Revising Descriptive Writing

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Once you've written a descriptive writing piece that is vivid, emotive, and tangible, you can strengthen it by following these three tips.

Once you've written a descriptive writing piece that is vivid, emotive, and tangible, you can strengthen it by following these three tips.

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  • 1. Revising Descriptive Writing: What to look for English 11
  • 2. #1: to Consider
    • Eliminate your “I feel, I saw, I hear” statements
    • They suck the life from the potentially vivid imagery.
    • Avoid : I heard birds chirping all around me.
    • Better : All around me, birds chirped.
  • 3. More examples
    • Avoid : I feel the cool breeze tickle my arm.
    • Better : The cool breeze tickles my arm.
    • Avoid : As soon as I stepped into the room, I saw six rabbits.
    • Better : As soon as I stepped into the room, six rabbits hopped before me.
      • I made the rabbits do something rather than have them simply exist.
  • 4. #2: to consider
    • Keep your tenses the same
    • Tense: past, present, future
    • Avoid : The bird chirped and the breeze tickles my arm.
    • Better : The bird chirps and the breeze tickles my arm.
  • 5. #3: to Consider
    • - ing’s cannot stand alone in a sentence
      • They need a main verb to carry them.
    • Technically, it’s a gerund or participle in need of a main verb.
    • Avoid : Branches gently swaying.
    • Better : The branches gently swayed.