All assertions are supported and relate to thesis. Coherence & Organization: Introduction, conclusion, body paragraphs, transitions, topic sentences INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR LANGUAGE INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE
  • 30. SUPERIOR No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no transitions. Demonstrates little-to-no understanding of organization. Many sentences within paragraphs do not relate to each other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May contain no discernible topic sentences. Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic. Few transitions. Perhaps numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic topic sentences. Demonstrates little understanding of organization. Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one significant weakness is present: undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion, illogical paragraph order. Adequate transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some paragraphs may lack clear topic sentences. Demonstrates basic understanding of organization. Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although improvements could be made. Most paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a clear plan of development. Transitions are clear throughout most of the paper. Demonstrates good understanding of organization. Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion: Introduction establishes
  • 31. the essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and main ideas without merely copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and effective transitions are present throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent understanding of organization. Superior Language & Style: Word choice, repetition, redundancy, awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form (their/there, etc.), typos/misspellings, vocabulary May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Fails to demonstrate competent language use; sentences and vocabulary are inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent. May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Contains repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure and/or limited vocabulary. May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence constructions and
  • 32. vocabulary may be limited or repetitive. May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied sentence construction and vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor. May contain 1 error in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness. May contain 1 error in inappropriate language for academic audience. Demonstrates GRAMMAR INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR PUNCTUATION INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE
  • 33. ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR FORMAT INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex sentence construction and vocabulary. Little-to-no unnecessary repetition. Superior Grammar: Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors, verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun agreement Contains more than 5 different grammar errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 4 – 5 different grammar errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 2 – 3 different grammar errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 1 grammar error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.
  • 34. Contains either no grammar errors, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition. Superior Punctuation & Capitalization: Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization errors, semicolon errors, colon errors Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 3 – 4 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be repeated throughout. Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay. Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no repetition. Superior Format: heading, title, margins, spacing, length, underlined thesis, other assignment-specific required elements *Length for Illustration is 500 words minimum Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be
  • 35. missing four or more elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements. Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing three elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements. AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR RESEARCH INADEQUATE BELOW AVERAGE AVERAGE ABOVE AVERAGE SUPERIOR Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing two elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or
  • 36. margins, or thesis not underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements (an essay that does not meet length minimum will score no higher than 3 in this category) Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing one element (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined). Length meets minimum requirements. Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of heading, title, margins, spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum requirements. Superior Source minimums, incorporation of sources (including use of signal phrases), use of research to argue topic, MLA in-text quote formatting, Works Cited list. This paper requires at least one source. Source minimum requirements are not met. Research is insufficient, irrelevant, or inadequate. Sources are not incorporated at all, or are done very poorly. Five or more errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. Works Cited page either omitted or formatted very poorly. It may be difficult or impossible to discern which sources are in the list. Source minimum requirements may not be met (Note: If source minimum is not
  • 37. met, the essay will score no higher than 2 in this category). Research is superficial and/or sources are incorporated poorly. No more than four different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, and some sources may be omitted from the list. Source minimum requirements are met. Research may be superficial, sources may be poorly incorporated. No more than three different errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, but all sources are listed. Source minimum requirements are met. Fairly thorough research with mostly effective use of sources. No more than two different errors in documenting sources using MLA style. These identical two errors may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed. Source minimum requirements are met. Thoroughly researches the topic, uses sources effectively. No more than one different error in documenting sources using MLA style. This identical error may be repeated. Works Cited page may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly