This document provides an agenda for a class that covers various aspects of writing a proposal essay, including outlining, counterarguments, alternative solutions, citations, introductions, conclusions, and sentence strategies. It discusses potential outline structures, the difference between counterarguments and alternative solutions, strategies for writing introductions and conclusions, and how to avoid ambiguous language and sentences lacking agents. Students are assigned homework to add an introduction and conclusion to their draft, check for clarity and agents, and submit a self-assessment.

1. Class 21
EWRT 1A

2. AGENDA
• Review
• Outline
• Counterargument
• Alternative Solutions
• In-text citations
• Introductions
• Conclusions
• Sentence Strategies
• Self-Assessment

3. Potential Outline
• a clear statement of the problem (A complete discussion of the
problem goes before your thesis statement).
• your thesis statement, announcing the proposed solution and
forecasting your reasons for it
• your argument for the solution, giving reasons and support
• anticipation of counterarguments and a response to objections
readers might have about the proposed solution
• your evaluation of alternative solutions

4. Counterargument vs. Alternative Solution
• A Counterargument is a challenge to your particular solution.
You must address the argument to your solution by explaining
how or why your solution is the best one regardless of the
specific challenge. For example, if someone says your solution
is too expensive, you have to explain how you will fund it, or
you can explain why your solution should be applied in spite of
its cost.
• An Alternative Solution section takes a look at other solutions
people might consider. Then, you must explain how or why the
solution you are offering is the superior choice. For example, if
you suggest we alleviate parking problems at De Anza by
adding several rapid buses to the local routes, you might also
examine the alternative solution of building a parking structure.
At the end of your discussion of the alternative solution, you
must return to why the rapid buses are are the better solution.

5. In-Text
Citations

6. Introductions are
Important

7. Writing the Opening
Sentences
• You should try out one or two
different ways of beginning your
essay. You might want to review
your invention writing to see if you
have already written something
that would work to launch your
essay.

8. To engage your readers’ interest from the start, consider
the following opening strategies:
a scenario like O’Malley uses
• It’s late at night. The final’s tomorrow. You
got a C on the midterm, so this one will
make or break you. Will it be like the
midterm? Did you study enough? Did you
study the right things? It’s too late to drop
the course. So what happens if you fail?
No time to worry about that now—you’ve
got a ton of notes to go over.

9. Or, you can consider using
statistics like Kornbluh does:
• Today fully 70 percent of families with children
are headed by two working parents or by an
unmarried working parent. The “traditional family”
of the breadwinner and homemaker has been
replaced by the “juggler family,” in which no one
is home full-time. Two parent families are
working 10 more hours a week than in 1979
(Bernstein and Kornbluh).

10. • a historical analogy
• a research study
• a comparison to other places where the solution has been
tried successfully
• a preview of the negative consequences if the problem
goes unsolved
• criticism of an alternative solution
Or you can consider one of the following
opening strategies:

11. Try one now!
• a scenario
• Using statistics
• a historical analogy
• a research study
• a comparison to other places where the solution has been
tried successfully
• a preview of the negative consequences if the problem
goes unsolved
• criticism of an alternative solution

12. Endings are
Important too!

13. End by summarizing your solution and its
advantages, as O’Malley does.
• From the evidence and from my talks with professors and
students, I see frequent, brief in-class exams as the only
way to improve students’ study habits and learning, reduce
their anxiety and procrastination, and increase their
satisfaction with college. These exams are not a panacea,
but only more parking spaces and a winning football team
would do as much to improve college life. Professors can’t
do much about parking or football, but they can give more
frequent exams. Campus administrators should get behind
this effort, and professors should get together to consider
giving exams more frequently. It would make a difference.

14. Remind readers of something special about the problem
or solution at the end, as Kornbluh does when she urges
that an award be given to the companies that lead the way.
• Public Education: Critical to the success of the proposal
will be public education along the lines of the education
that the government and business schools conducted in
the 1980s about the need for American business to adopt
higher quality standards to compete against Japanese
business. A Malcolm Baldridge–like award4 should be
created for companies that make flexibility win-win. A
public education campaign conducted by the Department
of Labor should encourage small businesses to adopt best
practices of win-win flexibility. Tax credits could be used in
the first year to reward early adopters.

15. Or, try one of these
endings
• End with a scenario suggesting
the consequences of a failure to
solve the problem.
• End with an inspiring call to
action.

16. Try writing an ending
now!
• End by summarizing your solution and its
advantages.
• Remind readers of something special
about the problem or solution at the end
• End with a scenario suggesting the
consequences of a failure to solve the
problem.
• End with an inspiring call to action.

17. Sentence
Strategy:
Writing
Better
Sentences

18. Avoiding Ambiguous Use of
This and That
• The Problem: Because you must
frequently refer to the problem and the
solution in a proposal, you will often use
pronouns to avoid the monotony or
wordiness of repeatedly referring to them
by name. Using this and that vaguely to
refer to other words or ideas, however, can
confuse readers.

19. How to Correct It.
• Add a specific noun after this or that. For example, in
his essay in this chapter, Patrick O’Malley writes:
• Another possible solution would be to help students
prepare for midterm and final exams by providing sets of
questions from which the exam questions will be selected.
. . . This solution would have the advantage of reducing
students’ anxiety about learning every fact in the textbook.
. . . (par. 12)
• O’Malley avoids an ambiguous this in the second
sentence by repeating the noun “solution.”
• (He might just as well have used preparation or action
or approach.)

20. Look for ambiguous uses of
“this” and “that” in your essay

21. Revising Sentences that
Lack an Agent
The Problem: A writer proposing a solution to a problem usually needs to
indicate who exactly should take action to solve it. Such actors—those
who are in a position to take action—are called “agents.” Look, for
example, at this sentence from O’Malley’s proposal:
• To get students to complete the questions in a timely way, professors
would have to collect and check the answers. (par. 11)
• In this sentence, professors are the agents. They have the authority to
assign and collect study questions, and they would need to take this
action in order for this solution to be successfully implemented.
• Had O’Malley instead written “the answers would have to be collected
and checked,” the sentence would lack an agent. Failing to name an
agent would have made his argument less convincing, because it
would have left unclear one of the key parts of any proposal: Who is
going to take action.

22. How to Correct It
• When you revise your work, ask yourself who or
what performed the action in any given sentence.
If there is no clear answer, rewrite the sentence to
give it an agent. Watch in particular for forms of
the verb to be (the balls were dropped, exams
should be given, etc.), which often signal
agentless sentences.

23. Look for sentences lacking
agents in your own essay
Examples

24. The blogging post points (150) require self-
assessment. Consider three aspects of your
responses: First, how many of the posts did
you make? Second, what was the quality of
your response? Third, how timely were your
submissions? Write a paragraph or two
justifying your grade. You may submit this to
me by email as soon as you finish today’s
post, but you must send it before our final
class.
Self-Assessment

25. Homework
Add the introduction and conclusion
we wrote today to your draft. Read it
aloud to make sure it is in a logical
order. Change the order of your
paragraphs if that makes sense to you.
Check your essay for ambiguity. Add
words to clarify “this” and “that.”
Check your sentences for “agents.”
Post #26: Your introduction and
conclusion
Self-Assessment: Due via
email before our last
meeting