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    • O NE PREP PROGRAMME SECONDARY THREE NA 3B/3C and 3D.2011 Lesson prepared and conducted by Yeo Yam Hwee10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 1
    • End-of-YearExaminations2011 1127 Paper 1 Secondary Three NA / NA(TT) / Express Set by Yeo Yam Hwee10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 2
    • FREE COMPOSITION 1127 Paper 1 Section 110/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 3
    • 112710/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 4 P1S1
    • Do Your Best In Paper 1: Grab all the marks you can!10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 5
    • Section One [30 marks] You are advised to write between 350 and 500 words on one of the following topics. At the head of your composition, write the number of the topic you have chosen.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 6
    • REMEMBER THE IMPORTANT THINGS A STUDENT WRITER MUST BEAR IN MIND IN COMPOSITION1. Read all questions carefully.2. Understand the essay genre (TYPE) required.3. Unpack question thoroughly.4. Use relevant vocabulary words.5. Write useful sentences.6. Vary your sentence structures.7. Structure your essays between 5 and 6 paragraphs.8. Check essay – Tense + Spelling + Structure + Meaning9. How will the reader feel after reading your essay?10. Write the total number of words at the end of your essay. 10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 7
    • PUTTING EVERYTHING TOGETHER. TENSE SPELLING STRUCTURE MEANING HOW DOES MY WRITING MAKE THE READER FEEL? WHAT EFFECT HAVE YOU CREATED? WHAT IMPRESSION HAVE YOU GENERATED?10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 8
    • Section One [30 marks] Imagine life without the English Language. How would1 things be different for you? Green2 Write about how a particular day started out badly for you3 and turned worse before you regained your composure to make the day end better. Despite its size, Singapore is a country full of promises4 and opportunities. What are your views? The classroom of tomorrow does not need510/8/2011 teachers. Do youby Yeo Yam Hwee prepared agree? 9
    • Identify the essay types1 Imagine life without the English Discursive- Language. How would things be different for you? descriptive2 Green Narrative OR Discursive Write about how a particular day started out3 badly for you and turned worse before you Narrative- regained your composure to make the day end better. descriptive Despite its size, Singapore is a country full4 of promises and opportunities. What are Argumentative your views? The classroom of tomorrow does not need5 teachers. Do you agree? Argumentative10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 10
    • NOT MINDMAPPING AS YET CAN I WRITE THIS ESSAY? Unpacking Section 1 Question 1 I must make full use of my In Singapore, English is a language used by people experience as a Singaporean from different ethnic groups to speak to one another. teenager.- This is a perspective which I may have quite a lot of things to write about an English is the main medium of communication between IMAGINARY scenario when we Government and the people. do not use English to do all kinds of things in Singapore. English is the main medium of instructions in school. When I meet people from Imagine life without the overseas, I use English to What if there is English Language. talk to them. no more English How would things be in these situations? different for you? When I write short messages using my smart phone, I use English to write them. Based on these broad but realistic situations, suggest how would things When I attend job interviews, I communicate with Be DIFFERENT for YOU! my potential employers in English. Different – involves doing things I listen to English songs, watch movies and not in the same ways as before. television programmes and commercial messages Different – involves adjustment played in English. and changes. 10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 11
    • My Brainstorming for Points – Q1 Imagine life without the English Language. How would things be different for you?10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 12
    • NOT MINDMAPPING AS YET CAN I WRITE THIS ESSAY? Unpacking Section 1 Question 2 Narrative-descriptive Discursive-descriptive Composition Green CompositionSetting Action Being environmentally friendly Possible Having green fingers Green with envy Discursive Jealousy Possible Descriptive Eating like a vegetarian Being green – young and Narrative/ Choices inexperienced Benefits of being a vegetarian Personal Being a greenhorn Recount Introduction Naivety Choices Main Body P1 Main Body P2Trouble Resolution Main Body P3 Main Body P4 Narrative Matrix for writing Personal Recount or Conclusion Narrative-descriptive Essay 10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 13
    • My Brainstorming for Points – Q2 Green10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 14
    • NOT MINDMAPPING AS YET CAN I WRITE THIS ESSAY? Unpacking Section 1 Question 3 Above all else, a PERSONAL RECOUNTSetting Action Who / When / Why / NARRATIVE – DESCRIPTIVE ESSAY What / Where / How? Write about how a FIRST PART particular day started out badly for you and turned worse before you regained your composure to make SECOND PART the day end better. What was/were the issue[s]?Trouble Resolution 10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 15
    • My Brainstorming for Points – Q3 Write about how a particular day started out badly for you and turned worse before you regained your composure to make the day end better.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 16
    • NOT MINDMAPPING AS YET CAN I WRITE THIS ESSAY? Unpacking Section 1 Question 4 The information Although the physical size of the country is here contains a small and Singapore is REALLY? remark or an actually more a city-state opinion. This What do you mean comment is Despite its size, Singapore is a by “promises”? DISPUTABLE. country full of promises and What do you mean Because we can by “opportunities”? opportunities. ask: Is it TRUE? What are your views? Introduction Main Main Main However Conclusion Body Body Body Paragraph P1 P2 P3 10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 17
    • My Brainstorming for Points – Q4 Despite its size, Singapore is a country full of promises and opportunities. What are your views?10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 18
    • NOT MINDMAPPING AS YET CAN I WRITE THIS ESSAY? Unpacking Section 1 Question 5 What is the meaning of “the classroom of tomorrow”? What do you see, hear, smell, feel, touch, The information Think differently in the classroom of tomorrow? here contains a remark or an The classroom of How does this thought opinion. This tomorrow does not of “not needing teachers” comment is ever arise? need teachers. Do DISPUTABLE. you agree? Because we can ask: Is it TRUE? If you agree, then be prepared to If you disagree, then write about mention how technology can how technology cannot TOTALLY replace humans. TOTALLY replace the human touch. Introduction Main Main Main However Conclusion Body Body Body Paragraph P1 P2 P3 10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 19
    • My Brainstorming for Points – Q5 The classroom of tomorrow does not need teachers. Do you agree?10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 20
    • NO PAIN, NO GAIN.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 21
    • Begin your answer on a fresh page. You are advised to write between 250 and 350 words for this section.• You should read the information carefully and plan your answer before beginning to write.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 22
    • REMEMBER READING AND UNDERSTANDING WHAT YOU ARE ASKED TO DELIVER IN YOUR ATTEMPT IN SECTION TWO is an important skill and inseparable task from the actual writing. You should read the information carefully and plan your answer before beginning to write. PLANNING tells us that YOU WILL NEED TO UNDERSTAND CORRECTLY what you have read in the information provided and match it with the R + A + P + F = TONE framework to STRUCTURE your writing.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 23
    • REMEMBERWhat is your ROLE?Who is the AUDIENCE of your writing task?What is the PURPOSE of your writing task?In what FORM is it going to be in?10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 24
    • FRAMEWORK for writing task in Section B: Situational Writing – R.A.P.F. = TONE R P OLE URPOSE TONE A F UDIENCE ORM WHAT HOW TO TO10/8/2011 WRITE prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee WRITE 25
    • Matching My Reading and Understanding of the Question Requirements WITH the R.A.P.F. = TONE framework ROLE PURPOSE I am playing the role of the To interest and persuade my most outstanding student audience that this would be an enjoyable and beneficial event for coming up with the to fully participate in next year. idea and setting up of the By relating about my challenges REMEMBER stall for my class. I am during the key stages of my tasked to share my preparations and how I overcame them. Also mention the various experiences and the skills skills I learnt and how they are learnt in the processes applicable to my life. Also to say leading to the completion thank you to my classmates, of the event by giving a teachers or anybody else who had helped me. Finally, my TONE speech to the assembly in recommendations for following the hall. year with the students’ feedback in mind PERSUASIVE AND AUDIENCE FORM INTERESTED My school Principal, A SPEECH to the ATTITUDE Because the whole teachers and Principal of my idea was to drum up students will be in school, teachers and enthusiasm and the assembly hall. students drive up participation rate10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 26 for the next event.
