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  1. 1. Walking the Walk: Real Revision in the Classroom Kate Messner WSRAhttp://www.katemessner.com
  2. 2. www.katemessner.com/WSRA
  3. 3. Assignment:Write for threeminutes, describing aplace that you love.
  4. 4. So…what are you writing these days?
  5. 5. As I have been writing this summer, I feel likeI have had moments when I can identify withauthors I have heard speak or authors I haveread about. There are so many things I haveheard authors say that I now can identify withsince I am writing, too. I strongly believe inmy own reflection and introspection to guidehow I work with students.Read more: Jen Vincent’s Teach Mentor Texts Bloghttp://www.teachmentortexts.com/2012/07/tmt-summer-writing-group-week-seven.html#axzz22AK6Adae
  6. 6. “The Book in My Mind…”
  7. 7. WHAT REVISION ISN’T… Spell Checking Hiring a professional editor Solitary A process with a single correct solution or end point
  8. 8. http://devilduck.tumblr.com/post/3834151230
  9. 9. WHAT REVISION ISBrainstorming Free-Writing (and maybestarting over)
  10. 10. Princess Marty Frog-Slime and theNutcracker Ballet
  11. 11. Confessions of a Sea Monster
  12. 12. “Well…This is funny. But itsounds more like a New Yorker cartoon than a book for kids.”
  13. 13. Reconsideringa character’s motivation
  14. 14. What if thingsturned outdifferently?
  15. 15. TwoBooks in One?
  16. 16. Who’sthat guy girl?
  17. 17. The Gift of aCrashed HardDrive…
  18. 18. Considering different formats
  19. 19. Draft 1Draft 2 Draft 3 Draft 4
  20. 20. Time to Write!Sometimes poem…
  21. 21. Time to Write! *Sometimes…
  22. 22. CHARACTERS/STUF SETTINGS THEMES/MOODS F I LIKE OR FIND FASCINATINGHURRICANES RAINFOREST MYSTERYPYTHONS EARLY 20TH CENTURY SECRETS NYCTIME TRAVEL LAKE CHAMPLAIN SCIENCE VS. ART
  23. 23. Assignment:Mess around with your columns & comeup with a story idea.Write the first page.Write it fast. (15 minutes)It’s okay if it’s crummy.We’ll make it awesome later.
  24. 24. Time toWrite!
  25. 25. WHAT REVISION IS Finding & Strengthening the Heart of a project
  26. 26. This book is about_________________________________________________________________________________________. (But underneath that, it’s reallyabout__________________________________________________________________________________________.
  27. 27. My book is about a figureskater from a small-townmaple farm who earns ascholarship to train with theelite in Lake Placid & discoversa world of mean girls on ice.But underneath that, it’s reallyabout making a decision tofollow your own dreamsinstead of the dreams that arechosen for you.
  28. 28. My book is about a futureworld where killer tornadoesare widespread and four kidsat a science camp who aretrying to stop them butdiscover a terrifying secret.But underneath that, it’s reallyabout using your powers forgood.
  29. 29. This book is about_________________________________________________________________________________________. (But underneath that, it’s reallyabout__________________________________________________________________________________________.
  30. 30. WHAT REVISION IS65 Off-Draft WritingPrompts to Jump- Start Revision
  31. 31. Write ametaphor-poemdescribingone of yourcharacters,in anothercharacter’svoice.Thanks, Kelly Fineman!
  32. 32. Write a metaphor-poemdescribing one ofyourcharacters, inanothercharacter’s voice. Thanks, Kelly Fineman!
  33. 33. WHAT REVISION ISRaising the Stakes
  34. 34. MENTOR TEXTS
  35. 35. How couldmy maincharacter make his/her situation worse?
  36. 36. What actionsmight your maincharacter take to make his/her situation worsebefore he or she makes it better?
  37. 37. WHAT REVISION ISCharts, maps, timelines, &outlines
  38. 38. More Ideas… • Map the setting – note important events • Chapter by chapter timelines• Plot charts with rising/falling action • Outline (after writing) to identify weak chapters
  39. 39. Big-Picture Story Chart - What characters, settings, objects, jokes,themes, and threads are important in your project? Are they woven consistently throughout the text?
