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  • Why I love revision – feeling like a competent writer.Drafting: vision in my head comes up against the reality of the writer I am today.“The book in my mind” poemRevision is what allows us to bring the book on the page closer to that dream-book
  • 2008 I sent agent a manuscript - Her thoughts: love character, funny, but….seasonal?Eesh.“Does it really have to be about the Nutcracker? Could it be about a school play or something?”
  • 2008 I sent agent a manuscript - Her thoughts: love character, funny, but….seasonal?Eesh.“Does it really have to be about the Nutcracker? Could it be about a school play or something?”
  • REVISION IS ABOUT SEEING IDEAS IN A DIFFERENT WAY
  • Start with the starting over part – so that by the end of this two hour workshop you’ll like me again.
  • 2008 I sent agent a manuscript - Her thoughts: love character, funny, but….seasonal?Eesh.“Does it really have to be about the Nutcracker? Could it be about a school play or something?”
  • So this sea monster walks into his therapist’s office….
  • EM Kokie - I have 40k words of cut scenes - mostly school scenes - from the first few drafts of Personal Effects because for the first several drafts, I had my main character's motivations all wrong. I was forcing the story because I wanted it to be something it wasn't. It's only when I really started listening to the character and realized what he wanted, and stopped judging him for it, that the book really started to work.
  • Jo - In the early versions of Lessons From A Dead Girl, Leah doesn't die! The book leads up to Lainegettnig the courage to face her in the hospital. Obviously, it had a different title then. :-)
  • Jody Feldman wrote a book called “The Eleventh Level” personal mystery + story about secret society – agent asked her to strengthen the secret society part, but then the book was 80K – too long for this particular MG. Split it off – secret society book is this one – other book might be for another day.
  • Sarah Aronson changed a major character from a guy to a girl and rewrote – found that the story worked much better and allowed her to develop a main theme of the book.
  • Nova Ren Suma - IG began as a short story, for adults, about two sisters—no fantastical elements or magical realism at all. But after a summer writing workshop, I decided it wasn't enough as is and I wanted to do more with it and turn it YA. I also wrote about 200 pages of a whole other version of the novel for NaNoWriMo one year... Still no magical realism. I thought that draft was horrible and was blocked for months afterward and then serendipitously (or cruelly) my laptop's hard-drive died and I had no backups, and it was unrecoverable. So I lost those 200 pages. Then I started from scratch again, because I had to, combining the sisters from the story and the ideas from the lost novel even though I didn't have the pages in front of me, and that's what became IMAGINARY GIRLS at last and when the fantastical started showing up. (I also back up my hard-drive obsessively now... lesson learned.)
  • Both this and courage has no color –started as picture books and grew into MG. And I think this is a great idea – that our books can grow into any number of things…
  • When you see this symbol…. Fire up your laptop or get your notebook ready.
  • When you see this symbol…. Fire up your laptop or get your notebook ready.
  • When you see this symbol…. Fire up your laptop or get your notebook ready.
  • Linda calls this “the spine” - What is at the center of your work? Why does it even exist? Why does this story need to be told? Universal human truth – even in funny books.
  • Writing workshop at NESCBW a couple years ago - It was a poetry workshop with Kelly Fineman – but I used it to develop this MC’s father in EOTS. I can’t remember the original assignment – but this is what grew out of it and it was important for me and for Jaden’s dad. (By the way – you should feel free to do this, too – if you come up with something better during writing prompt, do your better thing and you can credit me when you give your workshop later on)
  • Idea from teaching – BLOG – teach mentor texts - but one authors can use, too.
  • Three false starts – back to brainstorming/outlining every time.
  • Mystery organizer – crime in the middle – then elements – suspects, motives, clues, false clues, etc. You can make your own – just list important elements of your particular genre.
  • Class schedules – when would Claire & Natalie be together? How would they grow apart? Develop friendship troubles issue.
  • When you see this symbol…. Fire up your laptop or get your notebook ready.
  • General words & phrases are your enemy. Green shirt – there are a million kinds of green – new grass green, alligator pond green, pine woods green – and you’ll notice that my metaphors all come from nature because that’s the world I love best – a kid might describe his shirt as “cafeteria peas green” or “my mother’s emerald earrings green”Be surprising – the best descriptions describe us because we’ve never thought of it that way before – even though that’s the perfect word or phrase.