    • Section Two [30 marks] The National day Fundraising Food and Fun Fair has been successfully conducted. It was a well-attended event but several students from the different classes have given the following feedback as to how the annual event can be improved further next year.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 27
    • Section Two [30 marks] The National Day Fundraising Food and Fun Fair has been successfully conducted. It was a well-attended event but several students from the different classes have given the following THIS IS IMPORTANT – THIS NEEDS TO BE PROCESSED feedback as to how BY YOU IN YOUR OWN the annual event can EXPRESSIONS WITHOUT CHANGING THE ORIGINAL be improved further MEANING. next year.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 28
    • Section Two [30 marks]Joel Teo, a Secondary Five student: “The graduating classes should have been included even though I understand that the national examinations are near. It was our last opportunity to contribute to our school.”10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 29
    • Section Two [30 marks] Joel Teo, a Secondary Five student: “The graduating classes should have been included even though I understand that the national examinations are It might be a good idea to let the graduating near. It was our classes participate in the event because it is last opportunity to going to be their farewell contribution to the contribute to our School. Our seniors will be very motivated to school.” set a good example and do their very best in coming up with ideas to raise funds.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 30
    • Section Two [30 marks]Abdullah, a Secondary One student: “Two hours were hardly enough for my class to clear our stocks of specially prepared nyonya cakes and other delicacies. There were a lot of customers but because only my form teacher was allowed to deal with the receiving of money and returning of change, the delays were numerous. Impatient students simply drifted to another stall.”10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 31
    • Section Two [30 marks] Abdullah, a Secondary One student:“Two hours were hardly enough for my class to clear our stocks of specially prepared nyonya cakes and other delicacies. There were a lot of customers but because only my form teacher was allowed to deal with the receiving I understand the school’s concern with students handling of money and returning cash and giving out change to other students. However, of change, the delays I think it is a good learning opportunity for some students, were numerous. especially appointed by our form teacher, to learn how Impatient students to manage real cash and give out change quickly and simply drifted to accurately so that we can save a lot more time and do another stall.” more business at the same time. When we cut the waiting time, our customers will be happier and we may in return, sell our stocks faster and raise more money. We may also extend our business hours to let more students visit10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee from us as well. our booths and buy things 32
    • Section Two [30 marks]Kristina, a Secondary Three student: “I kept away from the games stalls even though I was at first eager to try some of the interesting ones, such as the Dunking Machine. I didn’t want to get wet and muddy and I’ve noticed that the students organising some of these games were quite wild and inconsiderate. Why should I patronise their stall only to be rudely treated?”10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 33
    • Section Two [30 marks] Kristina, a Secondary Three student: “I kept away from the games stalls even though I was at first eager to try some of the interesting ones, such as the Dunking Machine. I didn’t want to get wet and muddy and I’ve noticed that the students organising some of these games Let us be considerate and mindful of our manners were quite wild and at all times. We should look after the interest of inconsiderate. Why all Hildans. We can still have fun without being should I patronise their rowdy. Either that, or we do away with games stall only to be rudely treated?” stalls that cause participants to get wet or muddy. We should also consider giving an award to the most courteous fundraising student or class to promote good manners.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 34
    • Section Two [30 marks] Your class participated and was commended for having collected the largest single amount of contribution. You have been chosen as the most outstanding student for coming up with the idea and setting up of the stall for your class. You are asked to deliver a speech during school assembly to share your experiences and the skills learnt in the processes leading to the completion of the event.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 35
    • Section Two [30 marks] THIS IS AN ACHIEVEMENT Your class participated and WHICH YOU MAY was commended for having collected the USE AS A FORM OF largest single amount of ENCOURAGEMENT contribution. You have TO YOUR AUDIENCE. been chosen as the most outstanding student for coming up with the idea and setting up of the stall for your class. You are asked to deliver a speech during school assembly to share your experiences and the skills learnt in the processes leading to the ROLE THERE IS A PERSONAL completion of the event. ANGLE WHICH MAKES YOUR SPEECH AN ORIGINAL.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 36
    • Section Two [30 marks] Your class participated and was commended for having collected the largest single amount of contribution. You have been chosen as the most outstanding student for coming up with the ideaIn a school assembly, and setting up of the stallthe Principal, your for your class. You are asked to deliver a speechteachers, yourclassmates and during schoolthe rest of assembly to share your experiences and the skillsthe school learnt in the processeswill be leading to the completionthere. of the event. AUDIENCE10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 37