  40. 40. Time to Revise!Sometimes poem… Add SMELLS
  41. 41. WHAT REVISION ISReturning to Research
  42. 42. WHAT REVISION ISDetails and Word Choice Be specific. Be surprising.
  43. 43. Look for delicious details
  44. 44. Look for delicious details
  45. 45. Google Maps – Street View
  46. 46. Role Play!Replace Tired Body Language
  47. 47. ** Role Play!Replace Tired Body Language ANGRY FRUSTRATED ANXIOUS SCARED JOYFUL-EXCITED DEPRESSED
  48. 48. WHAT REVISION ISBeing a Word Ninja
  49. 49. Readers are Smart Don’t keep repeatingyour points to make sure they “get it.”
  50. 50. very really just that “whatlooked like”
  51. 51. JUST IN THATAND MOMENTRATHER SOBEGAN TO A BITAS I GUESSTHOUGH MAYBETHEN THATBUT VERYALWAYS REALLY
  52. 52. Watch for “pet” stories,ideas, themes, phrases…
  53. 53. Brainstorm: Whatwords, phrases, &pet stories are on your personal“MOST WANTED” list?
  54. 54. Time to Revise! ***Sometimes poem… Cut at least 30 words
  55. 55. WHAT REVISION IS Being Social -Critique Groups/Partners-Crowd-Sourcing Solutions
  56. 56. Hey….What would you call that little containerwhere you keep contact lenses when you’re not wearing them? A tub?
  57. 57. Post-It Note CritiquesORANGE = “I LOVE THIS!” GREEN = “I’M BORED.”YELLOW=“I’M CONFUSED”
  58. 58. Time to Revise!Sometimes poem… Rewrite in differentseason/circumstances
  59. 59. WHAT REVISION ISTechnology Tools of the Trade
  60. 60. Scrivenerhttp://www.literatureandlatte.com/scrivener.php
  61. 61. WHAT REVISION ISFinding the Right Title
  62. 62. WHAT REVISION IS Finding the Right Title TEN TitlesHighlight great phrases Crowd-source Cut-it-Up & Mix-it-Up
  63. 63. WHAT REVISION IS Making Lists……and getting to work!
  64. 64. Five Reasons KidsDon’t Want to Revise(and what teachers can do about it) Kate Messner http://www.katemessner.com
  65. 65. REASON #1“But I just FINISHED.And I like my paper the way it is.”
  66. 66. SOLUTION: Start the revisionconversation early.
  67. 67. After We Write… REVISION – PART I REVISION – PART 2 REVISION – PART 3
  68. 68. REASON #2“I already ran a spell check. I’m good.”
  69. 69. SOLUTION: Teach students thedifference betweenrevising and editing.
  70. 70. REASON #3“I don’t know where to start.”
  71. 71. SOLUTION: Have a revisionchecklist ready…
  72. 72. Student Critique Partners• Trade papers with a partner•Use highlighters to indicate thefollowing: •Pink = Consider cutting this part. •Green = I’m confused now. •Orange = Use more vivid details/precise language. •Yellow = This part works really well!•In the margin next to each color (oron a Post-It note), write a noteexplaining your highlighting and
  73. 73. REASON #4 “I did revise. Justnow. It’s not my fault I’m a fast reviser.”
  74. 74. SOLUTION: Teach multiplestrategies for revision.
  75. 75. A Shrunken ManuscriptStrategy Courtesy of Darcy Pattison http://www.darcypattison.com PINK = plot points GREEN = crush BLUE = Ruby ORANGE = funny bits with Ian YELLOW = place for the tree game
  76. 76. REASON #5“Everybody says I’ma great writer. Greatwriters don’t need to revise.”
  77. 77. SOLUTION: Use published authors as rolemodels, through textexamples and Skype visits.
  78. 78. GUESS HOW MANY DRAFTS? 14!
  79. 79. How will you spend your precious writing timewith students?
  80. 80. “Revolution for the Tested”
  81. 81. Walking the Walk: Real Revision in the Classroom Kate Messner WSRAhttp://www.katemessner.com
  82. 82. www.katemessner.com/WSRA

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