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28 September 1932
Mr W J Filbert
Vice Chairman, Finance Committee
United States Steel Corporation
71 Broadway, New York, NY.
Dear Mr Filbert,
I have delayed answering your letter of 22 September so I may at the same time acknowledge
the safe arrival of the photographs of labour-saving machinery you sent us. I now take much pleasure in
acknowledging these photographs and enclose a formal acknowledgement from the Society. This, however,
does not begin to express the appreciation I have for this contribution.
It has arrived at a most opportune time, since the Industrial Management Department of the
Harvard Business School is preparing to exhibit moving pictures on iron and steel organisations next week.
This instruction will be supplemented by an exhibition of still pictures of labour-saving devices in iron and
steel plants of the country, and you may be sure the collection you sent will occupy a permanent place.
I think our exhibit of photographs of labour-saving machinery is quite impressive, since we
received your photographs and sets from the Bethlehem Steel Corporation, the Jones and Laughlin Steel
Corporation and the Midvale Steel Company. Yours are particularly valuable because there is an opportunity
for comparison between the methods used in earlier days and modern appliances, with data showing the
decrease in manual labour and the increase in production.
With renewed thanks for your cooperation,
Yours truly,
Frank C Ayres
Executive Secretary.
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