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  1. 1. SUMMARY WRITING – TERM 4 WEEK 1 – CHIMPANZEES and BIRDS OFPARADISE by Yeo Yam Hwee Birds of paradise are coveted for their beautiful feathers which… + [A1] feathers turned into women’s hats in Europe.A Various threats and dangers facing B John Manangsang’s efforts to save these beautiful birds the birds2 Forest rangers can only search but cannot act 1 He bargained hard to save the first bird. against armed soldiers.3 officials in Papua buy birds of paradise as gifts 2 He attended to its broken wing. or bribes to visiting dignitaries.4 Anybody can attempt to trade their catch. 3 He constructed and maintained a three- storey aviary to keep the birds.5 Amateur hunters do not know how to cage 4 He learnt how to stitch a bird’s wounds the captured birds properly.6 There was no vets to consult. 5 without damaging its feathers7 The police and army personnel brought more 6 before releasing it at a secret location when and more birds. it healed8 At first, his bird patients suffered injuries 7 He won his case against illegal possession of mainly from bullets and arrows. birds.9 Some were caught in glue smeared on trees. 8 Manangsang, university experts, tribal chiefs and politicians, devised a conservation plan for 30000 hectares of land around nearby Lake Sentani.10 Trapped birds could die of injuries inflicted by 9 Their vision was a paradise for people and their frantic struggles. birds, with fruit and orchid farms, providing a habitat and the economy benefiting from tourists.11 Nets were strung between branches near nests where mating takes place.12 More females were caught.13 Bird protection laws were ineffective.14 The government ignored their plan and opened another four million hectares for logging. 1
  2. 2. SUMMARY WRITING – TERM 4 WEEK 1 – CHIMPANZEES and BIRDS OFPARADISE by Yeo Yam HweeA1 Birds of paradise are coveted for their beautiful feathers which… + [A1] feathers turned into women’s hats in Europe.A2 Forest rangers can only search but cannot act against armed soldiers.A3 officials in Papua buy birds of paradise as gifts or bribes to visiting dignitaries.A4 Anybody can attempt to trade their catch.A5 Amateur hunters do not know how to cage the captured birds properly.B1 Manangsang bargained hard to save the first bird.A6 There was no vets to consultB2 He attended to its broken wing.A7 The police and army personnel brought more and more birdsB3 He constructed and maintained a three-storey aviary to keep the birds.B4 He learnt how to stitch a bird’s woundsB5 without damaging its feathersB6 before releasing it at a secret location when it healedA8 At first, his bird patients suffered injuries mainly from bullets and arrows.A9 Some were caught in glue smeared on trees.A10 Trapped birds could die of injuries inflicted by their frantic struggles.A11 Nets were strung between branches near nests where mating takes place.A12 More females were caught.A13 Bird protection laws were ineffective.B7 He won his case against illegal possession of birds.B8 Manangsang, university experts, tribal chiefs and politicians, devised a conservation plan for 30000 hectares of land around nearby Lake Sentani.B9 Their vision was a paradise for people and birds, with fruit and orchid farms, providing a habitat and the economy benefiting from tourists.A14 The government ignored their plan and opened another four million hectares for logging. 2
  3. 3. SUMMARY WRITING – TERM 4 WEEK 1 – CHIMPANZEES and BIRDS OFPARADISE by Yeo Yam HweeA1 Birds of paradise are coveted for Birds of paradise are coveted their beautiful feathers which… + for their beautiful feathers [A1] which are turned into women’s feathers turned into women’s hats in Europe. hats in Europe.A2 Forest rangers can only search but cannot Forest rangers cannot arrest act against armed soldiers. armed soldiers who hunt down the birds.A3 Officials in Papua buy birds of paradise as Birds are official gifts and gifts or bribes to visiting dignitaries. bribes to foreign dignitaries.A4 Anybody can attempt to trade their catch. Anybody can trade.A5 Amateur hunters do not know how to cage Amateur hunters do not know the captured birds properly. how to cage the birds properly.B1 Manangsang bargained hard to save the Manangsang bargained hard to first bird. save the first bird.A6 There was no vets to consult Because there was no vets to consult,B2 He attended to its broken wing. he attended to its broken