MarrakechImproving Your Essay With P.E.E.
How Not To Use Quotations"Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galedback, but it is generally owing to some kind of...
"Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galedback, but it is generally owing to some kind ofacident if one even notic...
Spelling Errors are   You must always                                     unforgivable in aintroduce a quotation!         ...
P.E.E.• Point• Evidence• Explanation
Point• What point are you trying to make in the first place?• How does the point relate to the main THEME(S) of  the text?•...
Evidence• Does your evidence really support or prove the  point you are trying to make?• How much of the quotation is actu...
Explanation• Unless you explain what your evidence  shows, you are wasting your time.• Your explanation needs to show or e...
Look... A Donkey!• Lets look again at the  quotation Ive selected...• 1st: What aspect of the  THEME does it illustrate?• ...
Main ThemeThe end ofcolonialism isinevitable...
Main ThemeThe end ofcolonialism isinevitable...PS: Morocco was aFrench colony… Orwellis British, but he wasvisiting Morocco!
How To Use Quotations"Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with itsgaled back, but it is generally owing to somekind of acid...
How To Use Quotations"Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with itsgalled back, but it is generally owing to somekind of acc...
What Does The Quotation Illustrate… And How?• It has to illustrate something related to the  theme if it is to be worth us...
What Does The Quotation Illustrate… And How?• Which part of the quotation is actually the  important bit?Quickly select th...
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Marrakech Essay Redrafting

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This is the first part of the slidedeck I put together to help my S5/6 class redraft and improve their Marrakech essays.

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Marrakech Essay Redrafting

  1. 1. MarrakechImproving Your Essay With P.E.E.
  2. 2. How Not To Use Quotations"Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galedback, but it is generally owing to some kind ofacident if one even notices the old woman underher load of sticks"This quote by George shows that people care moreabout the donkeys than the people. It also showsthe old woman had to carry a load of sticks thatthe donkey could have carried instead and I dontthink it is fair either.
  3. 3. "Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galedback, but it is generally owing to some kind ofacident if one even notices the old woman underher load of sticks"This quote by George shows that people care moreabout the donkeys than the people. It also showsthe old woman had to carry a load of sticks thatthe donkey could have carried instead and I dontthink it is fair either.
  4. 4. Spelling Errors are You must always unforgivable in aintroduce a quotation! quotation! "Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with its galed back, but it is generally owing to some kind of acident if one even notices the old woman under her load of sticks" know Orwell! Use Surnames only! You dont This quote by George shows that people care more about the donkeys than the people. It also shows the old woman had to carry a load of sticks that the donkey could have carried instead and I dont think it is fair either. You are meant to write in something called formal continuous prose… and that means no contractions!
  5. 5. P.E.E.• Point• Evidence• Explanation
  6. 6. Point• What point are you trying to make in the first place?• How does the point relate to the main THEME(S) of the text?• What is the best way of introducing your point?
  7. 7. Evidence• Does your evidence really support or prove the point you are trying to make?• How much of the quotation is actually needed?• Have you presented the evidence correctly?
  8. 8. Explanation• Unless you explain what your evidence shows, you are wasting your time.• Your explanation needs to show or explain the relationship between the evidence and the point you are trying to make.• Simplicity and clarity are always the best strategies.
  9. 9. Look... A Donkey!• Lets look again at the quotation Ive selected...• 1st: What aspect of the THEME does it illustrate?• 2nd: Its a long quotation… do we need to use all of it?• 3rd: What point are you trying to make by using it?
  10. 10. Main ThemeThe end ofcolonialism isinevitable...
  11. 11. Main ThemeThe end ofcolonialism isinevitable...PS: Morocco was aFrench colony… Orwellis British, but he wasvisiting Morocco!
  12. 12. How To Use Quotations"Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with itsgaled back, but it is generally owing to somekind of acident if one even notices the oldwoman under her load of sticks"First: MAKE SURE IT IS SPELLED CORRECTLY!
  13. 13. How To Use Quotations"Anyone can be sorry for the donkey with itsgalled back, but it is generally owing to somekind of accident if one even notices the oldwoman under her load of sticks"First: MAKE SURE IT IS SPELLED CORRECTLY!
  14. 14. What Does The Quotation Illustrate… And How?• It has to illustrate something related to the theme if it is to be worth using... Quickly write down what you think the quotation has to say about the MAIN THEME of the essay. (2 minutes!)
  15. 15. What Does The Quotation Illustrate… And How?• Which part of the quotation is actually the important bit?Quickly select the word(s) that are actually related to the main theme. The skill is remembering that you want to use theminimum of words from the original and are allowed to paraphrase the rest. (2 minutes!)

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