Make sure a variety of colored highlighters are available at every table
Word to the wise – always read your writing out loudYour EAR will catch mistakes your EYES will not!Writing Rule of thumb: if it SOUNDS wrong, it usually is!After directions given (5 minutes), set the online stopwatch for 5 minutes, stop students at this point and reset for 5 minutes for next reader
Have students stand and yell: I am awesome! (at the awesome bit)
No matter how you are approaching your essay, you need to have some semblance of an introduction, body, and conclusion!You also need transitions throughout your essay these are the glue to your logic
Write these tips down… they are good for anything you write!
Walk through and then SHOW EXAMPLE #1 paragraph and example of what to do. 10 minutes work, USE TIMERAre paragraphs coherent? Does each one only focus on one idea? Does each paragraph have a topic sentence that expresses that main idea? Does each paragraph have a concluding sentence that sums up the idea of the paragraph in a new and interesting manner? Does the concluding paragraph really sum up the whole essay and/or add reflection?
Put up online stop watch for thisTO END… high five your partner and say “Word up!”
Identify a paragraph or section in your essay that still needs LOTS of work!You are going to beat this…
The best writing advice I ever got:NOUN --VERB
TIME THEM: 5 mins.
As Hamlet said, “Suit the word to the action and the action to the word.”
While making these decisions about word choice, consider your tone and be sure your word choice matches your desired tone.
Show CUT paragraph…Each sentence is its own island of information, make the shores perfect!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=20K9CdAVxF4&feature=relatedPut up online stop watch for thisTO END… exchange a proper handshake (no flimsy fish!) and say “Write on!”
Robert Frost, “A good poem begins in delight and ends in wisdom” … and so should your essay!
Don’t make it unnatural or cheesy, but a little simple flair goes a long way… If you don’t normally wax poetic, then perhaps
If no time, cut
If no time, cut
Essay Writing Workshop - Part 2
HELLO!AS YOU ENTER, PLEASE… SEAT YOURSELF NEXT TO A TRUSTED PEER EDITOR 2 OR 4 TO A TABLE ONLY OMG! How exciting is this?!
WELCOME BACK, OH BRILLIANT WRITERS!Today‟s Objectives:1) To review your essay organization2) To enhance precision & concision in your writing3) To add flair & joy to your writing & the writing process WORD UP & WRITE ON
READ ALOUD! Read your question & essay to yourIf it partner (5 mins.)SOUNDSwrong… Writers,if while reading you hear ait problem, simply highlight & continueprobably reading, don’t stop to fix it!is! Partners, listen for two things: 1. Has the writer answered the question? 2. Does the essay reflect her/his true voice? Switch readers complete same
IF YOU HAVEN’T ANSWERED THE QUESTION&/OR IT DOESN’T SOUND LIKE YOU, START OVER!
REMEMBER: no-nos The list of topic This is about YOU your ethos, values, aspirations Cast aside your humility, you are AWESOME! AND… SHOW don’t TELL! Examples and analysis and reflection!
Mini Workshop #1:Organization http://www.ismckenzie.com/organization-cartoon/Introduction Body + Transitions
Mini Workshop #1:OrganizationConsider what type of organization you have: How was it in the past? How is it now? How may it be in the future? So what? My first impression. My later view. My present evaluation. So what? A notable mistake. Efforts to adjust or correct. The outcome. So what? How does it appear? What is it really like? Why is there this difference? So what? How can it be done? Steps A, B, C. What is the result? So what?
Mini Workshop #1: Evidence &Org. Specific Details Supply anecdotal evidence to show accomplishments Supply SPECIFICS: names, places, and descriptions Explain the concrete outcomes of your endeavors Allow readers to SEE your ethos in action Most questions ask for a moment or event and what you learned from it, don’t spend the whole essay describing the event, you need to focus on learning, growth, change, epiphany, etc… 10% Description + (90% Analysis x Reflection) =
Mini Workshop #1: Organization Typical / Formal Creative / Narrative Essays ApproachesIdentify & Highlight: Identify & Highlight: INTRO: Thesis / big idea Main idea / theme of piece Topic sentence for each Near the beginning body paragraph Elements/examples that Transition words and support this topic phrases within Transition words and paragraphs phrases throughout your Concluding &/or piece transition sent. for each body para.
