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Kelompok 2
Andi Ratnasari’s Writing

Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing

Hani Afdaliah’s Writing

CONCLUSION
Kelompok 2
Andi Ratnasari’s Writing

Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing

Hani Afdaliah’s Writing
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CONCLUSION
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The Story of Passanggarahan Hill
Long time ago, there was a hill called Passanggarahan. It was located in the middle of Sengkang city and it
wasn’t far from Lake Tempe.
Passanggarahan was a beautiful place because it had wonderful scenery. The weather was so fresh because
this place was full of trees. In the middle of the hill, at the top of Passanggarahan hill, there was a very large
tree. According to the people around it, this tree was the only big tree in Sengkang. The people around the
hill believed that that large tree had a magic power because at night, the people could see the tree clearly.
For the first time, they tried to come for praying under the tree in order to make their dream comes true.
Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by people around Sengkang city, but also the people from the
outside city. They came to that place to sacrifice their own pet like goat, cow, chicken and others and they
believed they would get a prosperity in their lifeKelompok 2
forever.

One day, there was a single man came to Passanggarahan hill with his little goat. He started to sacrifice his
goat while prayed in front of the large tree. He believed if he did that, he would be able to get a beautiful
Andi Ratnasari’s Writing
Rizka woman. Day by day passed, but he couldn’t get what he wants since he came to Passanggarahan.
and rich Pratiwi’s Writing
He trusted too much about Passanggarahan’s magic power. He waited for weeks and months for his
dreaming girl. Someday, he realized something important about what people did in Passanggarahan hill was
useless. After that, within a few days he died without a woman by his side.

Hani Afdaliah’s Writing
This story was spread to the all people and since at that time, many people didn’t believed about
Passanggarahan’s power anymore. Untill now, Passanggarahan was well known as a usual hill which didn’t
have something special. It was just a place where the people stayed. In fact, the Passanggarahan’s power
was a myth.
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CONCLUSION
Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing
FAULTS
The Story of Passanggarahan Hill
1.A false tense found in the 2nd Paragraph line
6th, there’s a mistaken word in future tense, the
sentence is “…. in order to make their dream
comes true.” mistaken word goes to “comes”.
2.There’s also a mistaken word in negative tense
found,
• in the 3rd Paragraph line 1st the sentence is
“Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by
people around Sengkang city“ mistaken word

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goes to “visited”
• and in the 5th Paragraph line 1st the sentence
is “many people didn’t believed about
Passanggarahan’s power anymore” and the
previous
mistaken word goes to “believed”.
Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing
FAULTS
The Story of Passanggarahan Hill
1.A false tense found in the 2nd Paragraph line
6th, there’s a mistaken word in future tense, the
sentence is “…. in order to make their dream
comes true.” mistaken word goes to “comes”.
2.A false tense found, there’s a mistaken word in
negative tense,
• in the 3rd Paragraph line 1st the sentence is
“Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by
people around Sengkang city“ mistaken word

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goes to “visited”
• and in the 5th Paragraph line 1st the sentence
is “many people didn’t believed about
Passanggarahan’s power anymore” and the
previous
mistaken word goes to “believed”.
Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing
FAULTS
The Story of Passanggarahan Hill
1.A false tense found in the 2nd Paragraph line
6th, there’s a mistaken word in future tense, the
sentence is “…. in order to make their dream
comes true.” mistaken word goes to “comes”.
2.A false tense found, there’s a mistaken word in
negative tense,
• in the 3rd Paragraph line 1st the sentence is
“Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by
people around Sengkang city“ mistaken word

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goes to “visited”
• and in the 5th Paragraph line 1st the sentence
is “many people didn’t believed about
Passanggarahan’s power anymore” and the
previous
mistaken word goes to “believed”.
Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing
FAULTS
The Story of Passanggarahan Hill
1.A false tense found in the 2nd Paragraph line
6th, there’s a mistaken word in future tense, the
sentence is “…. in order to make their dream
comes true.” mistaken word goes to “comes”.
2.A false tense found, there’s a mistaken word in
negative tense,
• in the 3rd Paragraph line 1st the sentence is
“Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by
people around Sengkang city“ mistaken word

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goes to “visited”
• and in the 5th Paragraph line 1st the sentence
is “many people didn’t believed about
Passanggarahan’s power anymore” and the
previous
mistaken word goes to “believed”.
Main Ideas

Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing

The Story of Passanggarahan Hill

1. Passanggarahan hill.
2. Passanggarahan was a beautiful
place.
3. People
believed
that
Passanggarahan hill could get them
a prosperity in life forever.
4. A
single
man
came
to
Passanggarahan hill to pray.
5. Passanggarahan’s power was a
myth

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La Tongko Tongko
There was a very stupid man. His name was La Tongko- Tongko. He lived with his mother. One day, La Tongko- Tongko told his mother that wanted to
get married. If you want to get married, you have to find a girls first. Then ask her to marry you.
La Tongko- Tongko listened to his mother. So, he started to find a girl. And while he was looking around, he met a girl. She was carrying some potatoes
in her bag.
Hey, girl I want to get married. Do you want to be my wife?
The girl was angry! She thought La Tongko- Tongko was mocking her. She threw the potatoes at him. La Tongko- Tongko ran away!
At home, La Tongko- Tongko told his mother about girl he met today.
Oh, you are so stupid La Tongko- Tongko. You cannot ask a girl to get married like that. You and the girl have to love each other then you can get
married, explained his mother.
La Tongko- Tongko immediately went out. He still remembered his mothers advce. While he was looking around, a girl was walking and she was
carrying some fire woods. La Tongko- Tongko approached her and talked to her.
Hey, girl I love you. Do you love me? If you do, lets get married.
The girl was angry! She threw some woods at him. La Tongko- Tongko ran away!
Again, La Tongko- Tongko told his mother about the girl he met.
Oh, no. Youre so stupid. You cannot do that. Love takes time. Besides that you have to talk nicely and gently, explained his mother.
La Tongko- Tongko walked around. Finally, he arrived in the jungle. He saw a girl was lying on the ground under a big tree. He did not know that the girl
was dead. He approached the girl and talked to her.
Hi, beautiful girl. I really love you. How about you? Do you love me?
Of course the girl did not respond.
After all she was dead already. However, La Tongko- Tongko thought that girl needed time to respond. He remembered his mothers advice. He
repeated his question again. And when she kept quiet, La Tongko- Tongko thought the girl was shy. Finally, he asked the final question.
Do you want to marry me? If you keep quiet, I will think you say yes.
And because the girl did not say anything and did not move at all, La Tongko- Tongko held her and brought her home.
At home, La Tongko- Tongko put her in his bed room. He told his mother tha t he had already found a wife. The mother was happy. She wanted to
meet the girl. And when she saw a dead body in the bed room, she screamed!
La Tongko- Tongko,why did you bring a dead body to our home?
Dead body? How did you know she is dead? asked La Tongko- Tongko.
Cant you smell the stink from her body? Bury her body now!
La Tongko- Tongko then buried the girls body. He felt that he just learned something. And after finished burying the body, he went back home.
Before he went to bed, he broke wind. It smelled so bad. La Tongko- Tongko thought that he was dead. He dug a hole and buried his body. And when
his mother saw him, she was really angry.
what are you doing?
Im dead mother. I broke wind and it smelles so stink.
The mother could not do and say anything. He just left La Tongko- Tongko alone. And after several hours, La Tongko- Tongko could not hold it
anymore. He freed himself and went back to his home.

Kelompok 2

Andi Ratnasari’s Writing

Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing

Hani Afdaliah’s Writing

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CONCLUSION
1.The Paragraph are not arranged
Hani Afdaliah’s Writing
La Tongko Tongko
correctly.
2.A false on writing a direct sentence
found in a few lines in the writing, the
direct sentences that written not using
the “ symbol in the beginning and the
end of the sentence, and they are found
in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th,
19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and
39th.
3.A misspelled word found, and that is
“advce” in line 12th.
4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there
HOME is a mistaken word in past tense, the
previous
1.The Paragraph are not arranged
Hani Afdaliah’s Writing
La Tongko Tongko
correctly.
2.A false on writing a direct sentence
found in a few lines in the writing, the
direct sentences that written not using
the “ symbol in the beginning and the
end of the sentence, and they are found
in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th,
19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and
39th.
3.A misspelled word found, and that is
“advce” in line 12th.
4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there
HOME is a mistaken word in past tense, the
previous
1.The Paragraph are not arranged
Hani Afdaliah’s Writing
La Tongko Tongko
correctly.
2.A false on writing a direct sentence
found in a few lines in the writing, the
direct sentences that written not using
the “ symbol in the beginning and the
end of the sentence, and they are found
in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th,
19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and
39th.
3.A misspelled word found, and that is
“advce” in line 12th.
4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there
HOME is a mistaken word in past tense, the
previous
1.The Paragraph are not arranged
Hani Afdaliah’s Writing
La Tongko Tongko
correctly.
2.A false on writing a direct sentence
found in a few lines in the writing, the
direct sentences that written not using
the “ symbol in the beginning and the
end of the sentence, and they are found
in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th,
19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and
39th.
3.A misspelled word found, and that is
“advce” in line 12th.
4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there
HOME is a mistaken word in past tense, the
previous
1.The Paragraph are not arranged
Hani Afdaliah’s Writing
La Tongko Tongko
correctly.
2.A false on writing a direct sentence
found in a few lines in the writing, the
direct sentences that written not using
the “ symbol in the beginning and the
end of the sentence, and they are found
in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th,
19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and
39th.
3.A misspelled word found, and that is
“advce” in line 12th.
4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there
HOME is a mistaken word in past tense, the
previous
Main Ideas
La Tongko Tongko

