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Elements of an Essay: Writing Details

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Today we are going to take a look at the other extremely important factor in writing a well-thought out essay. It is needed for every single detail that you write. It is the commentary.

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Elements of an Essay: Writing Details

  1. 1. Elements of an Essay: Writing Details By Oxford Tutoring
  2. 2. Commentary It is an extremely important factor in writing a well-thought out essay. You will need it for every single detail you write.
  3. 3. Commentary Defined
  4. 4. Commentary Is an explanation. ● Explain to your reader how the details relate to the thesis statement. ● It does not contain facts. ● Instead, it discusses what your details have to do with the topic.
  5. 5. Writing Commentary
  6. 6. Writing 1. You are going to need at least two sentences for every detail sentence. 2. A good guideline is that you commentary should be twice as long as your details. 3. Without commentary, your paper is just facts.
  7. 7. We want to know how YOU think these facts prove your point and what YOU think they mean.
  8. 8. Different Ways to Write Commentary
  9. 9. Opinion
  10. 10. This is when you write your belief, subjective judgment or way of thinking about a detail.
  11. 11. Interpretation
  12. 12. Your explanation of something that is unclear
  13. 13. Character or Subject’s Feelings
  14. 14. When you describe what the character or subject of the detail is feeling.
  15. 15. Personal Reaction
  16. 16. Your personal emotions about the detail
  17. 17. Evaluation
  18. 18. Your objective judgment of a detail
  19. 19. Commentary is the Treasure
  20. 20. Commentary Is the treasure that makes your paper shine ● It should always strengthen and extend the details. ● This is your chance to show us what you’ve got. ● It is where you can impress us with your analysis and interpretation skills.
  21. 21. The “What and Why” Method
  22. 22. “What and Why” 1. If you are struggling to write commentary, try using the “what and why” method. 2. First, tell the reader WHAT your detail is talking about by defining or explaining 3. Next, let your reader know WHY this same details is relevant to your thesis statement.
  23. 23. Starting Commentary Sentences
  24. 24. Commentary Sentence starters ● “This shows that…” ● “This is important because…”
  25. 25. Commentary Sentence Starters Tips Obviously, you cannot start every sentence the same way because that would be redundant. It is, however, helpful to think these phrases in order to guide your commentary in the right direction.
  26. 26. Applying Commentary Techniques
  27. 27. Let’s put together the different commentary options and the method for writing them.
  28. 28. Commentary Type: Opinion Using the “What and Why” Method
  29. 29. Commentary Opinion Example ● Topic: education ● Detail: According to the 2013 National Assessment of Education Progress Reading test, 80% of students score below grade level in reading.
  30. 30. Opinion Example Your commentary should answer the following questions (1) WHAT is my opinion, and (2) WHY is my opinion relevant to my thesis statement? Commentary for previous detail: 1. A statistic like shows the poor state of the education system. 2. If we are to help students become successful adults, we need to change they way we are educating our children.
  31. 31. Commentary Type: Interpretation Using the “What and Why” Method
  32. 32. Commentary Interpretation Example ● Topic: benefits of college ● Detail: First of all, of 2,350,000 college students enrolling per year, only 1,750,000 will graduate.
  33. 33. Interpretation Example Your commentary should answer the following questions (1) WHAT is my interpretation, and (2) WHY is my interpretation relevant to my thesis statement? Commentary for previous detail: 1. This shows that the high demand placed on students during their college years is too much stress for many. 2. However, the pressure of college is reflective of a future career and helps to prepare young adults for these challenges.
  34. 34. Commentary Type: Character or Subject’s Feelings Using the “What and Why” Method
  35. 35. Commentary Character or Subject’s Feelings Example ● Topic: cost of higher education ● Detail: For example, Benjamin Davis, a recent college graduate with a degree in Business, struggled for many years to find a job because of the recent unemployment struggles in America.
  36. 36. Your commentary should answer the following questions (1) WHAT is the subject’s feelings , and (2) WHY is the subject’s feelings relevant to my thesis statement? Commentary for previous detail: 1. He like most, experiences extreme frustration over spending time and money obtaining a degree that gives him very little advantage when searching for a job. 2. As a result, many are left wondering is higher education is worth the cost. Character or Subject’s Feelings Example
  37. 37. Commentary Type: Personal Reaction Using the “What and Why” Method
  38. 38. Commentary Personal Reaction Example ● Topic: bullying ● Detail: Also, a bully might speak cruelly in order to intimidate, steal a student’s belongings, or intentionally exclude a student from a group.
  39. 39. Interpretation Example Your commentary should answer the following questions (1) WHAT is my personal reaction, and (2) WHY is my personal reaction relevant to my thesis statement? Commentary for previous detail: 1. It is extremely upsetting to know that most children undergo this type of treatment at school. 2. It is hurtful, isolating, and can have long-lasting psychological damage on those students who experience bullying often.
  40. 40. Commentary Type: Evaluation Using the “What and Why” Method
  41. 41. Commentary Evaluation Example ● Topic: bears ● Detail: Naturally, a bear, when threatened, will rise up from the ground, growl loudly, and begin charging at a speed of up to 35 mph.
  42. 42. Evaluation Example Your commentary should answer the following questions (1) WHAT is my evaluation, and (2) WHY is my evaluation relevant to my thesis statement? Commentary for previous detail: 1. Although this is a frightening experience, it is not entirely the bear’s fault. 2. In fact most of the time a bear attack is the result of an individual not realizing that the woods is a bear’s environment and means one must be cautious and respectful of that environment.
  43. 43. When to Use Commentary Types
  44. 44. Commentary Types Tips ● Depending on your assignment, choose the types of commentary that best fits your argument. ● Use a variety of different types of commentary to write a well- argued paper.
  45. 45. Commentary Workshop
  46. 46. Workshop 1. Go back and look at step two of writing details from last week’s presentation. 2. Update your commentary to fit the “what and why” method, using the commentary types you just learned. 3. If you have not already done that step, use the worksheet found here.
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