  • Ponytail – What would that stick look like to the girl on the right? Coming at her face like that? And then you can do sounds, smells…etc.
  • Smirk on her face – character inspiration for Sarah in WAKE UP MISSING.
  • Also went on twitter – other than blushing, what do you do when you’re embarrassed?
  • When you see this symbol…. Fire up your laptop or get your notebook ready.
  • When you see this symbol…. Fire up your laptop or get your notebook ready.
  • Inspiration boards – don’t worry about people “stealing” your ideas. Really.
  • SUGAR AND ICE – Claire & the maple farm - Green – scenes on farm, salmon – lake placid – purple-competition – red – sabotage -
  • Titles change – a lot. Be ready for this and be at peace with it. Marketing dept. etc. Let them do their job. BRILLIANT FALL OF GIANNA Z. – SWINGER OF BIRCHES – MAPLE GIRL, “THAT STUPID LEAF COLLECTION BOOK”
  • Known issues while working – starting place List after 1st read-through after completion
  • Why I love revision – feeling like a competent writer.Drafting: vision in my head comes up against the reality of the writer I am today.“The book in my mind” poemRevision is what allows us to bring the book on the page closer to that dream-book

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  • Walking the Walk: Real Revision in the Classroom Kate Messner WSRAhttp://www.katemessner.com
  • www.katemessner.com/WSRA
  • Assignment:Write for threeminutes, describing aplace that you love.
  • So…what are you writing these days?
  • As I have been writing this summer, I feel likeI have had moments when I can identify withauthors I have heard speak or authors I haveread about. There are so many things I haveheard authors say that I now can identify withsince I am writing, too. I strongly believe inmy own reflection and introspection to guidehow I work with students.Read more: Jen Vincent’s Teach Mentor Texts Bloghttp://www.teachmentortexts.com/2012/07/tmt-summer-writing-group-week-seven.html#axzz22AK6Adae
  • “The Book in My Mind…”
  • WHAT REVISION ISN’T… Spell Checking Hiring a professional editor Solitary A process with a single correct solution or end point
  • http://devilduck.tumblr.com/post/3834151230
  • WHAT REVISION ISBrainstorming Free-Writing (and maybestarting over)
  • Princess Marty Frog-Slime and theNutcracker Ballet
  • Confessions of a Sea Monster
  • “Well…This is funny. But itsounds more like a New Yorker cartoon than a book for kids.”
  • Reconsideringa character’s motivation
  • What if thingsturned outdifferently?
  • TwoBooks in One?
  • Who’sthat guy girl?
  • The Gift of aCrashed HardDrive…
  • Considering different formats
  • Draft 1Draft 2 Draft 3 Draft 4
  • Time to Write!Sometimes poem…
  • Time to Write! *Sometimes…
  • CHARACTERS/STUF SETTINGS THEMES/MOODS F I LIKE OR FIND FASCINATINGHURRICANES RAINFOREST MYSTERYPYTHONS EARLY 20TH CENTURY SECRETS NYCTIME TRAVEL LAKE CHAMPLAIN SCIENCE VS. ART
  • Assignment:Mess around with your columns & comeup with a story idea.Write the first page.Write it fast. (15 minutes)It’s okay if it’s crummy.We’ll make it awesome later.
  • Time toWrite!
  • WHAT REVISION IS Finding & Strengthening the Heart of a project
  • This book is about_________________________________________________________________________________________. (But underneath that, it’s reallyabout__________________________________________________________________________________________.
  • My book is about a figureskater from a small-townmaple farm who earns ascholarship to train with theelite in Lake Placid & discoversa world of mean girls on ice.But underneath that, it’s reallyabout making a decision tofollow your own dreamsinstead of the dreams that arechosen for you.
  • My book is about a futureworld where killer tornadoesare widespread and four kidsat a science camp who aretrying to stop them butdiscover a terrifying secret.But underneath that, it’s reallyabout using your powers forgood.
  • This book is about_________________________________________________________________________________________. (But underneath that, it’s reallyabout__________________________________________________________________________________________.
  • WHAT REVISION IS65 Off-Draft WritingPrompts to Jump- Start Revision
  • Write ametaphor-poemdescribingone of yourcharacters,in anothercharacter’svoice.Thanks, Kelly Fineman!
  • Write a metaphor-poemdescribing one ofyourcharacters, inanothercharacter’s voice. Thanks, Kelly Fineman!
