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Unit 4 Essay feedback

  2. 2. Grade Boundaries A* 62 A 57 B 53 C 47 D 42 E 38
  3. 3. Some of you need to speed up It’s very difficult to get really high grades if you write a small amount! In 1½ hours you should be able to write several pages!
  4. 4. Particular issues: Tectonics - intro Almost no one mentioned why management was needed/what is the purpose, in the intro! Haiti is an LDC, not an LEDC, you should know this! Several people spent too long on old case studies – need to be “topical” for top marks, so not much after mid-90s Cultural – intro Too few people mentioned anything to do with different scales – global/ national/regional diversity Too often too few case studies or too little variety Don’t get diversity and multiculturalism mixed up!
  5. 5. Methodology Too many people missing easy marks by not doing enough! When you know what case studies you’re doing create a table and learn it off by heart. You can run it past me. You must have variety – videos, newspapers, journals, webpages, etc. Please don’t include Wikipedia, or at least only once! You must say something about how you got reliable, fairly unbiased data. Good terms to use are “peer reviewed”, “widely respected”, “cross referenced”,
  6. 6. And with the Analysis Lack of mention of people in general, pushed many of you down the grid Very sloppy on “values and perspectives”. You cannot just say everything is good in MEDCs and everything is bad in NICs/LDCs/LEDCs. Too few case studies that show that sometimes things go right in poor countries The reason there was no tsunami warning system in the Indian Ocean in 2004 was because there was no knowledge that they were a threat in the region. Little research had been done, and so no one was expecting it. In hindsight it seems naïve (or did USGS just not care?) Too many points were simplistic, and imprecise – very few people mentioned individual charities efforts at the “relief” stage, why ever not? When a country/region/tribe maintains its traditions, language, etc that is good for global diversity. Cultural homogeneity isn’t a bad thing in itself, only if it’s achieved through coercion or violence (racism, ethnic cleansing, etc) Hardly any mention of language, and yet we’ve done some work about how important it is in maintaining culture and passing knowledge down the generations Very few people mentioned anything to do with “preservation” as a human factor in maintaining culture. Surprised that there was so little mention of UNESCO whose main job is to support diversity across the globe! Be topical. When you did mention separatists it was usually somewhere other than the UK what about the Scottish?
  7. 7. Conclusion and evaluation At the end of most, if not all, sections do a little sum up – “this shows that …. is/isn’t important” etc The conclusion must refer back to the major points in your essay – bring together your “important” or “less important” bits – so “the case studies of …. and …. clearly show that …. Is the most important factor, however ….. suggests that …… is also very important” etc. To get good marks it has to be “based on content” or even better “thorough recall of case studies”, in other words it can’t be done in 6 lines! You must time yourself so you’ve got 15 minutes at the end to get it done
  8. 8. Dos and don’ts Do Use fairly recent examples Make sure they are from different regions – feeling that there’s a bit too much USA! Have a mix of Volcanoes and Earthquakes Recognise that scale matters – Japan 2011 and Indian Ocean Tsunami were mega events! Don’t Get too caught up with the different responses to primary and secondary hazards for the same event, it makes it seem disjointed Talk about “good” or “bad” response – instead use “effective”, “successful”, “unhelpful”, “unsuccessful” etc. Do Think at large scale about some issues, like globalisation, technological change, language, religion, UNESCO, TNCs Then bring them down to the local – so loss of language is bad because… and this has impacted on culture in …. Fine to recognise that globalisation can bring good things – like better healthcare, but at a price Make sure you have a few with different physical factors involved! Don’t Say that everyone getting mixed up is a good thing – eg “TNCs help diversity”, they don’t they destroy it!
  9. 9. What next? Choose one of your case studies and do a timeline of what happened before, during and after the event. Who did what and whether it was effective or not. Then categorise the actions into the Parks model pre, relief, rehab and reconstruction Choose one of your case studies and do a diagram which shows the factors affecting culture: How about this, like a Venn diagram (but please don’t all do Bhutan!) Bhutan Culture Human factors Physical factors
  10. 10. Next title! Hand in next week! Assess the extent to which preparation work undertaken before the event is the most effective means of managing tectonic hazards Assess the extent to which human factors are most important in determining levels of cultural diversity