Hani Afdaliah’s Writing

1.La Tongko Tongko is a stupid man.
2.To get married La Tongko Tongko have
to find a girl.
3.To get married La Tongko Tongko and
the girl have to love each other.
4.To get married La Tongko Tongko that it
needs time and he have to talk nicely to
the girl.
5.La Tongko Tongko found a dead body.
6.La Tongko Tongko found out that the girl
was already dead.
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7.La Tongko Tongko thought that he previous
was
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings
As many people are now interested and trying to find the apparations of the world of mystery,some residents in
town Watansoppeng pointed flock of bats hanging in a tree in the district capital Soppeng as sightings of a
mystery world.
According to the stories of risidents,swarms of bats bird kingdom since the time of selecting trees that grow
around town Watansoppeng as rest place during the day is not just any bat.Night birds is believed to be one of
the royal guards tangible bat.
Argument folklore,it is mentioned,that throughout the kingdom in Soppeng area became the center of power
Datu (King) Soppeng with a radius of 1 kilometer square that has now become part of the city Watansoppeng
always safe from tampering or enemy attacks.This bat will immediately transformed into a royal guard doing any
defense as well as resistance to the movement of other troops wil enter the kingdom.Soppeng havoc in the
region.
Maintaining security in the region in the past Soppeng kingdom that is also mentioned that the Dutch
Government in 1905 ordered to create a European-style building blend with the architecture in the city Bugis
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Watansoppeng for the office as well as the residence of the Dutch kontreliur.There’s even mention if the
building is made safe a place to rest Queen Juliana (Queen of the Netherlands).That is why,before the building is
being used as a museum,Soppeng many residents who call as Villa Dutch Queen Juliana thoughit has never
been to this place. Writing
Andi Ratnasari’s Writing
Rizka Pratiwi’s
Uniqueness of the life cycle of herd bats choose trees that grow in the area of about 1 square kilometer area of
central authority in the former Datu Soppeng-current conditions:north bordering Lapajung urban areas
(around the central market Watansoppeng),east of the village Lemba and Lalabata Rilau village,south of the
village Botto,and west to the village Bila.
Bats that are still choosing which grows in the area,at night flying around looking for food to pass other districts
Hani Afdaliah’s Writing
in the province of South Sulawesi,but the morning they were back to the trees that now grow in the downtown
section Watansoppeng.
Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and great-grandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the
city during the day Watansoppeng there was also a myth that call,for anyone who urinated bats from the trees
will get lucky omen unexpected.As for those whose bodies are overwritten ‘poo’ bat is going to address the
CONCLUSION
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matchmaking meet men or women from Soppeng district.

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FAULTS
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings

1.A few misspelled words found, and they are
“apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd
paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line,
“thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th
paragraph 4th line.
2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in
way the city name was written. The writer put the word
“city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are
“town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city
Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and
“village Bila”.
3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence
is “square that has now become part of the “ and the
mistaken word goes to “become”.
4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are
previous
HOME • “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and greatgrandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“
Andi Ratnasari’s Writing
FAULTS
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings

1.A few misspelled words found, and they are
“apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd
paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line,
“thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th
paragraph 4th line.
2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in
way the city name was written. The writer put the word
“city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are
“town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city
Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and
“village Bila”.
3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence
is “square that has now become part of the “ and the
mistaken word goes to “become”.
4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are
previous
HOME • “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and greatgrandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“
Andi Ratnasari’s Writing
FAULTS
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings

1.A few misspelled words found, and they are
“apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd
paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line,
“thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th
paragraph 4th line.
2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in
way the city name was written. The writer put the word
“city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are
“town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city
Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and
“village Bila”.
3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence
is “square that has now become part of the “ and the
mistaken word goes to “become”.
4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are
previous
HOME • “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and greatgrandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“
Andi Ratnasari’s Writing
FAULTS
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings

1.A few misspelled words found, and they are
“apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd
paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line,
“thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th
paragraph 4th line.
2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in
way the city name was written. The writer put the word
“city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are
“town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city
Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and
“village Bila”.
3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence
is “square that has now become part of the “ and the
mistaken word goes to “become”.
4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are
previous
HOME • “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and greatgrandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“
Andi Ratnasari’s Writing
FAULTS
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings

1.A few misspelled words found, and they are
“apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd
paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line,
“thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th
paragraph 4th line.
2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in
way the city name was written. The writer put the word
“city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are
“town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city
Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and
“village Bila”.
3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence
is “square that has now become part of the “ and the
mistaken word goes to “become”.
4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are
previous
HOME • “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and greatgrandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“
Andi Ratnasari’s Writing
Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings
Main Ideas

1.bats as sightings of a mystery world.
2.Bat is believed to be one of the royal
guards tangible bat.
3.This bat will immediately transformed
into a royal guard doing any defense.
4.Many residents call the villa as Queen
Juliana Villa.
5.herd bats choose trees that grow in the
area of central authority.
6.Bats doing activities at night and sleep in
the morning.
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7.anyone who urinated by bats from the
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CONCLUSSION
From the texts, we found many faults,
start from misspelled words, paragraph
and sentence arrange till wrong tenses
structures.
But mostly, the common faults are found in
misspelled words. Kelompok 6
We hope that this presentation can give a
positive effects to all of us for writing
better in the future.
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  • 2. HOME Kelompok 2 Andi Ratnasari’s Writing Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing Hani Afdaliah’s Writing CONCLUSION
  • 3. Kelompok 2 Andi Ratnasari’s Writing Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing Hani Afdaliah’s Writing HOME CONCLUSION
  • 4. HOME The Story of Passanggarahan Hill Long time ago, there was a hill called Passanggarahan. It was located in the middle of Sengkang city and it wasn’t far from Lake Tempe. Passanggarahan was a beautiful place because it had wonderful scenery. The weather was so fresh because this place was full of trees. In the middle of the hill, at the top of Passanggarahan hill, there was a very large tree. According to the people around it, this tree was the only big tree in Sengkang. The people around the hill believed that that large tree had a magic power because at night, the people could see the tree clearly. For the first time, they tried to come for praying under the tree in order to make their dream comes true. Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by people around Sengkang city, but also the people from the outside city. They came to that place to sacrifice their own pet like goat, cow, chicken and others and they believed they would get a prosperity in their lifeKelompok 2 forever. One day, there was a single man came to Passanggarahan hill with his little goat. He started to sacrifice his goat while prayed in front of the large tree. He believed if he did that, he would be able to get a beautiful Andi Ratnasari’s Writing Rizka woman. Day by day passed, but he couldn’t get what he wants since he came to Passanggarahan. and rich Pratiwi’s Writing He trusted too much about Passanggarahan’s magic power. He waited for weeks and months for his dreaming girl. Someday, he realized something important about what people did in Passanggarahan hill was useless. After that, within a few days he died without a woman by his side. Hani Afdaliah’s Writing This story was spread to the all people and since at that time, many people didn’t believed about Passanggarahan’s power anymore. Untill now, Passanggarahan was well known as a usual hill which didn’t have something special. It was just a place where the people stayed. In fact, the Passanggarahan’s power was a myth. HOME CONCLUSION