    • Section Two [30 marks] Your class participated and was commended for having collected the largest single amount of contribution. You have been chosen as the most outstanding student for coming up with the idea and setting up of the stall You for your class. are asked to deliver a speech during school assembly to FORM share your experiences and the skills learnt in the processes leading to the completion of the event.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 38
    • Section Two [30 marks] Write the speech that you are giving, with the following points in mind.• The challenges you faced during the key stages of your preparations and how you overcame them• The various skills you learnt and how they are applicable to your life• The words of appreciation for your classmates, teachers or anybody else who came to your assistance• The recommendations to be made for the following year with the above feedback in mind10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 39
    • Section Two [30 marks] Write the speech that you are giving, with the following points in mind.• The challenges you faced during the key stages of your preparations and how you overcame them• The various skills you learnt and how they are applicable to your life PURPOSE• The words of appreciation for your classmates, teachers or anybody else who came to your assistance• The recommendations to be made for the following year with the above feedback in mind10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 40
    • Section Two [30 marks] Write the speech that you are giving, with the following points in mind.• The challenges you faced during the key stages of your preparations and how you overcame them• The various skills you learnt and how they are applicable to your life PURPOSE• The words of appreciation for your classmates, teachers or anybody else who came to your assistance• The recommendations to be made for the following year with the above feedback in mind10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 41
    • Section Two [30 marks] Write the speech that you are giving, with the following points in mind.• The challenges you faced during the key stages of your preparations and how you overcame them• The various skills you learnt and how they are applicable to your life• The words of appreciation for your classmates, teachers or anybody else who came to your assistance• The recommendations to be made for the following year with the above feedback in mind PURPOSE10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 42
    • Section Two [30 marks] Write the speech that you are giving, with the following points in mind.• The challenges you faced during the key stages of your preparations and how you overcame them• The various skills you learnt and how they are applicable to your life• The words of appreciation for your classmates, teachers or anybody else who came to your assistance• The recommendations to be made for the following year with the above feedback in mind10/8/2011 PURPOSE prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 43
    • Section Two [30 marks] Your speech should be written in clear and accurate English with relevant explanations and details to interest and persuade your audience that this would be an enjoyable and beneficial event to fully participate in.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 44
    • Section Two [30 marks] Your speech should be written in clear and accurate English with relevant explanations and details to interest and persuade your audience that this would be an enjoyable and beneficial event to fully participate in.10/8/2011 PURPOSE prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 45
    • 1127 Paper 1 Section 210/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee FULFILMENT : 10/10 TASK 46
    • 1127 Paper 1 Section 210/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee LANGUAGE: 20/20 47
    • Task Fulfilment (1): Purpose Awareness• The challenges you faced during the key stages of your preparations and how you overcame them• The various skills you learnt and how they are applicable to your life• The words of appreciation for your classmates, teachers or anybody else who came to your assistance• The recommendations to be made for the following year with the above feedback in mind• to interest and persuade your audience that this would be an enjoyable and beneficial event to fully participate in.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 48
    • Task Fulfilment (2): Situation/Audience Awareness Am I aware that I am delivering the speech formally to an audience which includes the Principal, teachers and all my schoolmates?10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 49
    • Presentation and Form Does my writing task appear in the correct presentation of form which in this case is a SPEECH to be delivered at the school assembly?10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 50
    • Do IStructuring of Shaping given Tone/RegisterArguments information as Appropriateness personal outputMake a proper Make use of Write using aand effective given suitable choicePresentation/ information to of words and aElaboration/ justify personal correct attitudeOrganisation of opinion and to persuade anrequired points interpretation? d interest my audience in what I am informing and explaining to10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee them about? 51
    • Introduction paragraph of my speech Good morning, Mr. Khoo, teachers and all fellow Hildans. I am Benedict Ang from Secondary 3D. I am standing here today because of your kind and generous support at our recently concluded National Day Fundraising Food and Fun Fair which saw 3D collect a total of four thousand and five dollars. Yes! It was the largest single amount of contribution from all of you and the visitors. I was the student who came up with the idea of setting up the Iced Japanese Fruit Jelly Cups with the support of all my classmates in 3D. Let me share with you what we have learnt through our taking part in the extremely enjoyable and meaningful event.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 52
