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  • Why I love revision – feeling like a competent writer.Drafting: vision in my head comes up against the reality of the writer I am today.“The book in my mind” poemRevision is what allows us to bring the book on the page closer to that dream-book
  • 2008 I sent agent a manuscript - Her thoughts: love character, funny, but….seasonal?Eesh.“Does it really have to be about the Nutcracker? Could it be about a school play or something?”
  • REVISION IS ABOUT SEEING IDEAS IN A DIFFERENT WAY
  • Start with the starting over part – so that by the end of this two hour workshop you’ll like me again.
  • 2008 I sent agent a manuscript - Her thoughts: love character, funny, but….seasonal?Eesh.“Does it really have to be about the Nutcracker? Could it be about a school play or something?”
  • So this sea monster walks into his therapist’s office….
  • Jo - In the early versions of Lessons From A Dead Girl, Leah doesn't die! The book leads up to Lainegettnig the courage to face her in the hospital. Obviously, it had a different title then. :-)
  • Jody Feldman wrote a book called “The Eleventh Level” personal mystery + story about secret society – agent asked her to strengthen the secret society part, but then the book was 80K – too long for this particular MG. Split it off – secret society book is this one – other book might be for another day.
  • Sarah Aronson changed a major character from a guy to a girl and rewrote – found that the story worked much better and allowed her to develop a main theme of the book.
  • Both this and courage has no color –started as picture books and grew into MG. And I think this is a great idea – that our books can grow into any number of things…
  • When you see this symbol…. Fire up your laptop or get your notebook ready.
  • When you see this symbol…. Fire up your laptop or get your notebook ready.
  • Linda calls this “the spine” - What is at the center of your work? Why does it even exist? Why does this story need to be told? Universal human truth – even in funny books.
  • Writing workshop at NESCBW a couple years ago - It was a poetry workshop with Kelly Fineman – but I used it to develop this MC’s father in EOTS. I can’t remember the original assignment – but this is what grew out of it and it was important for me and for Jaden’s dad. (By the way – you should feel free to do this, too – if you come up with something better during writing prompt, do your better thing and you can credit me when you give your workshop later on)
  • Three false starts – back to brainstorming/outlining every time.
  • Mystery organizer – crime in the middle – then elements – suspects, motives, clues, false clues, etc. You can make your own – just list important elements of your particular genre.
  • Class schedules – when would Claire & Natalie be together? How would they grow apart? Develop friendship troubles issue.
  • When you see this symbol…. Fire up your laptop or get your notebook ready.
  • General words & phrases are your enemy. Green shirt – there are a million kinds of green – new grass green, alligator pond green, pine woods green – and you’ll notice that my metaphors all come from nature because that’s the world I love best – a kid might describe his shirt as “cafeteria peas green” or “my mother’s emerald earrings green”Be surprising – the best descriptions describe us because we’ve never thought of it that way before – even though that’s the perfect word or phrase.
  • Ponytail – What would that stick look like to the girl on the right? Coming at her face like that? And then you can do sounds, smells…etc.
  • Smirk on her face – character inspiration for Sarah in WAKE UP MISSING.
  • Also went on twitter – other than blushing, what do you do when you’re embarrassed?
  • When you see this symbol…. Fire up your laptop or get your notebook ready.
  • Inspiration boards – don’t worry about people “stealing” your ideas. Really.
  • SUGAR AND ICE – Claire & the maple farm - Green – scenes on farm, salmon – lake placid – purple-competition – red – sabotage -
  • Titles change – a lot. Be ready for this and be at peace with it. Marketing dept. etc. Let them do their job. BRILLIANT FALL OF GIANNA Z. – SWINGER OF BIRCHES – MAPLE GIRL, “THAT STUPID LEAF COLLECTION BOOK”
  • Known issues while working – starting place List after 1st read-through after completion
  • Why I love revision – feeling like a competent writer.Drafting: vision in my head comes up against the reality of the writer I am today.“The book in my mind” poemRevision is what allows us to bring the book on the page closer to that dream-book
  • Revision york

    1. 1. REAL REVISION: Talking the Talk and Walking the Walk Kate Messner Penn State York Institute 2013 http://www.katemessner.com
    2. 2. www.katemessner.comPennStateYork
    3. 3. So…what are you writing these days?
    4. 4. Revision should not be a surprise.
    5. 5. Assignment: Write for three minutes, describing a place that you love.
    6. 6. WHAT REVISION ISN’T…  Spell Checking  Hiring a professional editor  Solitary  A process with a single correct solution or end point
    7. 7. http://devilduck.tumblr.com/post/3834151230
    8. 8. WHAT REVISION IS Brainstorming Free-Writing (and maybe starting over)
    9. 9. Princess Marty Frog-Slime and the Nutcracker Ballet
    10. 10. Confessions of a Sea Monster
    11. 11. “Well…This is funny. But it sounds more like a New Yorker cartoon than a book for kids.”
    12. 12. What if things turned out differently?
    13. 13. Two Books in One?
    14. 14. Who’s that guy girl?
    15. 15. Considering different formats
    16. 16. Draft 1 Draft 2 Draft 3 Draft 4
    17. 17. Time to Write! Sometimes poem…
    18. 18. Time to Write! Sometimes poem…
    19. 19. WHAT REVISION IS Finding & Strengthening the Heart of a project
    20. 20. This book is about ______________________________ ______________________________ _____________________________. (But underneath that, it’s really about ______________________________ ______________________________ ______________________________.
