Kaya Sumbland - D Record of Grade for draft 1What Went Well: (Individual)• Clear presentation and organisation•• Excellent structure Good understanding BEven Better If:• More detail• Use more images• Take real pictures of charactersTargets to Improve:• To explain my points in a PEE structure and use a verity of images.Sanel Homer - UWhat Went Well:• Good organisation• Nice diagrams• Good understanding of chosen themeEven Better If:• Relate my pictures to the words• Less text• More detailTargets to Improve:• Make sure my diagrams are not to basic and shorted lengthy paragraphs into bullet points.
Record of Grade for draft 1 B (Individual)Gia Alveranga - UNo work handed inRahel Fasil - EWhat Went Well-• Short brief points Even Better If-• Use titles for slides• Don’t talk about films I havent watched• Make sure I present my knowledge more clearlyTargets to Improve-• Make sure I understand fully what enigma is and organise my slides better
Presentation Level – D- Record of Grade for draft 1What went well? Group B• Showing progress and achievement• Slides have good organisation• Good effort and creativity• Good start to conventionsEven better if?• Colour code should be background• Title all the slides• More contribution from Sanel, Rahel and Gia• Don’t read from the screenTargets to improve…• To make sure all group members contribute• Write our presentation with more detail and understanding• To word our idea’s better
Kaya & Sanel Decisions and Revisions C Since our first draft, we’ve changed our idea a lot. • Our first draft was a thriller on a girl who had schizophrenia who thought she was possessed. However, our feedback told us to take out schizophrenia as it was too complicated and sent out the wrong message about the mental illness. • So, in our second draft we removed the mental illness and make the character actually be possessed by demons and spirits who kidnaps innocent victims. Then again, our feedback told us it was to complicated and too much. We were told to either focus on possession or kidnap, or change the genre. Also our locations were unreliable and just not very flexible.
Kaya & Sanel Decisions and Revisions C Therefore, as a group we decided to come up with a completely new idea. Kaya, Sanel and Rahel all wrote their own opening sequence and one got picked to be the one we develop as it suited our target audience and as a group we felt it would be best in However, the ending of our new opening connecting with them. So, we have sequence about drugs was confusing and now changed to drama, starting all didn’t match, so, Kaya and Sanel met up as our genre research from scratch. the others in our group couldn’t and discussed and revised on many different ways on ending it after thoroughly researching the drug our character took. Also making very interesting and captivating for our audience. Making these changes helped us greatly because we fully understand and we fully research the things we’re doing, revised our locations thoroughly and its a lot less complicated than our other drafts helping us explain it better to our target audience to receive the best feedback we can.
Kaya & Sanel D Genre – Drama • Our genre has changed because all of our thriller ideas were to complicated for our audience and sent out the wrong message. • However we changed to drama as we felt its more effective and real for our target audience. • We all agreed that doing a drama would be the best genre for us because we understand the conventions and how we can relate it to real life. • Also it can hopefully send out a educational message.
Kaya Example of a Drama film D Bend It Like Beckham 2002Bend it like Beckham is a dramabecause it shows the real life ofJesminder and her conflict with herfamily because her dream is to be afemale footballer as they want her tolead the normal life of an Indianwoman. She’s also a character many oftheir target audience can relate to, alsoat the end of the film her parentscome to realise that shes passionateabout football and lets her play withher team.
Sanel Example of a Drama film D Confession Of A Teenage Drama Queen - 2004 This is a drama film because its based on real life and how Lola is obsessed with this celebrity called Stu and she is determined to met him whether her mum grounds her or not which can relate to teenagers today and also how being too obsessed and focusing on the stars without realising how important school work is.
Kaya & Sanel D.a Tensions Climax Characters we Relationships can relate to Drama Conventions Conflict Realisation Emotions
Convention Use/Develop/ Purpose and Examples fromDrama Challenge Description films D.aTension Use – audience Purpose – to make the follow a character audience fear for the Kidulthood not knowing what is characters and to create enigma going to happen Description – all the Develop – audience characters are shown in is given the the school playground. impression that The camera isn’t somebody is controlled and is filmed watching them at Dutch angle which conveys the impression that they are being Boy in the playground watched creating texting on his phone. tension.Conflict Use – argument Teenage daughter Precious between mother comes home after giving and daughter birth to her daughter. The mother is jealous Challenge – and angry as she has escalates into an given birth to her argument that has husband’s baby. She quite graphic and becomes so angry that extreme violence she throws a TV at her. Mother throws a TV down the stairs at Precious