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A five part step by step technique based on the Sheridan Baker Thesis machine but simplified for beginning writers to facilitate thesis creation with practice.Created by Coleman's Classroom.

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The Essay: Thesis Pieces

  1. 1. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Coleman’s Thesis Pieces Steps to Thesis Writing
  2. 2. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net What Are They? 5 pieces which when put together create an effective thesis.
  3. 3. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Why Use It? Gives Direction Guides Way Limits Topics Facilitates Ideas Thesis = ROAD MAP
  4. 4. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Five Pieces 1. Make Claim 2. Give Reasons 3. Combine Pieces 4. Revise Language 5. Add Counter Argument (optional)
  5. 5. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Make a claim about topic. Example: Cats are the best pets. Thesis Piece 1
  6. 6. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Give reasons for claim with ending because clause. Example: because they purr when happy. Thesis Piece 2a
  7. 7. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Give reasons for claim with ending because clause. Example: because they are independent. Thesis Piece 2b
  8. 8. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Give reasons for claim with ending because clause. Example: because they live long lives. Thesis Piece 2c
  9. 9. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Thesis Piece 3 Combine pieces Example: Cats are the best pets because they purr when happy, are independent, and live long lives.
  10. 10. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Thesis Piece 4 Revise and Polish by using… Strong Verbs Precise Nouns Affective Adjectives Awesome Adverbs Perfect Punctuation
  11. 11. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Piece 4: Revision Steps Cats are the best pets because they purr when happy, are independent, and live long lives. Cats make the best companions because their purr is pleasing, their care is convenient, and their lives are long.
  12. 12. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Cats make the best companions because their purr is pleasing, their care is convenient, and their lives are long. Revised Thesis Sentence
  13. 13. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net How Many Body Paragraphs Would this Thesis have? Revised Thesis Sentence Cats make the best companions because their purr is pleasing, their care is convenient, and their lives are long.
  14. 14. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Optional 5th Thesis Piece Give alternative positions with beginning although clause. Example: Although the dogs are more popular than cats,
  15. 15. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Step 5 Optional BUT NOT Required Might not be applicable for every essay !!!!
  16. 16. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Although the dogs are more popular than cats, cats make the best companions because their purr is pleasing, their care is convenient, and their lives are long. 5th Piece Thesis Sentence
  17. 17. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net How Many Body Paragraphs Would this Thesis have? Revised Thesis Sentence Although the dogs are more popular than cats, cats make the best companions because their purr is pleasing, their care is convenient, and their lives are long.
  18. 18. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Thesis Pieces Review 1. Make Claim 2. Give Reasons 3. Combine Parts 4. Revise Language 5. (optional) Give Alternatives
  19. 19. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Example Progression Cats are the best pets Cats are the best pets because they purr when happy, they are independent, and they live long live. Cats make the best companions because their purr is pleasing, their care is convenient, and their lives are long. Although dogs are more popular than cats
  20. 20. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Question (1) Which of the five Thesis Pieces could you remove and still have a good thesis?
  21. 21. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Which of the five Thesis Pieces could you remove and still have a good thesis? Answer: Piece 5 (Give Alternatives)
  22. 22. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Thesis without piece 5 Cats make the best companions because their purr is pleasing… Thesis with piece 5 Although the dog is the more popular pet, cats make the best companions because their purr is pleasing…
  23. 23. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Question (2) Do you have to revise and polish the thesis?
  24. 24. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Do you have to revise and polish the thesis? Answer: It is possible to leave out this piece; however, revision and editing will make the thesis stronger!
  25. 25. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Thesis without piece 4 Cats are the best pets because they purr when happy, are independent, and live long lives. Thesis with piece 4 Cats make the best companions because their purr is pleasing, their care is convenient, and their lives are long.
  26. 26. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Question (3) Do you have to have three reasons in your because clause?
  27. 27. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Do you have to have three reasons in your because clause? Answer: Of Course Not!
  28. 28. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Thesis with 3 reasons Cats are the best pets because they purr when happy, are independent, and live long lives. Thesis without 3 reasons Cats make the best companions for many reasons. There are many reasons cats make the best companions.
  29. 29. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Question (4) Should my thesis be so specific? Why wouldn’t it be better to be more vague?
  30. 30. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Should my thesis be so specific? Why wouldn’t it be better to be more vague? Answer: Yes. The thesis is the road map for your essay. If you are going from LA to SF, would you rather have a map of CA or the entire USA?
  31. 31. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Direct Route What’s all this? Unnecessary
  32. 32. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Question (5) Why should I spend so much time and effort on thesis?
  33. 33. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Why should I spend so much time and effort on thesis? Answer: The thesis performs two functions. It not only previews topic and directs your reader, but also helps you maintain structure and coherence for the essay!
  34. 34. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Your Turn Use the Coleman Thesis Pieces to create a thesis on this topic: Cigarettes
  35. 35. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Piece 1: Make a Claim Questions To Ask: How do you feel about topic? What do you want to prove? Is it provable? WHAT IS YOUR CLAIM?
  36. 36. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Some Examples College students smoke too much Smoking should be restricted YOUR CLAIM?
  37. 37. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Piece 2: Because Clause Questions to Ask: Why is your position valid? What causes your claim to be true? Who supports your ideas? When is this true?
