Here is a revised script that addresses some issues in the original:There was an old sow and her four little piglets - three sons and a daughter. As the sow grew too old to care for them, she sent the piglets out into the world to make their fortunes. The piglets knew they must work together to survive, so they decided to build houses near one another for protection. But they struggled to agree on materials. The eldest son suggested sturdy brick, but his siblings laughed off the idea as too expensive. Eventually they compromised - the eldest would use brick, while the second took lumber and the third straw. Only the daughter remained unsure. As night fell and dangers lurked, she had no choice
Similar to Here is a revised script that addresses some issues in the original:There was an old sow and her four little piglets - three sons and a daughter. As the sow grew too old to care for them, she sent the piglets out into the world to make their fortunes. The piglets knew they must work together to survive, so they decided to build houses near one another for protection. But they struggled to agree on materials. The eldest son suggested sturdy brick, but his siblings laughed off the idea as too expensive. Eventually they compromised - the eldest would use brick, while the second took lumber and the third straw. Only the daughter remained unsure. As night fell and dangers lurked, she had no choice
Similar to Here is a revised script that addresses some issues in the original:There was an old sow and her four little piglets - three sons and a daughter. As the sow grew too old to care for them, she sent the piglets out into the world to make their fortunes. The piglets knew they must work together to survive, so they decided to build houses near one another for protection. But they struggled to agree on materials. The eldest son suggested sturdy brick, but his siblings laughed off the idea as too expensive. Eventually they compromised - the eldest would use brick, while the second took lumber and the third straw. Only the daughter remained unsure. As night fell and dangers lurked, she had no choice (20)
Here is a revised script that addresses some issues in the original:There was an old sow and her four little piglets - three sons and a daughter. As the sow grew too old to care for them, she sent the piglets out into the world to make their fortunes. The piglets knew they must work together to survive, so they decided to build houses near one another for protection. But they struggled to agree on materials. The eldest son suggested sturdy brick, but his siblings laughed off the idea as too expensive. Eventually they compromised - the eldest would use brick, while the second took lumber and the third straw. Only the daughter remained unsure. As night fell and dangers lurked, she had no choice
30. Deadline
Audience
(Think about who you are targeting as your audience. Consider age, gender, class,
location and other characteristics which could define your audience.)
Production Methods
(Explain the methods you are going to use to produce your pages. Show us the
thinking behind your decisions for a more detail response)
31. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
The strengths of the idea generation are that there
are two different ones for two different stories. This
means that each of the stories have been studied in
more depth instead only doing one of the stories.
Another strength in the mind maps is the detail that
has been gone into in the stories. I like what you
have done with the mood boards the display a good
range of cartoon characters that could be used to
develop one of your stories. I also like how you
have split the two mood boards up for each of your
different stories showing ideas for characters and
different locations.
Some of the ideas that could have been developed
further with the mind map include details into the
characters roles and details into the set location
and how the set was going to be produced. Also
another idea that could have been further produced
is the plot of the stories they have been mentioned
just not in much detail.
32. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
There is more than one idea shown in the idea
generation, this is good as it shows you have
considered other options before picking the story
you will do. The mood boards are good as they
show clearly what you are wanting the story to look
like but also you have show the style of the
cartoons you want to make.
The ide generation mind maps could be expanded
more as they are quite basic, maybe adding ore
details will help. Adding in more details about the
locations and characters would help. Also the mood
boards are good but you could add one to do with
colour scheme or text? Just to help add to to your
ideas and show that you have thought a lot about
what you are doing before hand.
33. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
The idea generation section goes into detail about
what the author will do with the story and the
reasons behind this, they have included an
additional story to work on before deciding on their
final product, building on it and creating accurate
and well-thought out mood boards. The mood
boards display to the reader the art style and
general tone that will be given by the artwork.
I feel the mind maps could have been elaborated
on more, contained more components such as
what characters will be in the story and the possible
backgrounds that will be used.
34. Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
Overall I agree with my peer feedback as I was aware of many of the faults in my work. I
agree with the overall points made but there are a few things I disagree with. I do think
that my peers have been fair with their analysis.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I specifically agree with the detail I have gone into with my mood board. I also agree
with the points that people brought up of my mind maps not being as detailed as they
could be.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
I disagree with
35.
36. There was an old sow with three little pigs, and as she had not enough to keep them, she sent them out to seek their fortune. The first that went off met a man with a bundle of straw, and said to
him:
“Please, man, give me that straw to build me a house.”
