APEER ASSESSMENT (draft 3) BYDEBBIE, MARIA & MILKA
Kaya Sumbland - D Record of Grade for draft 1What Went Well: (Individual)• Clear presentation and organisation•• Excellent structure Good understanding BEven Better If:• More detail• Use more images• Take real pictures of charactersTargets to Improve:• To explain my points in a PEE structure and use a verity of images.Sanel Homer - UWhat Went Well:• Good organisation• Nice diagrams• Good understanding of chosen themeEven Better If:• Relate my pictures to the words• Less text• More detailTargets to Improve:• Make sure my diagrams are not to basic and shorted lengthy paragraphs into bullet points.
Record of Grade for draft 1 B (Individual)Gia Alveranga - UNo work handed inRahel Fasil - EWhat Went Well:• Short brief pointsEven Better If:• Use titles for slides• More detail• Make sure I present my knowledge more clearlyTargets to Improve:• Use more images and less text
Kaya & Sanel Record of Grade for draft 1 Presentation Level – D- Group B What went well? • Showing progress and achievement • Slides have good organisation • Good effort and creativity • Good start to conventions Even better if? • Colour code should be background • Title all the slides • More contribution from Sanel, Rahel and Gia • Don’t read from the screen Targets to improve… • To make sure all group members contribute • Write our presentation with more detail and understanding • To word our idea’s better
Kaya & Sanel Decisions and Revisions C Since our first draft, we’ve changed our idea a lot. DRAFT 1 : • Thriller genre • Based on a girl who had schizophrenia and thought she was possessed • Too complicated and sent out the wrong message about the mental illness. DRAFT 2 : • Completely same idea • Mental illness taken out – wrong message • Replaced with actually being possessed
Kaya & Sanel Decisions and Revisions C CHANGE IN IDEA : • We decided to change idea completely • Drama genre • We did research again on conventions • We want to connect with the audience • New idea was a girl’s life on drugs and her hallucinations ALTERED IDEA : • Idea suits more to a thriller • Change drugs to mental illness • Hallucination - > Bizarre delusions • Change to psychological thriller • Alter flashbacks to match new concept • Girl with schizophrenia who is being emotionally connected to toys from her real parents
Kaya Decisions and Revisions C HOW THE CHANGES HAVE HELPED: • Explored various genre’s creating a varied understanding of the differences • Wider understanding of different themes and topics • Exercise our creativity and to stimulate greater idea’s each time Our changes in pictures!!
Kaya & Sanel D Genre – Psychological Thriller • Our genre has changed because all of our thriller and drama ideas always somehow turned into a psychological battle for the character • We feel psychological thriller is the most interesting genre for most 15 + audiences • We all agreed that doing a psychological thriller would be the best genre for us because we can relate it to real life while still adding a bit of controversy.
Kaya Genre – Psychological thriller • Related to the mind or process of the mind Psychological : • Suspense comes from one character • Conflict with their or others mind • Focus on intense action or plot Thriller : • Emphasized character or plot for suspense • Character rely on their mental recourses rather than physical Psychological • Battle for equilibrium in their own mind Thriller : • Suspense is created through characters mind or upon their mind
Kaya D Example of a psychological thriller film Donnie Darko - 2001 Daunting bizarre Being told what The main character delusional to do from the doesnt realise the character only delusional difference between seen by the main character thinking reality and pretend character its right
Sanel Example of a physiological thriller film D The Black Swan (2010)This is a physiological thriller filmbecause Nina the swan princess had atrauma-based mind control wherewhat she was imagining seemed realand so the mind control in the BlackSwan can relate to reality as we couldunderstand how they can interconnectand relate to some of the harshrealities of professional entertainmentindustry.