    21. 21. My book is about a figure skater from a small-town maple farm who earns a scholarship to train with the elite in Lake Placid & discovers a world of mean girls on ice. But underneath that, it’s really about making a decision to follow your own dreams instead of the dreams that are chosen for you.
    22. 22. My book is about a future world where killer tornadoes are widespread and four kids at a science camp who are trying to stop them but discover a terrifying secret. But underneath that, it’s really about using your powers for good.
    23. 23. This book is about ______________________________ ______________________________ _____________________________. (But underneath that, it’s really about ______________________________ ______________________________ ______________________________.
    24. 24. WHAT REVISION IS 65 Off-Draft Writing Prompts to Jump- Start Revision
    25. 25. Write a metaphor- poem describing one of your characters, in another character’s voice. Thanks, Kelly Fineman!
    26. 26. If your poem/essay/person al narrative/ research paper could talk back to you right now, what would it say?
    27. 27. WHAT REVISION IS Charts, maps, timelines, & outlines
    28. 28. More Ideas… • Map the setting – note important events • Chapter by chapter timelines • Plot charts with rising/falling action • Outline (after writing) to identify weak chapters
    29. 29. Big-Picture Story Chart - What characters, settings, obj ects, jokes, themes, and threads are important in your project? Are they woven consistently throughout the text?
    30. 30. WHAT REVISION IS Considering all five senses.
    31. 31. Time to Revise! Sometimes poem… Add SMELLS
    32. 32. WHAT REVISION IS Returning to Research
    33. 33. WHAT REVISION IS Details and Word Choice Be specific. Be surprising.
    34. 34. Look for delicious details
    35. 35. Look for delicious details
    36. 36. Google Maps – Street View
    37. 37. Role Play! Replace Tired Body Language
    38. 38. ** Role Play! Replace Tired Body Language ANGRY FRUSTRATED ANXIOUS SCARED JOYFUL-EXCITED DEPRESSED
    39. 39. WHAT REVISION IS Being a Word Ninja
    40. 40. Readers are Smart Don’t keep repeating your points to make sure they “get it.”
    41. 41. very really just that “what looked like”
    42. 42. JUST AND RATHER BEGAN TO AS THOUGH THEN BUT ALWAYS IN THAT MOMENT SO A BIT I GUESS MAYBE THAT VERY REALLY
    43. 43. Watch for “pet” stories, ideas, themes, p hrases…
    44. 44. Brainstorm: What words, phrases, & pet stories are on your personal “MOST WANTED” list?
    45. 45. Time to Revise! *** Sometimes poem… Cut at least 20 words
    46. 46. WHAT REVISION IS Being Social -Critique Groups/Partners
    47. 47. Post-It Note Critiques ORANGE = “I LOVE THIS!” GREEN = “I’M BORED.” YELLOW=“I’M CONFUSED”
    48. 48. WHAT REVISION IS Technology Tools of the Trade
    49. 49. Scrivener http://www.literatureandlatte.com/scrivener.php
    50. 50. WHAT REVISION IS Finding the Right Title
    51. 51. WHAT REVISION IS Finding the Right Title TEN Titles Highlight great phrases Crowd-source Cut-it-Up & Mix-it-Up
    52. 52. WHAT REVISION IS Making Lists… …and getting to work!
    53. 53. Five Reasons Kids Don’t Want to Revise (and what teachers can do about it) Kate Messner http://www.katemessner.com
    54. 54. REASON #1 “But I just FINISHED. And I like my paper the way it is.”
    55. 55. SOLUTION: Start the revision conversation early.
    56. 56. After We Write…  REVISION – PART I  REVISION – PART 2  REVISION – PART 3
    57. 57. REASON #2 “I already ran a spell check. I’m good.”
    58. 58. SOLUTION: Teach students the difference between revising and editing.
    59. 59. REASON #3 “I don’t know where to start.”
    60. 60. SOLUTION: Have a revision checklist ready…
    61. 61. Student Critique Partners • Trade papers with a partner •Use highlighters to indicate the following: •Pink = Consider cutting this part. •Green = I’m confused now. •Orange = Use more vivid details/precise language. •Yellow = This part works really well! •In the margin next to each color (or on a Post-It note), write a note explaining your highlighting and
    62. 62. REASON #4 “I did revise. Just now. It’s not my fault I’m a fast reviser.”
    63. 63. SOLUTION: Teach multiple strategies for revision.
    64. 64. A Shrunken Manuscript Strategy Courtesy of Darcy Pattison http://www.darcypattison.com PINK = plot points GREEN = crush BLUE = Ruby ORANGE = funny bits with Ian YELLOW = place for the tree game
    65. 65. REASON #5 “Everybody says I’m a great writer. Great writers don’t need to revise.”
    66. 66. SOLUTION: Use published authors as role models, through text examples and Skype visits.
    67. 67. GUESS HOW MANY DRAFTS? 14!
    68. 68. REAL REVISION: Talking the Talk and Walking the Walk Kate Messner Penn State York Institute 2013 http://www.katemessner.com

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