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Student Name: Hansa Hussain
Module Title: Professional and Scientific Practice 3
Title of coursework Oral Presentation
Marker: R Bradshaw
Overall Grade/Categorical
Mark: Low upper second (62%)
First Upper 2nd Lower 2nd Third Fail
Structure
Looking for:
 introduction
 linked sections
 conclusion
 appropriate length
Introduction and conclusion well
explained.
Sections linked together in a clear,
logical manner,
Key points clearly presented and
discussed
Kept to time.
Introduction and conclusion
appropriate.
Sections linked together in a logical
manner,
Key points clearly presented.
Kept to time.
Introduction and/or conclusion too
brief
Structure only partially logical
Key points included
Slightly over or under time
Introduction and/or conclusion too
brief or irrelevant.
Sections only poorly linked
Many key points missed.
Significantly under or over time.
Introduction and conclusion not
included.
Sections unlinked,
Key points not included.
Significantly under or over to
time.
Delivery
Looking for:
 tone/audibility
 interesting/confident
 pace
Confidently presented, well-paced,
clear audible tone. Good interaction
with audience. Enthusiastic about
topic
Fairly confidently presented, well-
paced, audible tone. Eye contact
with audience.
Showed clear interest in topic
Fairly confidently presented, well-
paced, audible tone May be some
hesitation or reading.
Some interest in topic.
Presentation too fast/slow in
places, speaker could not be heard
at times. Some hesitation or
always reading from script, limited
interest in topic
Presentation too fast/slow,
speaker could not be heard.
Hesitant delivery showing no
interest in topic
Visual Aids
Looking for:
 appropriate content
 well prepared, clear
 used effectively
Clear slides, with excellent use of
appropriate figures, slide content
appropriate to presentation, slides
used effectively, very well prepared
and coherent.
Clear slides, with appropriate
figures, slide content appropriate to
presentation, slides used effectively
and well prepared.
Mainly clear slides but some dense
text . Limited use of figures.
Content mainly appropriate.
Slides mainly used effectively.
Some errors in preparation.
Over use of text on slides, slide
content not always appropriate to
presentation, slides not always
used effectively, slides not always
well prepared.
Unclear or cluttered slides, over
use of text, slide content
inappropriate to presentation,
slides not used effectively,
unprepared.
Content
Looking for:
 relevant
 well-researched
 appropriate for audience
 shows understanding
Appropriate for audience, with very
relevant content. Well researched,
demonstrating excellent
understanding. Very clear
identification of skills and link to
future career
Appropriate for audience, with
relevant content. Clear research and
understanding demonstrated. Good
identification of skills and attempt to
link to future career
Content mainly appropriate to
audience. Some research and
understanding demonstrated.
Identification of some skills or
attempt to show relevance to
career plans
Some appropriate content for
audience, but mainly irrelevant.
Limited research or understanding
demonstrated.
No skills identified and no linking to
future career
Inappropriate for audience,
content not relevant or
researched, limited
understanding demonstrated. No
skills identified and no linking to
future career
Handling of Questions
Looking for:
 knowledge
 confidence
Confident and clear when answering,
Detailed answer to question asked.
Answer content correct additional
information given.
Confident when answering
questions,
Answer addresses question asked.
Answer content correct.
Answers questions but answers
brief or with some errors.
Attempts to answer questions,
Answers sometimes very brief or
irrelevant..
Answer contains errors.
Unable to answer questions.
Answer does not address
question asked.
Answer contains extensive
errors.

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Strengths: Your tone and pace were good. Some of your slides had some nice diagrams – utilise this more to capture the audience. You linked key skills gained from
your roles. Generally confident answers to your questions, which ended up revealing more about your future career aspirations – it was nice to see you have a clear
plan about the PA role and how you will try to move into this.
Suggestions for Improvement: Presentation was only 4 minutes long, try to practice the presentation more in order to meet the timing requirements. You had a lot of
text on the slides, which often results in the presenter reading directly off the slides or skipping through too quickly which means the audience can’t take in the info – I
would suggest reducing the amount of text on the slides and practicing speaking around the topic. Ended abruptly, try to add a clear, defined conclusion. Some points
where you lost your train of thought in answers to the questions but you were able to take a moment and think about the question to deliver a good answer.
Student comments for Feed-forward (how will you use this feedback to improve your future work?):
I understand I need to work on my communication skills and talk a little slower. I also should have included my older work experiences I completed during
my time at college as they were relevant and also linked to my future career aspirations. I should have also shortened my bullet points so the text is more
concise.
Signed: R Bradshaw Date: 24/01/23