IELTS Essay, topic: Overpopulation
The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, This is causing
problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialized and
developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes,
and suggest at least one possible solution.
You should write at least 250 words.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Nowadays, the population increase dramatically in most countries around the world.
This is true for developed and developing nations. Overpopulation cause different
number of problems. However, government can solved these problems by many
There are several problems that raising number of people in undeveloped countries
causes. Firstly, it is very difficult to provide enough food for all people. Secondly, the
government limit the number of children per family to educate in the school. In
addition, in poorest countries usually have a lot of unemployment as well, and when the
population increase the number of unemployment increase. Finally, when too many
people live on the land, the environment suffers.
There are different problems that overpopulation causes in rich nations. Firstly, it is
very difficult for governments to provide helpful public services in overcrowded cities.
Moreover, there is generally a great deal more crime such as using drugs, killing
people, steeling, and ect. Which that often because of high rates of unemployment.
However, overpopulation problems in both nations have two main solution which it
deal by governments. Firstly, government must educate people to limit size of the
family. For example, in China they have a policy call “one cild policy” which it is limit
size of the family to have one or two children but that it is beginning to have an effect
in the world’s most crowded nation.
To sum up, if the population impulsive increase continues, many more people will die
of hunger in poor countries. Also, in rich nations, the life in the cities will become more
and more difficult.
This essay covers the task and has a good content. However there are several areas
to improve. Grammar needs more attention (see comments underlined in blue).
First paragraph, last sentence – repetition of solve and solution, better say “can
find many solutions to those problems”. Third paragraph, last sentence – poor
structure, looks unfinished. Overall, looks like a Band 6 – 6.5 essay.