    • MAIN BODY PARAGRAPH 1: The challenges you faced during the key stages of your preparations and how you overcame them To be honest, it was a very tough beginning. We have had absolutely no idea at all but when we did, we have had so many different ideas that nobody was listening to anybody at all. I chanced upon the Iced Jelly idea because the weather in August was rather hot and so to sell something which was easy to eat, not quite like real food and also not that expensive, it had to be a really catchy snack that did not end up needing a messy clean up. It was difficult to get a reliable supplier because we did not have a cooling unit or a refrigerator. We were told that unless we purchased 500 cups at one go, it was not worth the effort to supply us the jelly. Only if we bought so many cups, then could we sell it to you at $1.20 a cup. I was happy that my classmates loved the idea but bringing in the jelly was proving quite a challenge.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 53
    • MAIN BODY PARAGRAPH 2: The various skills you learnt and how they are applicable to your lifeFortunately, my form teacher and my class chairperson communicated the message of fundraising to the jelly supplier and he finally agreed to let us sell 200 cups to you at $1.00 each! Because of our sincerity, he also lent us a cooling unit which was placed free-of-charge at our stall. My classmates learnt by trial and error to design a colourful and eye-catching booth banner. Others packed and stacked the jelly cups neatly into the cooling unit and packaged the cups for sale. Some enjoyed tasting the jelly before you got to do so to help them advertise the jelly during the sales. We have had so much fun but at the same time, learnt that with proper sharing out of tasks, we could actually get things done. Everybody in the class invested by contributing four dollars each to pay for the jelly. The skills learnt can be used later in our lives because they really involved making the sales booth of 3D come alive and getting Hildans to come, buy and eat our jelly.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 54
    • Main Body Paragraph 3:The recommendations to be made for the following year with the above feedback in mind I would like to move on now to some recommendations which may makethe next event an even better one. Why are our seniors being left out of theevent? It might be a good idea to let the graduating classes participatebecause it is going to be their farewell contribution to the school. Ourseniors will be very motivated to set a good example and do their very bestin coming up with ideas to raise funds. I understand the school’s concernwith students handling cash and giving out change to other students.However, I think it is a good learning opportunity for some students,especially those appointed by our form teacher, to learn how to managereal cash and give out change quickly and accurately so that we can save alot more time and do more business at the same time. When we cut thewaiting time, our customers will be happier and we may in return, sell ourstocks faster and raise more money. Is it possible to extend our businesshours by another hour or so to let more students visit our booths and buythings from us as well. Lastly, let us be considerate and mindful of ourmanners at all times. We should look after the interest of all Hildans. Wecan still have fun without being rowdy. Either that, or we may be forced todo away with games stalls that cause participants to get wet or muddy. Weshould also consider giving an award to the most courteous fundraisingstudent or class to promote good manners.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 55
    • Main Body Paragraph 4: Acknowledgements of Assistance received from various persons Before I forget, I would like to give thanks to you, Hildans, for buying up all 200 cups of iced Jelly. I also want to thank my form teacher, Mr. Kolin Kiam, for his time and support in designing and building the sales booth, my class chairperson, Meefah, for creating the sales pitch “Come Get Your Jelly!”, Uncle Patrick, the canteen operator, for supplying ice packages free of charge and all my classmates for chipping in to help in one way or other to make our fundraising project possible. A big thank you also goes to all our teachers who had visited our booth that day. Thank you all for your generous donations to a good cause.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 56
    • Conclusion paragraph of my speech After our success with Iced Japanese Fruit Jelly Cups, I think my class is going to work even harder on next year’s effort. We want to keep it as a surprise but please continue to support us. I hope you have enjoyed listening to me as much as I have enjoyed sharing with you. I strongly urge you to take part and contribute your time and efforts. If I can do it, you can too. I also hope you have found our experiences useful, enjoyable and meaningful to you. So everybody, let us come up with an even better event together next year. Yes, together we can make it happen. Who knows? Next you this time, anyone of you could be up here sharing your achievements with the school. Thank you very much.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 57
    • So what does the marker-reader wish to see in our answers? INTRODUCTION paragraph of my speech MAIN BODY PARAGRAPH 1: The challenges you faced during the key stages of your preparations and how you overcame them MAIN BODY PARAGRAPH 2: The various skills you learnt and how they are applicable to your life MAIN BODY PARAGRAPH 3:The recommendations to be made for the following year with the above feedback in mind Main Body Paragraph 4: Acknowledgements of Assistance received from various persons Conclusion paragraph of my speech10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 58
    • What does the marker-reader look for in your introduction paragraph?You should be clear to inform the audience that your speech concerns therecently concluded The National Day Fundraising Food and Fun Fair. Youbegin your introduction with PRIDE (not ARROGANCE) that you are themost outstanding student for coming up with the idea and setting up of thestall for your class. It makes GREAT sense to tell your audience what kindof stall you and your class have set up.You also justify your time on the stage by confidently proclaiming to theschool that your class was commended for having collected the largestsingle amount of contribution. It makes GREAT sense to inform the schoolhow much your class have collected and handed over to the schoolauthorities. Otherwise, how could you generate enough interest.You also state clearly and earnestly your intention to share your(collectively for you and your classmates) experiences and the skillslearnt in the processes leading to the completion of the event. YOU MUSTHOOK THE INTEREST of your audience RIGHT from the start. In a speech,once the INTEREST is lost, it is difficult to recoup the audience’s attention.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 59