  • 5. Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing FAULTS The Story of Passanggarahan Hill 1.A false tense found in the 2nd Paragraph line 6th, there’s a mistaken word in future tense, the sentence is “…. in order to make their dream comes true.” mistaken word goes to “comes”. 2.There’s also a mistaken word in negative tense found, • in the 3rd Paragraph line 1st the sentence is “Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by people around Sengkang city“ mistaken word HOME goes to “visited” • and in the 5th Paragraph line 1st the sentence is “many people didn’t believed about Passanggarahan’s power anymore” and the previous mistaken word goes to “believed”.
  • 6. Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing FAULTS The Story of Passanggarahan Hill 1.A false tense found in the 2nd Paragraph line 6th, there’s a mistaken word in future tense, the sentence is “…. in order to make their dream comes true.” mistaken word goes to “comes”. 2.A false tense found, there’s a mistaken word in negative tense, • in the 3rd Paragraph line 1st the sentence is “Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by people around Sengkang city“ mistaken word HOME goes to “visited” • and in the 5th Paragraph line 1st the sentence is “many people didn’t believed about Passanggarahan’s power anymore” and the previous mistaken word goes to “believed”.
  • 7. Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing FAULTS The Story of Passanggarahan Hill 1.A false tense found in the 2nd Paragraph line 6th, there’s a mistaken word in future tense, the sentence is “…. in order to make their dream comes true.” mistaken word goes to “comes”. 2.A false tense found, there’s a mistaken word in negative tense, • in the 3rd Paragraph line 1st the sentence is “Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by people around Sengkang city“ mistaken word HOME goes to “visited” • and in the 5th Paragraph line 1st the sentence is “many people didn’t believed about Passanggarahan’s power anymore” and the previous mistaken word goes to “believed”.
  • 8. Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing FAULTS The Story of Passanggarahan Hill 1.A false tense found in the 2nd Paragraph line 6th, there’s a mistaken word in future tense, the sentence is “…. in order to make their dream comes true.” mistaken word goes to “comes”. 2.A false tense found, there’s a mistaken word in negative tense, • in the 3rd Paragraph line 1st the sentence is “Passanggarahan hill was not only visited by people around Sengkang city“ mistaken word HOME goes to “visited” • and in the 5th Paragraph line 1st the sentence is “many people didn’t believed about Passanggarahan’s power anymore” and the previous mistaken word goes to “believed”.
  • 9. Main Ideas Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing The Story of Passanggarahan Hill 1. Passanggarahan hill. 2. Passanggarahan was a beautiful place. 3. People believed that Passanggarahan hill could get them a prosperity in life forever. 4. A single man came to Passanggarahan hill to pray. 5. Passanggarahan’s power was a myth HOME previous
  • 10. HOME La Tongko Tongko There was a very stupid man. His name was La Tongko- Tongko. He lived with his mother. One day, La Tongko- Tongko told his mother that wanted to get married. If you want to get married, you have to find a girls first. Then ask her to marry you. La Tongko- Tongko listened to his mother. So, he started to find a girl. And while he was looking around, he met a girl. She was carrying some potatoes in her bag. Hey, girl I want to get married. Do you want to be my wife? The girl was angry! She thought La Tongko- Tongko was mocking her. She threw the potatoes at him. La Tongko- Tongko ran away! At home, La Tongko- Tongko told his mother about girl he met today. Oh, you are so stupid La Tongko- Tongko. You cannot ask a girl to get married like that. You and the girl have to love each other then you can get married, explained his mother. La Tongko- Tongko immediately went out. He still remembered his mothers advce. While he was looking around, a girl was walking and she was carrying some fire woods. La Tongko- Tongko approached her and talked to her. Hey, girl I love you. Do you love me? If you do, lets get married. The girl was angry! She threw some woods at him. La Tongko- Tongko ran away! Again, La Tongko- Tongko told his mother about the girl he met. Oh, no. Youre so stupid. You cannot do that. Love takes time. Besides that you have to talk nicely and gently, explained his mother. La Tongko- Tongko walked around. Finally, he arrived in the jungle. He saw a girl was lying on the ground under a big tree. He did not know that the girl was dead. He approached the girl and talked to her. Hi, beautiful girl. I really love you. How about you? Do you love me? Of course the girl did not respond. After all she was dead already. However, La Tongko- Tongko thought that girl needed time to respond. He remembered his mothers advice. He repeated his question again. And when she kept quiet, La Tongko- Tongko thought the girl was shy. Finally, he asked the final question. Do you want to marry me? If you keep quiet, I will think you say yes. And because the girl did not say anything and did not move at all, La Tongko- Tongko held her and brought her home. At home, La Tongko- Tongko put her in his bed room. He told his mother tha t he had already found a wife. The mother was happy. She wanted to meet the girl. And when she saw a dead body in the bed room, she screamed! La Tongko- Tongko,why did you bring a dead body to our home? Dead body? How did you know she is dead? asked La Tongko- Tongko. Cant you smell the stink from her body? Bury her body now! La Tongko- Tongko then buried the girls body. He felt that he just learned something. And after finished burying the body, he went back home. Before he went to bed, he broke wind. It smelled so bad. La Tongko- Tongko thought that he was dead. He dug a hole and buried his body. And when his mother saw him, she was really angry. what are you doing? Im dead mother. I broke wind and it smelles so stink. The mother could not do and say anything. He just left La Tongko- Tongko alone. And after several hours, La Tongko- Tongko could not hold it anymore. He freed himself and went back to his home. Kelompok 2 Andi Ratnasari’s Writing Rizka Pratiwi’s Writing Hani Afdaliah’s Writing HOME CONCLUSION
