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Transition

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Transition

  1. 1. What a story needs for GREAT organization!
  2. 2. <ul><li>What are they? </li></ul><ul><li>Words used in stories to help ideas flow smoothly. </li></ul><ul><li>Here’s an example without ANY transitions. </li></ul>
  3. 3. <ul><li>My brothers and sister and I have certain jobs we do to help the rest of the members of our family. My main job each week is keeping our van clean. That’s a big job. I have to clean out all of the trash. I vacuum under every seat and in the aisles. I clean all of the windows, inside and out, until they shine. I scrub every inch of the outside of the van with hot, soapy water and rinse it with the hose. I dry the van with special towels that don’t have any lint. I’m always proud of the way I keep the van clean for my family. </li></ul>
  4. 4. How is this one different?
  5. 5. <ul><li>My brothers and sister and I have certain jobs we do to help the rest of the members of our family. My main job each week is keeping our van clean. That’s a big job. First , I have to clean out all of the trash. Then , I vacuum under every seat and in the aisles. Then , I clean all of the windows, inside and out, until they shine. Then, I scrub every inch of the outside of the van with hot, soapy water and rinse it with the hose. Then , I dry the van with special towels that don’t have any lint. I’m always proud of the way I keep the van clean for my family. </li></ul>
  6. 6. Nooooooooo! The author used “THEN” waaaay too much!
  7. 7. <ul><li>My brothers and sister and I have certain jobs we do to help the rest of the members of our family. For example , my main job each week is keeping our van clean. By the way , that’s a big job. To begin with , I have to clean out all of the trash. Next , I vacuum under every seat and in the aisles. </li></ul>
  8. 8. <ul><li>After that , I clean all of the windows, inside and out, until they shine. Then , I scrub every inch of the outside of the van with hot, soapy water and rinse it with the hose. For the final step , I dry the van with special towels that don’t have any lint. As you can imagine , I’m always proud of the way I keep the van clean for my family. </li></ul>
  9. 9. <ul><li>It’s hard to find smooth transitional words without being repetitive! </li></ul><ul><li>Use them sparingly. </li></ul><ul><li>They are just ONE part of “organization” in writing. </li></ul>

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