[but, or, yet, so]
He was a friendly man most of the time, but he could also be really
It was a warm day, yet storm clouds gathered over the distant hills.
It is also scientifically proven that children are more aware and concentrated in the morning, so there is
no point in trying to teach children maths or literacy at 12:00 in the afternoon when they are probably
not even thinking or concentrating properly. [Aya 6s]
I didn’t care and swung my sword at his head, but he was too quick for me and pulled off my helmet.
He was a tall, awkward man, with an old, crumpled jacket.
It was an overgrown, messy garden with a lifeless, leafless
The moon hung above us like a patient, pale white face.
My heart was beating as fast as the hooves of a horse on a race track. [Aya 6S]
The glittery lights twinkled like gold and the fairy at the top was awesome. [Murtaza
My heart was beating like horses stampeding through my chest, as the sting of the
dart like rain pierced my skin. [Samrah and Aya 6S]
Confused, troubled, worried, she didn’t know what had
Determined, worried, terrified, they fought on as the ship turned and tossed. [Aya 6S]
Exhausted and worried, tired and hungry, they didn’t know how
much further they had to go.
The waves crackled and clashed, tossed and turned, and soon I was drenched from
head to toe. [Samrah and Aya 6S]
Scared and frightened, terrified and petrified I ran away from the monster. [Kesser
The vampire is a dreadful creature: it kills by sucking blood from its
Desperate, she screamed for help.
Anxious, they realised they were lost in the forest.
Weary, I didn’t want to go school as I had been awake all night. [Hussain 6S]
She told the little girl not to be so naughty. (Inside however, she
was secretly amused by what she had done.)
Jo said how pleased she was to be at the party. (It wasn’t the truth
– she longed to be elsewhere.)
On the outside I was brave. (On the inside I was scared stiff.) [Kesser 6S]
If, if, if, then
If I hadn’t found that watch, if the alarm hadn’t gone off, if it
hadn’t scared the burglars, then I wouldn’t be sitting here today.
If the alarm had gone off, if the bus had been on time, if the road
repairs had been completed, then his life would have been
If it wasn’t snowing, if it wasn’t cold, if the garden wasn’t to deep, then we would be
allowed to play outside. [Simrah 6S]
Emotion word, (comma)
Desperate, she screamed for help.
Terrified, he froze instantly on the spot where he stood.
Angry, the storm destructed all in sight and the blinding flash damaged the eyes of
the poor citizens. [Samrah and Aya 6S]
Cakes, which are fantastic, are not so good for your health.
My mother, who was born in 1944, looks very young for her
The sea ,which was becoming more deadly by the minute, threw me about like a rag
doll. [Samrah and Aya 6S]
Ad, same ad
He was a fast runner, fast because he had to be.
It was a silent town, silent in a way that did not make you feel
Some people love football: others just can’t stand it.
Some days are full of enjoyment: others begin and end terribly.
The more, the more
The more upset she was, the more her tears flowed.
The less happy he became, the less likely he’d was to smile.
The more I stayed inside, the more I became warm. [Kareemah 6S]
The more I begin to think about what awaits the less I focus. [Hamiz 6S]
The more they work against their families, the more they get tired of their slavery.
Imagine 3 examples:
Imagine a time when people were not afraid, when life was
much simpler, when everyone helped each other: this is a story of
Tell: show 3; examples
The commander was tense : sweat dripping; eyes narrowed;
staring out onto the battlefield.
I knocked on the huge, wooden door; no answer. I knocked again but this time more
aggressive; more determined; more hopeful for an answer. [Aya 6S]
John was a delighted, young boy: always helpful; always smiling; kind and happy
hearted. [Harry 6S]
A house elf is a peculiar, small creature: protuberant, bulging eyes; old, dirty rags as
clothing; a large, pointy witch-like nose; sugar brown skin with wrinkles. [Samrah
Jesse James (aka Tom Howard) was one of the most feared
outlaws of the wild west.
Winky (aka Blinky by Percy Weasley ) was a freed house elf
who neither wanted freedom nor took to being a free elf.
Dobby, trying to protect the boy who lived (aka Harry Potter) worked against the
Malfoy family in order to keep Harry safe, before finally being tricked into being set
free. [Samrah 6S]
Name – adjective pair Dementors – dark hooded and repugnant – are amongst
the foulest creatures that room this earth.
House elves - generous and loyal - are very helpful to their families they serve,
however not all are kind but grumpy instead. [Kareemah 6S]
House elves – loyal, devoted and dedicated – have long been a crucial element of
wizarding families. [Samrah 6S]
Description, which + simile
A dementor’s presence is felt by an unnatural darkness, which
makes it’s victim feel like death has walked through it’s body.
Most important – in short
Above all, dobby was dedicated, loyal and immensely brave –
in short an amazing magical being.
But above all house elves are immensely brave and dedicated - in short, without
them the wizarding world would be an utterly different environment. [Samrah 6S]