  • 11. 1.The Paragraph are not arranged Hani Afdaliah’s Writing La Tongko Tongko correctly. 2.A false on writing a direct sentence found in a few lines in the writing, the direct sentences that written not using the “ symbol in the beginning and the end of the sentence, and they are found in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th, 19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and 39th. 3.A misspelled word found, and that is “advce” in line 12th. 4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there HOME is a mistaken word in past tense, the previous
  • 12. 1.The Paragraph are not arranged Hani Afdaliah’s Writing La Tongko Tongko correctly. 2.A false on writing a direct sentence found in a few lines in the writing, the direct sentences that written not using the “ symbol in the beginning and the end of the sentence, and they are found in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th, 19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and 39th. 3.A misspelled word found, and that is “advce” in line 12th. 4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there HOME is a mistaken word in past tense, the previous
  • 13. 1.The Paragraph are not arranged Hani Afdaliah’s Writing La Tongko Tongko correctly. 2.A false on writing a direct sentence found in a few lines in the writing, the direct sentences that written not using the “ symbol in the beginning and the end of the sentence, and they are found in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th, 19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and 39th. 3.A misspelled word found, and that is “advce” in line 12th. 4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there HOME is a mistaken word in past tense, the previous
  • 14. 1.The Paragraph are not arranged Hani Afdaliah’s Writing La Tongko Tongko correctly. 2.A false on writing a direct sentence found in a few lines in the writing, the direct sentences that written not using the “ symbol in the beginning and the end of the sentence, and they are found in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th, 19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and 39th. 3.A misspelled word found, and that is “advce” in line 12th. 4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there HOME is a mistaken word in past tense, the previous
  • 15. 1.The Paragraph are not arranged Hani Afdaliah’s Writing La Tongko Tongko correctly. 2.A false on writing a direct sentence found in a few lines in the writing, the direct sentences that written not using the “ symbol in the beginning and the end of the sentence, and they are found in the line 2nd, 3rd, 6th, 10th, 15th, 18th, 19th, 22nd, 26th, 31st, 32nd, 33rd, 38th and 39th. 3.A misspelled word found, and that is “advce” in line 12th. 4.A false tense found in the line 41st, there HOME is a mistaken word in past tense, the previous
  • 16. Main Ideas La Tongko Tongko Hani Afdaliah’s Writing 1.La Tongko Tongko is a stupid man. 2.To get married La Tongko Tongko have to find a girl. 3.To get married La Tongko Tongko and the girl have to love each other. 4.To get married La Tongko Tongko that it needs time and he have to talk nicely to the girl. 5.La Tongko Tongko found a dead body. 6.La Tongko Tongko found out that the girl was already dead. HOME 7.La Tongko Tongko thought that he previous was
  • 17. Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings As many people are now interested and trying to find the apparations of the world of mystery,some residents in town Watansoppeng pointed flock of bats hanging in a tree in the district capital Soppeng as sightings of a mystery world. According to the stories of risidents,swarms of bats bird kingdom since the time of selecting trees that grow around town Watansoppeng as rest place during the day is not just any bat.Night birds is believed to be one of the royal guards tangible bat. Argument folklore,it is mentioned,that throughout the kingdom in Soppeng area became the center of power Datu (King) Soppeng with a radius of 1 kilometer square that has now become part of the city Watansoppeng always safe from tampering or enemy attacks.This bat will immediately transformed into a royal guard doing any defense as well as resistance to the movement of other troops wil enter the kingdom.Soppeng havoc in the region. Maintaining security in the region in the past Soppeng kingdom that is also mentioned that the Dutch Government in 1905 ordered to create a European-style building blend with the architecture in the city Bugis Kelompok 2 Watansoppeng for the office as well as the residence of the Dutch kontreliur.There’s even mention if the building is made safe a place to rest Queen Juliana (Queen of the Netherlands).That is why,before the building is being used as a museum,Soppeng many residents who call as Villa Dutch Queen Juliana thoughit has never been to this place. Writing Andi Ratnasari’s Writing Rizka Pratiwi’s Uniqueness of the life cycle of herd bats choose trees that grow in the area of about 1 square kilometer area of central authority in the former Datu Soppeng-current conditions:north bordering Lapajung urban areas (around the central market Watansoppeng),east of the village Lemba and Lalabata Rilau village,south of the village Botto,and west to the village Bila. Bats that are still choosing which grows in the area,at night flying around looking for food to pass other districts Hani Afdaliah’s Writing in the province of South Sulawesi,but the morning they were back to the trees that now grow in the downtown section Watansoppeng. Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and great-grandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day Watansoppeng there was also a myth that call,for anyone who urinated bats from the trees will get lucky omen unexpected.As for those whose bodies are overwritten ‘poo’ bat is going to address the CONCLUSION HOME matchmaking meet men or women from Soppeng district. HOME