wing.A7 The police and army personnel brought The uniformed personnel more and more birds brought even more birds,B3 He constructed and maintained a three- causing him to keep the birds storey aviary to keep the birds. in a three-storey aviary.B4 He learnt how to stitch a bird’s wounds Manangsang learnt how to stitch a bird’s woundsB5 Without damaging its feathers without damaging its feathersB6 before releasing it at a secret location before releasing it at a secret when it healed location when it healed.A8 At first, his bird patients suffered injuries Initially, the birds suffered mainly from bullets and arrows. bullet and arrow wounds.A9 Some were caught in glue smeared on Some were glued to the trees. trees.A10 Trapped birds could die of injuries inflicted Trapped birds could die by by their frantic struggles. injuring themselves through frantic struggles. 3
  4. 4. SUMMARY WRITING – TERM 4 WEEK 1 – CHIMPANZEES and BIRDS OFPARADISE by Yeo Yam HweeA11 Nets were strung between branches near Nets were strung between nests where mating takes place. branches near nests where mating takes place,A12 More females were caught. causing more females to be trapped.A13 Bird protection laws were ineffective. Bird protection laws were ineffective.B7 He won his case against illegal possession Manansang fought and won of birds. his case against illegal possession.B8 Manangsang, university experts, tribal He and other likeminded chiefs and politicians, devised a people devised a bird conservation plan for 30000 hectares of conservation plan around Lake land around nearby Lake Sentani. Sentani.B9 Their vision was a paradise for people and It was meant to be a bird birds, with fruit and orchid farms, providing paradise for ecotourism. a habitat and the economy benefiting from tourists.A14 The government ignored their plan and However the government opened another four million hectares for ignored them and opened up logging. even more land for logging instead. 4
  5. 5. SUMMARY WRITING – TERM 4 WEEK 1 – CHIMPANZEES and BIRDS OFPARADISE by Yeo Yam HweeStringing the sentences into a summary paragraphFIRST DRAFTBirds of paradise are coveted for their beautiful feathers which are turnedinto women’s hats in Europe. Forest rangers cannot arrest armed soldierswho hunt down the birds which are official gifts and bribes to foreigndignitaries. Anybody can trade. Amateur hunters do not know how to cagethe birds properly. Manangsang bargained hard to save the first bird.Because there was no vets to consult, he attended to its broken wing. Theuniformed personnel brought even more birds, causing him to keep thebirds in a three-storey aviary. Manangsang learnt how to stitch a bird’swounds without damaging its feathers before releasing it at a secretlocation when it healed. Initially, the birds suffered bullet and arrowwounds. Some were glued to the trees. Trapped birds could die byinjuring themselves through frantic struggles. Nets were strung betweenbranches near nests where mating takes place, causing more females tobe trapped. Indonesian bird protection laws were ineffective. Manansangfought and won his case against illegal possession. He and otherlikeminded people devised a bird conservation plan around Lake Sentani. Itwas meant to be a bird paradise for ecotourism. However the governmentignored them and opened up even more land for logging instead.[194 words]Birds of paradise are coveted for their beautiful feathers which are turnedinto women’s hats in Europe. Armed soldiers who hunt down the birdswhich are official gifts and bribes to foreign dignitaries cannot be arrested.Anybody can trade. Amateur hunters do not care to cage the birdsproperly. Manangsang bargained hard for the first bird. The uniformedpersonnel brought even more birds, causing him to keep them in a three-storey aviary. Manangsang learnt how to stitch the bird’s wounds withoutdamaging its feathers before releasing it at a secret location when ithealed. Initially, the birds suffered weapon-related wounds. Some wereglued to the trees. Trapped birds could die through frantic struggles. Netswere strung between branches near nests where mating takes place,trapping more females. Manansang fought and won his case against illegalpossession. He and his supporters proposed a bird paradise to promoteecotourism, but was ignored. The government opened up even more landfor logging instead.[150 words] 5

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