  • WHAT REVISION ISRaising the Stakes
  • MENTOR TEXTS
  • How couldmy maincharacter make his/her situation worse?
  • What actionsmight your maincharacter take to make his/her situation worsebefore he or she makes it better?
  • WHAT REVISION ISCharts, maps, timelines, &outlines
  • More Ideas… • Map the setting – note important events • Chapter by chapter timelines• Plot charts with rising/falling action • Outline (after writing) to identify weak chapters
  • Big-Picture Story Chart - What characters, settings, objects, jokes,themes, and threads are important in your project? Are they woven consistently throughout the text?
  • Time to Revise!Sometimes poem… Add SMELLS
  • WHAT REVISION ISReturning to Research
  • WHAT REVISION ISDetails and Word Choice Be specific. Be surprising.
  • Look for delicious details
  • Look for delicious details
  • Google Maps – Street View
  • Role Play!Replace Tired Body Language
  • ** Role Play!Replace Tired Body Language ANGRY FRUSTRATED ANXIOUS SCARED JOYFUL-EXCITED DEPRESSED
  • WHAT REVISION ISBeing a Word Ninja
  • Readers are Smart Don’t keep repeatingyour points to make sure they “get it.”
  • very really just that “whatlooked like”
  • JUST IN THATAND MOMENTRATHER SOBEGAN TO A BITAS I GUESSTHOUGH MAYBETHEN THATBUT VERYALWAYS REALLY
  • Watch for “pet” stories,ideas, themes, phrases…
  • Brainstorm: Whatwords, phrases, &pet stories are on your personal“MOST WANTED” list?
  • Time to Revise! ***Sometimes poem… Cut at least 30 words
  • WHAT REVISION IS Being Social -Critique Groups/Partners-Crowd-Sourcing Solutions
  • Hey….What would you call that little containerwhere you keep contact lenses when you’re not wearing them? A tub?
  • Post-It Note CritiquesORANGE = “I LOVE THIS!” GREEN = “I’M BORED.”YELLOW=“I’M CONFUSED”
  • Time to Revise!Sometimes poem… Rewrite in differentseason/circumstances
  • WHAT REVISION ISTechnology Tools of the Trade
  • Scrivenerhttp://www.literatureandlatte.com/scrivener.php
  • WHAT REVISION ISFinding the Right Title
  • WHAT REVISION IS Finding the Right Title TEN TitlesHighlight great phrases Crowd-source Cut-it-Up & Mix-it-Up
  • WHAT REVISION IS Making Lists……and getting to work!
  • Five Reasons KidsDon’t Want to Revise(and what teachers can do about it) Kate Messner http://www.katemessner.com
  • REASON #1“But I just FINISHED.And I like my paper the way it is.”
  • SOLUTION: Start the revisionconversation early.
  • After We Write… REVISION – PART I REVISION – PART 2 REVISION – PART 3
  • REASON #2“I already ran a spell check. I’m good.”
  • SOLUTION: Teach students thedifference betweenrevising and editing.
  • REASON #3“I don’t know where to start.”
  • SOLUTION: Have a revisionchecklist ready…
  • Student Critique Partners• Trade papers with a partner•Use highlighters to indicate thefollowing: •Pink = Consider cutting this part. •Green = I’m confused now. •Orange = Use more vivid details/precise language. •Yellow = This part works really well!•In the margin next to each color (oron a Post-It note), write a noteexplaining your highlighting and
  • REASON #4 “I did revise. Justnow. It’s not my fault I’m a fast reviser.”
  • SOLUTION: Teach multiplestrategies for revision.
  • A Shrunken ManuscriptStrategy Courtesy of Darcy Pattison http://www.darcypattison.com PINK = plot points GREEN = crush BLUE = Ruby ORANGE = funny bits with Ian YELLOW = place for the tree game
  • REASON #5“Everybody says I’ma great writer. Greatwriters don’t need to revise.”
  • SOLUTION: Use published authors as rolemodels, through textexamples and Skype visits.
  • GUESS HOW MANY DRAFTS? 14!
  • How will you spend your precious writing timewith students?
  • “Revolution for the Tested”
  • Walking the Walk: Real Revision in the Classroom Kate Messner WSRAhttp://www.katemessner.com
  • www.katemessner.com/WSRA