  • 18. Andi Ratnasari’s Writing FAULTS Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings 1.A few misspelled words found, and they are “apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line, “thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th paragraph 4th line. 2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in way the city name was written. The writer put the word “city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are “town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and “village Bila”. 3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence is “square that has now become part of the “ and the mistaken word goes to “become”. 4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are previous HOME • “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and greatgrandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“
  • 19. Andi Ratnasari’s Writing FAULTS Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings 1.A few misspelled words found, and they are “apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line, “thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th paragraph 4th line. 2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in way the city name was written. The writer put the word “city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are “town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and “village Bila”. 3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence is “square that has now become part of the “ and the mistaken word goes to “become”. 4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are previous HOME • “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and greatgrandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“
  • 20. Andi Ratnasari’s Writing FAULTS Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings 1.A few misspelled words found, and they are “apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line, “thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th paragraph 4th line. 2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in way the city name was written. The writer put the word “city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are “town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and “village Bila”. 3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence is “square that has now become part of the “ and the mistaken word goes to “become”. 4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are previous HOME • “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and greatgrandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“
  • 21. Andi Ratnasari’s Writing FAULTS Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings 1.A few misspelled words found, and they are “apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line, “thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th paragraph 4th line. 2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in way the city name was written. The writer put the word “city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are “town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and “village Bila”. 3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence is “square that has now become part of the “ and the mistaken word goes to “become”. 4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are previous HOME • “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and greatgrandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“
  • 22. Andi Ratnasari’s Writing FAULTS Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings 1.A few misspelled words found, and they are “apparations” in 1st paragraphth 1st line, “risidents” in 2nd paragraph 1st line, and “wil” in 3rd paragraph 5th line, “thoughit“ in 4th paragraph 6th line, and “kontreliur” in 4th paragraph 4th line. 2.A few mistakes in words arranging found, they are in way the city name was written. The writer put the word “city” ahead of the city title which is wrong. They are “town Watansoppen”, “district capital Soppeng”, “city Watansoppeng”, ”village Botto”, “village Lemba” and “village Bila”. 3.A false tense found in the 3rd paragraph, the sentence is “square that has now become part of the “ and the mistaken word goes to “become”. 4.A few non-senses paragraph found, they are previous HOME • “Mystery behind the story sounds great-grandchildren and greatgrandchildren-bats decorate the trees in the city during the day…“
  • 23. Andi Ratnasari’s Writing Intangible Royal Bodyguard Bat Sightings Main Ideas 1.bats as sightings of a mystery world. 2.Bat is believed to be one of the royal guards tangible bat. 3.This bat will immediately transformed into a royal guard doing any defense. 4.Many residents call the villa as Queen Juliana Villa. 5.herd bats choose trees that grow in the area of central authority. 6.Bats doing activities at night and sleep in the morning. HOME 7.anyone who urinated by bats from the
  • 24. HOME CONCLUSSION From the texts, we found many faults, start from misspelled words, paragraph and sentence arrange till wrong tenses structures. But mostly, the common faults are found in misspelled words. Kelompok 6 We hope that this presentation can give a positive effects to all of us for writing better in the future. HOME CONCLUSION