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Revising Descriptive Writing: What to look for English 11
#1: to Consider <ul><li>Eliminate your “I feel, I saw, I hear” statements </li></ul><ul><li>They suck the life from the po...
More examples <ul><li>Avoid : I feel the cool breeze tickle my arm. </li></ul><ul><li>Better : The cool breeze tickles my ...
#2: to consider <ul><li>Keep your tenses the same </li></ul><ul><li>Tense: past, present, future </li></ul><ul><li>Avoid :...
#3: to Consider <ul><li>- ing’s cannot stand alone in a sentence </li></ul><ul><ul><li>They need a main verb to carry them...
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Once you've written a descriptive writing piece that is vivid, emotive, and tangible, you can strengthen it by following these three tips.

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  1. 1. Revising Descriptive Writing: What to look for English 11
  2. 2. #1: to Consider <ul><li>Eliminate your “I feel, I saw, I hear” statements </li></ul><ul><li>They suck the life from the potentially vivid imagery. </li></ul><ul><li>Avoid : I heard birds chirping all around me. </li></ul><ul><li>Better : All around me, birds chirped. </li></ul>
  3. 3. More examples <ul><li>Avoid : I feel the cool breeze tickle my arm. </li></ul><ul><li>Better : The cool breeze tickles my arm. </li></ul><ul><li>Avoid : As soon as I stepped into the room, I saw six rabbits. </li></ul><ul><li>Better : As soon as I stepped into the room, six rabbits hopped before me. </li></ul><ul><ul><li>I made the rabbits do something rather than have them simply exist. </li></ul></ul>
  4. 4. #2: to consider <ul><li>Keep your tenses the same </li></ul><ul><li>Tense: past, present, future </li></ul><ul><li>Avoid : The bird chirped and the breeze tickles my arm. </li></ul><ul><li>Better : The bird chirps and the breeze tickles my arm. </li></ul>
  5. 5. #3: to Consider <ul><li>- ing’s cannot stand alone in a sentence </li></ul><ul><ul><li>They need a main verb to carry them. </li></ul></ul><ul><li>Technically, it’s a gerund or participle in need of a main verb. </li></ul><ul><li>Avoid : Branches gently swaying. </li></ul><ul><li>Better : The branches gently swayed. </li></ul>
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