Which the man did, and the little pig built a house with it. Presently came along a wolf, and knocked at the door, and said:
“Little pig, little pig, let me come in.”
To which the pig answered:
“No, no, by the hair of my chiny chin chin.”
The wolf then answered to that:
“Then I’ll huff, and I’ll puff, and I’ll blow your house in.”
So he huffed, and he puffed, and he blew his house in, and ate up the little pig.
The second little pig met a man with a bundle of furze, and said:
“Please, man, give me that furze to build a house.”
Which the man did, and the pig built his house. Then along came the wolf, and said:
“Little pig, little pig, let me come in.”
“No, no, by the hair of my chiny chin chin.”
“Then I’ll puff, and I’ll huff, and I’ll blow your house in.”
So he huffed, and he puffed, and he puffed, and he huffed, and at last he blew the house down, and he ate up the little pig.
The third little pig met a man with a load of bricks, and said:
“Please, man, give me those bricks to build a house with.”
So the man gave him the bricks, and he built his house with them. So the wolf came, as he did to the other little pigs, and said:
“Little pig, little pig, let me come in.”
“No, no, by the hair of my chiny chin chin.”
“Then I’ll huff, and I’ll puff, and I’ll blow your house in.”
Well, he huffed, and he puffed, and he huffed and he puffed, and he puffed and huffed; but he could not get the house down. When he found that he could not, with all his huffing and puffing, blow
the house down, he said:
“Little pig, I know where there is a nice field of turnips.”
“Where?” said the little pig.
“Oh, in Mr. Smith’s Home-field, and if you will be ready tomorrow morning I will call for you, and we will go together, and get some for dinner.”
“Very well,” said the little pig, “I will be ready. What time do you mean to go?”
“Oh, at six o’clock.”
Well, the little pig got up at five, and got the turnips before the wolf came (which he did about six) and who said:
“Little Pig, are you ready?”
The little pig said: “Ready! I have been and come back again, and got a nice potful for dinner.”
The wolf felt very angry at this, but thought that he would be up to the little pig somehow or other, so he said:
“Little pig, I know where there is a nice apple-tree.”
“Where?” said the pig.
“Down at Merry-garden,” replied the wolf, “and if you will not deceive me I will come for you, at five o’clock tomorrow and get some apples.”
Well, the little pig bustled up the next morning at four o’clock, and went off for the apples, hoping to get back before the wolf came; but he had further to go, and had to climb the tree, so that just a
he was coming down from it, he saw the wolf coming, which, as you may suppose, frightened him very much. When the wolf came up he said:
“Little pig, what! are you here before me? Are they nice apples?”
“Yes, very,” said the little pig. “I will throw you down one.”
And he threw it so far, that, while the wolf was gone to pick it up, the little pig jumped down and ran home. The next day the wolf came again, and said to the little pig:
“Little pig, there is a fair at Shanklin this afternoon, will you go?”
“Oh yes,” said the pig, “I will go; what time shall you be ready?”
“At three,” said the wolf. So the little pig went off before the time as usual, and got to the fair, and bought a butter-churn, which he was going home with, when he saw the wolf coming. Then he
could not tell what to do. So he got into the churn to hide, and by so doing turned it round, and it rolled down the hill with the pig in it, which frightened the wolf so much, that he ran home without
going to the fair. He went to the little pig’s house, and told him how frightened he had been by a great round thing which came down the hill past him. Then the little pig said:
“Hah, I frightened you, then. I had been to the fair and bought a butter-churn, and when I saw you, I got into it, and rolled down the hill.”
Then the wolf was very angry indeed, and declared he would eat up the little pig, and that he would get down the chimney after him. When the little pig saw what he was about, he hung on the pot
37. Original Script
There was an old sow with three little pigs their baby brother they all had to leave because she did not have enough energy or money to look after them any more. The 4 siblings
all had big dreams so their mum sent them out to seek their fortune. They all set out firstly they all had had to make a group decision of where they wish to build their house and
what materials they want to make it out of. They couldn’t decide and argue for hours and hours and couldn’t agree. Eventually the eldist pig spoke up and pointed out a location
and sugested that they build the house out of bricks. The other two pigs laughed and eventually decided upon wood and straw. Each of the pigs went off to met a man with their
desired material. The smallest pig asked for a bundle of straw. He said to the man “Please, man, give me that straw to build me a house.”
Which the man did and the little pig built a house with it. The second little pig met a man with a bundle of furze, and said:
“Please, man, give me that furze to build a house.”