  38. 38. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Some Examples because they want to be popular with their peers. because it is unhealthy and addicting. WHAT IS YOUR BECAUSE?
  39. 39. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Piece 3: Put It Together Simply add the first 4 pieces WHAT IS YOUR TOTAL SENTENCE?
  40. 40. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Piece 5: Give Alternatives Questions to Ask: Why disagree with my point? Who disagrees? What are other possibilities?
  41. 41. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Some Examples Although smoking allows people to be part of a social group, Although America is the land of the free, YOUR ALTERNATIVE?
  42. 42. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Some Examples (1) Although smoking allows people to be part of a social group, college students smoke too much because they want to be popular with their peers.
  43. 43. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Some Examples (2) Although America is the land of the free, smoking should be restricted because it is unhealthy and addicting.
  44. 44. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Piece 4: Revise & Polish Questions to Ask What verbs can you make active? What vocabulary words can you make more specific or detailed? Is there another way to state your because clause?
  45. 45. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Some Examples (1) Although smoking allows people to be part of a social group, many students smoke too much because they want to be popular with their peers. Although smoking allows people to participate in a social group, many students smoke too much simply to gain popularity among their peers.
  46. 46. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Some Examples (2) Although America is the land of the free, smoking should be restricted because it is unhealthy and addicting. Although Americans have many freedoms, smoking should be restricted because it is unhealthy and addicting.
  47. 47. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net
  48. 48. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net More Practice Complete the following sentences by filling in the missing parts.
  49. 49. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Practice Question 1) Although fast food is convenient, college students should avoid eating it because ______________.
  50. 50. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Practice Question 2) Although _____________, cell phones are beneficial because they provide convenience and security.
  51. 51. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Practice Question 3) Although it would allow drivers to get to work sooner, the speed limit should not be raised because __________.
  52. 52. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Practice Question 4) Although it is difficult for students to get to class on time, _________________ because tardiness disrupts the entire class.
  53. 53. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Practice Question 5) Although _______________, TV programs benefit society because they provide educational and interesting shows for students.
  54. 54. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Practice Question 6) Although many movies use violence to entertain, people should be encouraged to watch moves because _____________.
  55. 55. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Practice Question 7) Although denying women the right to fight in combat is unfair, this policy is good because ______________.
  56. 56. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Practice Question 8) Although _______________, California schools should teach classes in English because ____________.
  57. 57. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Practice Question 9) Although _______________, schools should keep extracurricular programs such as music and art because _______________.
  58. 58. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Practice Question 10) Although _______________, student athletes should be held to the same standard as non-athletes because _____.
  59. 59. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Bigger Topics Have Same Thesis Pieces
  60. 60. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net
  61. 61. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Examples from Blind Side Micheal Oher over came his awful background because of his ability to embrace change, to learn new motivation strategies, and to respond to adversity in innovative ways.
  62. 62. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Examples Blind Side Micheal Oher has become successful in his life because he was able to overcome his unfortunate background through new skills.
  63. 63. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Examples The Other Wes Moore Success was possible because of Wes Moore’s ability to change his bad responses, to find new motivation, and to overcome his negative influences.
  64. 64. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Examples The Other Wes Moore Wes Moore’s story provides an blueprint for overcoming a destructive background as he learns positive responses to his life trials.
  65. 65. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Example I am Mala Mala Yousafzai has become an inspiration to women around the world because of her ability to change her terrible circumstances and still be positively motivated.
  66. 66. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Example I am Mala Mala Yousafzai’s life proves that any adverse situation can be overcome with the right attitude and help from others.
  67. 67. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Problem Thesis
  68. 68. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net What’s The Problem? I Am Mala is a motivating book.
  69. 69. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net I Am Mala is a motivating book. Claim with NO reasons #2 missing
  70. 70. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net What’s The Problem? Micheal Oher had a very difficult life before moving in with the Tuoys.
  71. 71. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net What’s The Problem? Micheal Oher had a very difficult life before moving in with the Tuoys. NO claim & NO reasons #1 & # 2 missing
  72. 72. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net What’s The Problem? Temple Grandin is a great representative for autistic people.
  73. 73. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Temple Grandin is a great representative for autistic people. NO Clear Claim & NO reasons # 1 weak & # 2 missing
  74. 74. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net What’s The Problem? Both Wes Moores had difficulties, but only one of the men overcame them.
  75. 75. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net What’s The Problem? Both Wes Moores had difficulties, but only one of the men overcame them. 2 Sides- NO Clear Claim & No Reasons # 1 Weak & # 2 Missing
  76. 76. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net Final Words Try the Coleman Thesis Pieces on your own papers !!!! Good Luck and Happy Writing!!!!
  77. 77. Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net For More Information Email Mrs. C ccoleman@clmn.net Visit Coleman’s Classroom www.clmn.net

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