Show, Don’t Tell• Description writing tries to SHOW you, not TELL you about something or someone.• Use specific details that paint a picture. Consider this You are a car salesman. A customer comes in and says, “I want to buy a car.” What would you say to the customer? Does the customer want an old car, a new car, a sports car, a truck, etc? He What kind needs to be SPECIFIC! of car?
Sensory Details SIGHTUse your senses to help you write SOUND Sensory SMELL description. Details FEELING
Sensory Details Example A well-lit and cheery room to write Sensory The sound of The smell of others typing Details: coffee, stimula papers on ting you to computers The Writing write well Center The look of excited faces as the write with confidenceCrossroads, Integrated Reading and Writing, Pam Dusenberry and Julie O’Donnell Moore, Prentice Hall, 2011
Dominant Impression• You are describing one thing.• That one thing is your main point.• This becomes your topic (or thesis) statement. You might describe The island was aA room disaster after theA place hurricane.A personOr some other thing….
Supporting Details• Use your senses.• Add specific details to support your topic (thesis) statement. The island was a What do you… disaster after the See? hurricane. Hear? Smell? Feel? Taste?
Supporting DetailsThe island was a disaster after the hurricane. See? Hear? Sound of silence Smell? Feel? Taste?
Spatial OrderThe island was a disaster after the hurricane. Imagine you just stepped off a plane ontoDescriptive the disaster site of the island. writing What is the first thing you would notice? organizes Would you smell the dead fish first?the detailsby moving Or maybe the heat and humidity through would hit you first. space. Or maybe you are stunned by how quiet it is with no cars moving and the power out.
Finishing Up• Form all your ideas into complete sentences.• Add transitions.• Check to be sure you described everything.• Proofread! Happy Writing!