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  1. 1. Logan Ridings, Jacob Hewgley, Alex DulongMrs. LesterHonors Lit Comp.12 April 2012Why should the public spend more government tax dollars to fund PTSD technologies andmedical advancements?Alex DuLongResearch question 1. Why are new medical advancements and technologies needed for themilitary? Topic Sentence 1: The mortality rate among soldiers soldiers is roughly three times thatof Americans of similar age at home. [photo]Concrete 1: New statistics show that the war in Iraq is comparable to Vietnam. [photo]Commentary 1: Overall, the death rate of military personnel in Iraq is roughlyfour per every one thousand soldiers. Commentary 2: During Vietnam the mortality rate among American troops was nearly 22per 1,000 a year, five times that of the war in Iraq. [photo]Commentary 3: The ratio of dead to wounded is only a third of what it wasin ‘Nam, because soldiers get faster, better, healthcare by providing more professionally trainedfield doctors and nurses. Commentary 4: Though less military personnel are dying, along the same lower ranks,soldiers are dying almost as frequently as they were in the Vietnam war. [Video if possible]Concrete 2: Combat situations make the Marine Corps death rate ishigher than any other branch of the military. Commentary 1: An active Army member is more likely to be die per deployment thanArmy Reserve members, but Marines are at risk whether they are active-duty or in the reserve. [photo]Commentary 2: The death rate of Marines is double that of the Army due todifferent combat exposure. Commentary 3: Navy death rate is nine times less than Marine Forces. Commentary 4: The greatest difference is observed in the statistic that the Marine Corp.death rate is twenty-three times higher than that of the Air Force. [photo]Concrete 3: Eighty-seven percent of enlisted officers are not able to receivemedical aid in the field. Commentary 1: In just the first year of the Iraq war , casualties reached over 1,000 deadU.S. soldiers. Commentary 2: The Defense Department Counted 87 attacks on U.S. forces per day. Commentary 3: “Our soldiers are not properly organized or equipped to fight theInsurgents” (Andrew Krepinevich).Logan Ridings
  2. 2. research question 2. How are the the Department Of Veterans Affairs and the Armed Forceshelping soldiers medically with PTSD? [photo]Topic Sentence 2: Since WWII The VA or Department Of Veterans Affairs hashelped provide war veterans with financial aid, and the armed forces are helping by addingprecautions and screening programs to catch cases of PTSD. [photo]Concrete 1: Each medical center within VA has PTSD specialists who providetreatment for Veterans with PTSD. Plus, the VA provides nearly 200 specialized PTSD treatmentprograms. Commentary 1: With the VA providing medical centers across the country it helps all thesoldiers and veterans returning from combat to get the help they need. Commentary 2: More and more doctors specialized in PTSD diagnosis are being added tohelp treat this psychological disorder. Commentary 3: In my opinion I think the VA is doing a lot to help by providing bothdoctors and specialized PTSD programs, but I also think they could do a lot more. Concrete 2: VA services are provided to all Veterans who completed active militaryservice in the Army, Navy, Air Force, Marines, or Coast Guard (or Merchant Marines duringWW II.) Each PTSD program offers education, evaluation, and treatment. Commentary 1: The VA does not turn a single veteran away but to keep doing this, theyneed new and more advanced medical equipment. [photo]Commentary 2: The VA offers the PTSD recovery programs in three major parts,education the VA tries to educate the veterans about PTSD. Evaluation, the specialized doctors atthe VA medical centers try to diagnose the issues. Treatment, The VA provides prescriptions andrehabilitation programs to help support veterans with PTSD. Commentary 3: To obtain the goals the VA has set for itself by not turning away a singleveteran, they need the new and advanced medical equipment. Concrete 3: Every VA Medical Center has providers that have been trained to offerPTSD treatment. Some VA medical centers are now offering walk-in clinics. By walking into theprimary care clinic, a Veteran can be seen that day by a mental health provider. Commentary 1: Today in the 21st century, the VA can provide a PTSD specialist atwalk-in clinics that saves a lot of time and money. Commentary 2: The VA is helping veterans find treatment easier, by offering so manyclinics and specialist across the world. Commentary 3: When it comes to veterans the armed forces do not help out as muchthey care more about their active duty soldiers. The VA mainly helps veterans if the VA hadthe latest most advanced medical equipment, I think this organization could cut the amount ofveterans who have PTSD in half.Jacob HewgleyResearch question 3. What “safety nets” and other actions have been put in place since WWI to
  3. 3. help prevent PTSD? [Photo]Topic Sentence 3: Since WWI many precautions have been taken to help preventPTSD and other Psychological Illnesses. Concrete 1:We examine the attempts of US psychiatrists during the 20th century to treatand prevent the psychiatric consequences of war by implementing screening programs, providingearly intervention strategies for acute war-related syndromes near the front lines ("forwardpsychiatry"), and mitigating the symptoms of long-term psychiatric disability after deployment. [Video]Commentary 1: We now have “Screening Programs” available for soldiers beforeand after war. [Photo]Commentary 2: Scientists are studying their brain patterns and other data todetermine the severity of PTSD or the chance of obtaining PTSD. [Photo]Commentary 3: Once the soldiers are properly diagnosed with a mental illnessthey can find the right treatment methods or programs to help them. Concrete Detail 2: Even before the United States became involved in World War II, anumber of leading US psychiatrists were contemplating how they could contribute to the wareffort. They focused their attention on selection because they believed that the thoroughscreening of volunteers and inductees would weed out those individuals predisposed tobreakdown, which would reduce or even eliminate mental health problems during deployment. [Photo]Commentary 1: Also scientists are introducing early intervention programs forsoldiers. Commentary 2: These intervention programs are great for the PTSD victims because theintervention could possibly correct their stress disorder before it gets serious. [Photo]Commentary 3: If the scientists could correct the disorders before they start, wewould greatly reduce the number of suicides and murders due to stress disorders. Concrete Detail 3: US psychiatrists and psychologists have initiated an impressivenumber of research projects on treatment strategies for PTSD. Proposed specialist treatmentshave included the use of antidepressant medication and individual and group psychotherapies.There is now an extensive evidence base for the efficacy of trauma-focused cognitive behaviortherapies administered to individuals or groups of veterans. Commentary 1: Scientists are coming up with new treatments all of the time Commentary 2: These treatments are tested and then determined if they are a reliable wayto treat patients. Commentary 3: If reliable, they are sent out to therapists and used on patients as soon aspossible in order to treat the patient in the best way possible. [Photo]Commentary 4: Before scientists can test these treatments or send them out, theyhave to have the money for research.