The art of writing
add more description to lackluster
To use a broader range of vocab and
sensory details to make our writing come
I gave a spine tingling shriek.
I was filled with anxiety and worry as to why this island only cost me $5.00
I exclaimed as I touched the middle and the pearl began to glow.
We saw a dreadful spirit looking over him, the ancient god of chaos and anger. We
interrupted his eternal resting place.
“Silence!” the spirit boomed as loud as thunder.
I would panic and crawl into a ball.
It can change into a big black bat that feasts on your soul with a blood screaming
I was in a factory with my brothers and sisters, and now I’m in some dumb basket
after these kids came and abducted us. Ack! Help!
“Why have you trespassed in my ruins?” he boomed.
She is a lot of work. It’s almost like taking care of a little baby.
Go grab your autobiographical incident or your essay
from Comp. Unit 1.
Find 1 (just one) lackluster boring sentence you wrote.
Using what we learned today, MAKE IT BETTER. Fill out the
Google doc to show us your improved sentence.