The third little pig met a man with a load of bricks, and said:
“Please, man, give me those bricks to build a house with.”
So the man gave him the bricks, and he built his house with them. Presently came along a wolf, and knocked at the door, and said:
“Little pig, little pig, let me come in.”
To which the pig answered:
“No, no, by the hair of my chiny chin chin.”
The wolf then answered to that:
“Then I’ll huff, and I’ll puff, and I’ll blow your house down.”
So he huffed, and he puffed, and he blew his house in. Amongst all the chaos the little pig managed to escape and run into the wooden house next door. The wolf saw the wooden
house qnd aproched it. “Little pig, little pig, let me come in.”
“No, no, by the hair of my chiny chin chin.”
“Then I’ll puff, and I’ll huff, and I’ll blow your house in.”
So he huffed, and he puffed, and he puffed, and he huffed, and at last he blew the house down, Both pigs managed to make it out of the house in time and get to the brick house
next door. So the wolf came, as he did to the other little pigs, and said:
“Little pig, little pig, let me come in.”
“No, no, by the hair of my chiny chin chin.”
“Then I’ll huff, and I’ll puff, and I’ll blow your house in.”
Well, he huffed, and he puffed, and he huffed and he puffed, and he puffed and huffed; but he could not get the house down. When he found that he could not, with all his huffin
and puffing, blow the house down, The wolf felt mad that he couldn’t get into the house. So mad that he stated climb onto the roof. The pigs inside were anxious. The wolf
thought he was very smart and decided to climb down the chimney. He tumbled down and
38. Story Breakdown
1. Three little pigs leave home with their baby brother to find their fortune
2. The Pigs argue about where to live and what to build their house out of
3. They ignore the eldest pigs advice to build a house out of brick and all go
off to build their own houses
4. A wolf comes along and blows down the straw house
5. The wolf blows down the wooden house
6. The wolf tries to blow down the brick house but cant
7. He climbs on the roof and jumps down the chimney
8. He lands inside the house hurting him self in the process
9. The three little pigs feel bad and take care of the wolf
10. The wolf apologizes and suggests that the three little pigs turn the strong
brick house into a hospital to take care of the other animals
39.
40. Final Script
Once there was an old sow with three little pigs and their baby brother. They all had to leave their mum because she was getting too old to look after
four of them anymore. They all had big dreams and wanted to explore the world. So their mum send them out to seek their fortune.
The first thing they had to do was build a house. They all had to agree where to build it and what materials they should use.
“I think straw is the best material to use” said the youngest pig
“I think wood is the best material to use” said the blossoming pig
“I think brick is the best material to use” said the eldest pig
The other two pigs laughed at this idea. They argued for hours. They eventually decided to go off on their own to build their own separate houses.
Without warning a gigantic rough wolf strolled up to the straw house. He knocked on the door and said
“Little pig, little pig let me come in”
To witch the pig answered
“not by the hair of my chinny chin chin”
To witch the wolf replied
“Then I’ll huff, and I’ll puff and I’ll puff and I’ll blow your house down”
So he huffed and he puffed and he blew the straw house down.
Amongst all the chaos the youngest pig managed to run into the wooden house.
The wolf approached the wooden house confidently. He yelled
“Little pig, little pig let me come in”
To witch both pigs replied
“not by the hair of my chinny chin chin”
The wolf replied with anger.
“Then I’ll huff and I’ll puff and I’ll blow your house down”
So he huffed and he puffed and he blew the wooden house down.
The two little pigs inside the house managed to escape into the solid brick house.
The wolf sauntered up to the brick house and asked
“Little pig, little pig, let me come in”
To witch all three pigs replied
“not by the hair of my chinny chin chin”
“Then I’ll huff and I’ll puff and I’ll blow your house down”
so he confidently huffed and puffed and he blew… he huffed and he puffed and he blew…
He felt mad that he couldn’t get into the house. So he climbed onto the roof and let out a tremendous “HOOOOOWWWWLLLLLLL”.
He suddenly lost his footing and fell backwards into the chimney.
He rapidly tumbled down the chimney and into the fire place.
The three little pigs stood around the injured wolf. They felt bad for him. So they decided to help him. They all worked together and nursed the injure
wolf back to health.
The wolf felt shock that the pigs would help him. He was so thankful that he apologised blowing their houses down promised he’d learned his lesso
The three little pigs accepted his apology.
As a token of his gratitude the wolf suggested that the three pigs turn their strong brick house into a small hospital to look after sick animals.