    • So what does the marker-reader wish to see in our answers? MAIN BODY PARAGRAPH 1: The challenges you faced during the key stages of your preparations and how you overcame them CHALLENGES are difficult situations which you are involved in or are concerned with during the key stages of your preparations: KEY STAGE 1: Coming up with the idea – What to do? KEY STAGE 2: From idea to action – How to make things happen? KEY STAGE 3: Managing the action. How did you overcome some of the MAJOR challenges? - (There is no time and space to state ALL OF THEM). Describe only briefly how difficulties or problems or even troubles are resolved by you and your classmates.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 60
    • So what does the marker-reader wish to see in our answers? MAIN BODY PARAGRAPH 2: The various skills you learnt and how they are applicable to your life A SKILL is an ability to do something well, especially because you have learned and practised it. (Longman Dictionary of Contemporary English for Advanced Learners) crowd control and Handling of cash booth decoratoin and customer traffic and giving out banner design to makeExamples management change accurately the class booth attractiveofSKILLS: making of delicious Negotiating for good Budgeting to lower cost of Noodle-cup mee using supplies at an operation and estimation of Hot water affordable price how much to sell to make moneySkills are DIFFERENT HOW ARE THEY APPLICABLE TO YOUR LIFE?from values (e.g. Integrity)or personal qualities (e.g. Able to Able to managebeing patient) or even budget your own Able to talk toapproaches or strategies expenses emotions and people by(e.g. teamwork). and learn feelings in a listening carefully how to crowd and behave 10/8/2011 and speaking prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 61 save calmly. clearly. money.
    • So what does the marker-reader wish to see in our answers? MAIN BODY PARAGRAPH 3:The recommendations to be made for the following year with the above feedback in mindOTHER STUDENTS’ FEEDBACK YOUR RECOMMENDATIONS It might be a good idea to let the graduating classes Joel Teo, a Secondary Five student: participate in the event because it isgoing to be their “The graduating classes should have been included farewell contribution to the School. Our seniors will be very even though I understand that the national motivated toset a good example and do their very best examinations are near. It was our last opportunity to in coming up with ideas to raise funds. contribute to our school.” I understand the school’s concern with students handling cash and giving out change to other students. However, I Abdullah, a Secondary One student: think it is a good learning opportunity for some students, “Two hours were hardly enough for my class to clear our especially appointed by our form teacher, to learn how to stocks of specially prepared nyonya cakes and other manage real cash and give out change quickly and delicacies. There were a lot of customers but because accurately so that we can save a lot more time and do more only my form teacher was allowed to deal with the business at the same time. When we cut the waiting time, receiving of money and returning of change, the delays were numerous. Impatient students simply drifted to our customers will be happier and we mayin return, sell our another stall.” stocks faster and raise more money. We may also extend our business hours to let more students visit our booths and buy things from us as well. Kristina, a Secondary Three student:• “I kept away from the games stalls even though I was at first Let us be considerate and mindful of our manners eager to try some of the interesting ones, such as the Dunking Machine. I didn’t want to get wet and muddy and I’ve noticed that at all times. We should look after the interest of the students organising some of these games were quite wild all Hildans. We can still have fun without being and inconsiderate. Why should I patronise their stall only to be rudely treated?” rowdy. Either that, or we do away with games stalls that cause participants to get wet or muddy. We should also consider giving an award to theYOU MUST USE GIVEN INFORMATION most courteous fundraising student or class toTO SHAPE YOUR RECOMMENDATIONS. Yeo Yam Hwee promote good manners. 10/8/2011 prepared by 62
    • So what does the marker-reader wish to see in our answers? Main Body Paragraph 4: Acknowledgements of Assistance received from various persons How haveWHO DO they helpedYOU THANK? you in this event? Do not brag or tease or mention anybody who is IRRELEVANT to the event. Also think about the customers who have contributed to the purchase of your products or services and THANK them as well.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 63
    • So what does the marker-reader wish to see in our answers? Conclusion paragraph of my speech It is important to bear in mind the MOST IMPORTANT purpose of your speech: to interest and persuade your audience that this would be an enjoyable and beneficial event to fully participate in. A final thrust To reassure your To keep them To thank to impress on audience that if guessing at everybody in your audience you could do it what your class the assembly the pride and and made yourself would be for listening to the confidence and class proud, coming up next you and that you have so can they. because you are you have gained. going to be enjoyed sharing better next year. your experience with them. WORDS OF ENCOURAGEMENT for next year’s potential participants.10/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 64
    • THANK YOU AND GOODBYE S.H.S.S.201110/8/2011 prepared by Yeo Yam Hwee 65