Powerpoint designed to show students a sentence or word, then have them determine a better way to express the idea.

1. Words
CHOOSE A BETTER WORD OR PHRASE
OR DROP THE WORD OR PHRASE
WRITING FOR COMMUNICATION PROFESS IONS
JEFF GI LBERT
CEDARVI L LE UNIVERS ITY

2. Words
Completely obscure
◦ cover
My sympathies are entirely with him.
◦ My sympathies are with him.
Totally destroyed
◦ destroyed
This carelessness can take any number of different forms.
◦ This carelessness can take any number of forms.
◦ This carelessness can take different forms.

3. Words
The connection is perfectly clear.
◦ The connection is clear.
Faced with such a variety of obstacles, …
◦ Faced with obstacles, …
Thinking clearly is an entirely conscious act.
◦ Thinking clearly is a conscious act.
Good writing doesn’t just come naturally.
◦ Good writing doesn’t come naturally.
at this point in time
◦ now

4. Words
He is a personal friend of mine.
◦ He is a friend of mine.
Currently
◦ now
At the present time
◦ now
Presently
◦ soon
Are you experiencing any pain?
◦ Does it hurt?

5. Words
The Air Force missile impacted with the ground prematurely.
◦ The Air Force missile crashed.
Assistance
◦ help
Numerous
◦ many
Individual
◦ man or woman or person

6. Words
Remainder
◦ rest
Initial
◦ first
Implement
◦ do
Sufficient
◦ enough
To purchase
◦ buy

7. Words
To attempt
◦ try
Referred to as
◦ called
I dialogued with my boss
◦ talked
With the possible exception of
◦ except
Due to the fact that
◦ because

8. Words
He totally lacked the ability to
◦ he couldn’t
Until such time as
◦ until
For the purpose of
◦ for
Smile happily
◦ smile
Tall skyscraper
◦ skyscraper

9. Words
Small village
◦ village
She was looking for a bit of happiness.
◦ She was looking for happiness.
His new job was pretty much the type he couldn’t turn down.
◦ His new job was the type he couldn’t turn down.
They are getting married this weekend.
◦ They are getting married Saturday.
He missed the deadline by a couple days.
◦ He missed the deadline by two days.

10. Words
Muscular bodybuilder
◦ bodybuilder
He got an A for the first time ever.
◦ He got an A for the first time.
◦ He got his first A