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All write revision

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All write revision

  1. 1. REAL REVISION:Talking the TalkandWalking theWalkKate MessnerAll Write 2013http://www.katemessner.com
  2. 2. So…what are youwriting thesedays?
  3. 3. Revision shouldnot be a surprise.
  4. 4. Assignment:Write for three minutes,describing a place thatyou love.
  5. 5. WHAT REVISION ISN’T… Spell Checking Hiring a professional editor Solitary A process with a singlecorrect solution or end point
  6. 6. http://devilduck.tumblr.com/post/3834151230
  7. 7. WHAT REVISION ISBrainstormingFree-Writing(and maybestarting over)
  8. 8. Princess MartyFrog-Slimeand theNutcracker Ballet
  9. 9. Confessions of aSea Monster
  10. 10. “Well…This isfunny. But itsounds more likea New Yorkercartoon than abook for kids.”
  11. 11. What ifthingsturned outdifferently?
  12. 12. TwoBooks inOne?
  13. 13. Who’sthat guygirl?
  14. 14. Consideringdifferentformats
  15. 15. Draft 1Draft 2 Draft 3 Draft 4
  16. 16. TimetoWrite!Sometimes poem…
  17. 17. TimetoWrite!Sometimes poem…
  18. 18. WHAT REVISION ISFinding & Strengtheningthe Heart of a project
  19. 19. This book is about_________________________________________________________________________________________.(But underneath that, it’s reallyabout__________________________________________________________________________________________.
  20. 20. My book is about a figureskater from a small-townmaple farm who earns ascholarship to train with theelite in Lake Placid & discoversa world of mean girls on ice.But underneath that, it’s reallyabout making a decision tofollow your own dreamsinstead of the dreams that arechosen for you.
  21. 21. My book is about a futureworld where killer tornadoesare widespread and four kidsat a science camp who aretrying to stop them butdiscover a terrifying secret.But underneath that, it’s reallyabout using your powers forgood.
  22. 22. This book is about_________________________________________________________________________________________.(But underneath that, it’s reallyabout__________________________________________________________________________________________.
  23. 23. WHAT REVISION IS65 Off-Draft WritingPrompts to Jump-Start Revision
  24. 24. Write ametaphor-poemdescribingone of yourcharacters,in anothercharacter’svoice.Thanks, Kelly Fineman!
  25. 25. If yourpoem/essay/personal narrative/research papercould talk back toyou right now, whatwould it say?
  26. 26. WHAT REVISION ISCharts, maps, timelines, &outlines
  27. 27. More Ideas…• Map the setting – note importantevents• Chapter by chapter timelines• Plot charts with rising/falling action• Outline (after writing) to identifyweak chapters
  28. 28. Big-Picture Story Chart -What characters,settings, objects, jokes,themes, and threads areimportant in yourproject? Are theywoven consistentlythroughout the text?
  29. 29. WHAT REVISION ISConsidering all five senses.
  30. 30. Time toRevise!Sometimes poem…Add SMELLS
  31. 31. WHAT REVISION ISReturning to Research
  32. 32. WHAT REVISION ISDetails and Word ChoiceBe specific.Be surprising.
  33. 33. Look for delicious details
  34. 34. Look for delicious details
  35. 35. Google Maps – Street View
  36. 36. Role Play!Replace Tired BodyLanguage
  37. 37. ** Role Play!Replace Tired Body LanguageANGRYFRUSTRATEDANXIOUSSCAREDJOYFUL-EXCITEDDEPRESSED
  38. 38. WHAT REVISION ISBeing a Word Ninja
  39. 39. Readers are SmartDon’t keep repeatingyour points to make surethey “get it.”
  40. 40. veryreallyjustthat“whatlookedlike”
  41. 41. JUSTANDRATHERBEGAN TOASTHOUGHTHENBUTALWAYSIN THATMOMENTSOA BITI GUESSMAYBETHATVERYREALLY
  42. 42. Watch for “pet” stories,ideas, themes, phrases…
  43. 43. Brainstorm: Whatwords, phrases, &pet stories are onyour personal“MOST WANTED”list?
  44. 44. Time toRevise! ***Sometimes poem…Cut at least 20 words
  45. 45. WHAT REVISION ISBeing Social-Critique Groups/Partners
  46. 46. Post-It Note CritiquesORANGE = “I LOVE THIS!”GREEN = “I’M BORED.”YELLOW=“I’M CONFUSED”
  47. 47. WHAT REVISION ISTechnology Toolsof the Trade
  48. 48. Scrivenerhttp://www.literatureandlatte.com/scrivener.php
  49. 49. WHAT REVISION ISFinding the Right Title
  50. 50. WHAT REVISION ISFinding the Right TitleTEN TitlesHighlight great phrasesCrowd-sourceCut-it-Up & Mix-it-Up
  51. 51. WHAT REVISION ISMaking Lists……and getting to work!
  52. 52. Five Reasons KidsDon’t Want to Revise(and what teacherscan do about it)Kate Messnerhttp://www.katemessner.com
  53. 53. REASON #1“But I just FINISHED.And I like my paperthe way it is.”
  54. 54. SOLUTION:Start the revisionconversation early.
  55. 55. After We Write… REVISION – PART I REVISION – PART 2 REVISION – PART 3
  56. 56. REASON #2“I already ran a spellcheck. I’m good.”
  57. 57. SOLUTION:Teach students thedifference betweenrevising and editing.
  58. 58. REASON #3“I don’t know whereto start.”
  59. 59. SOLUTION:Have a revisionchecklist ready…
  60. 60. Student Critique Partners• Trade papers with a partner•Use highlighters to indicate thefollowing:•Pink = Consider cutting this part.•Green = I’m confused now.•Orange = Use more vividdetails/precise language.•Yellow = This part works really well!•In the margin next to each color (oron a Post-It note), write a noteexplaining your highlighting and
  61. 61. REASON #4“I did revise. Justnow. It’s not my faultI’m a fast reviser.”
  62. 62. SOLUTION:Teach multiplestrategies for revision.
  63. 63. A Shrunken ManuscriptStrategy Courtesy of DarcyPattisonhttp://www.darcypattison.comPINK = plot pointsGREEN = crushBLUE = RubyORANGE = funny bitswith IanYELLOW = place forthe tree game
  64. 64. REASON #5“Everybody says I’ma great writer. Greatwriters don’t need torevise.”
  65. 65. SOLUTION:Use publishedauthors as rolemodels, through textexamples and Skypevisits.
  66. 66. GUESS HOW MANY DRAFTS?14!
  67. 67. REAL REVISION:Talking the TalkandWalking theWalkKate MessnerAll Write 2013http://www.katemessner.com

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