2. Objectives of Revision
• Large-scale issues of
–content
–rhetorical strategy
• THINK BIG instead of
polishing
3. Elements of Revision
• Focus
• Audience
• Purpose
• Proportion • Organization
• Commitment • Content
4. Revising for Focus
• Larger topic?
• More Material?
• Generalizations instead of
specific, verifiable details?
5. Revising for Purpose
• Thesis statement?
• Important ideas included?
• The main points developed?
• Can the main ideas be
summarized?
6. Revising for Proportion
• Beginning and the rest?
• Main points and the
attention to them?
• Conclusion and the rest?
7. Revising for Commitment
• Promise and its fulfillment?
• Substantiation of all claims?
• Finishing everything started?
• Agreement of opening and the
conclusion?
8. Revising for Audience
• Readers identified?
• Their knowledge about the
topic (lack & too much)?
• Readers questions about the
topic?
9. Revising for Organization
• Development of the thesis statement
significantly?
• Recognizable pattern of development?
• Recognizable logic from point to point?
• Change of emphasis on the level of
paragraphs?
10. Revising for Content
• Journalists’ questions answered?
• Specific info & concrete examples
to make the point stronger?
• More details for the curiosity of the
readers?
11. Home Assignment
• Revise the first draft of your
paper "What I Live for" with
help of the comments of your
group mates, and also with the
help of the checklist in the
presentation--deadline:
Tuesday 6 p.m.
• Furthermore comment on your
group mates' writings--deadline
Wednesday 6 p.m.
• Read