3rd Inning Stretch Stand up! In 30 seconds, find a partner at ANOTHER table! Read the BEST part/sentence of your essay,explain: WHAT MAKES IT “GOOD”? THEN, briefly explain the part of your essay that needs the most work! (1.5 minutes perpartner)
Choose a Paragraph Go back to that area you pointed out as needed most work… We are going to beat it with a CAVE MAN CLUB http://marcpro-strava.com/blog/2012/08/
Mini Workshop #2: NOUN / VERBhttp://www.cartoonstock.com/directory/n/nouns.asp I miss the good old days when all we had to worry about was nouns and verbs
Identify Nouns, Verbs, andModifiers Highlight all key nouns, pronouns, and adjectives with another color. The beautiful Sarah wore the perfect shoes with her prom dress; she was dressed smashingly. Grammar reminder: Adjectives modify nouns Highlight all verbs and adverbs with one color. The beautiful Sarah wore the perfect shoes with her prom dress; she was dressed
Mini Workshop #2:NOUN/VERB It was, it is, there was, there are, etc.. Instead of using the ambiguous “it,” state the noun you mean Only use state of being verbs if you absolutely have to Instead use VIBRANT action verbsExample:It was cold the day my grandfather died. Instead… The weather grew frigid the day my grandfather died. If you have to use adjectives, or adverbs, make them count!
Mini Workshop #2: NOUNS! Clarify vague pronouns have clear antecedents Especially important with it, personal pronouns, and vague nouns It seems they enjoy those things. He learned a lot from that experience. Use specific nouns and avoid adjectives: crone, hag frumpy old woman jalopy, rattletrap Dilapidated vehicle hovel, shack Dingy, broken down house
Mini Workshop #2: VERBS!Concision comes in small packages… Simplify verb forms: What had had happened was… (no perfect tenses; K.I.S.S.) I now realize… I have come to the understanding… I relish… I do indeed take pleasure in… adverbs Use precise Cut superfluous sprint, gallop, dash verbs: Run very quickly guffaw, chortle, chuckle Laugh wholeheartedly gambol, caper, frolic Dance wildly
Mini Workshop #2: VERBS +TONE! Tone & diction: Make your words SHOW how you feel! When the doorbell rang, I got off my bed and went to answer the door. What is the tone? What words are “flat” or “vague”? How might they be changed?
Time to EDIT! Now, you will comb through that paragraph you identified earlier Check nouns and pronouns and their antecedents replace vague words & pronouns Replace state of being verbs with action verbs Keep only the most telling adjectives and adverbs Spend 7 minutes finessing your paragraph
7th Inning Stretch Stand up! In 30 seconds, find A NEW partner at ANOTHER table! Read your first & your last sentences
http://static.zoovy.com/img/gkworld/ Flair Mini Workshop #3: Adding
Mini Workshop #3: AddingFlair First line = first impression (punch „em in the face) All this happened, more or less. K. Vonnegut, Slaughterhouse-Five (1969) The naked parrot looked like a human fetus spliced onto a kosher chicken. T. Robbins, Fierce Invalids Home from Hot Climates (2000) Lolita, light of my life, fire of my loins. V. Nabokov, Lolita (1955) Last line = leave a lasting impression I don’t want to end up simply having visited this world. M. Oliver
Mini Workshop #3: AddingFlair Read your first and last line to your partner Discuss your starters and finishers How might you spice them up? Take 5 minutes to re-work one or both Make them memorable Let’s hear a few good ones!
Mini Workshop #3: AddingFlair Metaphors While volunteering at the hospital, I realized I was a lost boat afloat in the tempest of life. Similes Like a beacon in the distance, my mother’s advice aided me once again! Sentence Variety / Inverted word order Learned I did that patience is a necessity not a virtue. Industrious am I; genius I am not.
Sentence Variety Playing with how you organize your ideas in a sentence also allows you to emphasize certain elements This particular start emphasizes Roy’s mistake…
Sentence Variety… Roy dooms the entire earth to annihilation, when, in an attempt to be friendly, he inadvertently seizes their leader by the head and shakes vigorously. Emphasizes Roy‟s imminent annihilation Roy seizes their leader by the head and shakes vigorously, inadvertently dooming the entire earth to annihilation with his attempt at being friendly. Emphasizes Roy‟s social faux pas In an attempt to be friendly, Roy seizes their leader by the head and shakes vigorously, inadvertently dooming the entire earth to annihilation.
Refine your sentences! Go back to the paragraph you are refining Check each sentence to assure it’s perfect Add sentence variety where necessary Add a metaphor or simile just try it now, and see if you like it Take 10 minutes to edit sentences Share your ideas with your partner
Write On! Be the Sausage! Go forth and endeavor to share your brilliance with the world! Finish essays early so you have time to polish them Get other eyes on them Set appointments with teachers and counselors for help, discussion, finessing