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Far from being locked inside our own skins, insidethe “dungeons” of ourselves, we are now able torecognize that our minds belong, quite naturally, toa collective “mind,” a mind in which we shareeverything that is mental, most obviously languageitself, and that the old boundaries of the skin is notboundary at all but a membrane connecting theinner and outer experience of existence. Ourintelligence, our wit, our cleverness, our uniquepersonalities--all are simultaneously “our own”possessions and the world’s. --Joyce Carol Oates “New Heaven and New Earth”
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Far from being locked inside our own skins, inside the “dungeons” of ourselves,we are now able to recognize
Long introductory series of phrases Far from being locked repeated inside our own skins, preposition inside the “dungeons” of ourselves, we are now able to recognize The Subject
RECOGNIZE...that our minds belong, quite naturally, to a collective “mind,” everything that is mental,a mind in which we share most obviously language itself, and not boundary at all butthat the old a membrane connectingboundaries of the skin is the inner and outer experience of existence.
“our own”Our intelligence, possessionsour wit,our cleverness, --all are simultaneously andour uniquepersonalities the world’s.
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The national unity of a free people depends upon asufﬁciently even balance of political power to make itimpracticable for the administration to be arbitrary and forthe opposition to be revolutionary and irreconcilable.Where that balance no longer exists, democracy perishes.For unless all the citizens of a state are forced bycircumstances to compromise, unless they feel that theycan affect policy but that no one can wholly dominate it,unless by habit and necessity they have to give and take,freedom cannot be maintained. Walter Lippman
This then is the heritage of pioneer experience,--a passionatebelief that a democracy was possible which should leave theindividual a part to play in free society and not make him a cog ina machine operated from above; which trusted in the commonman, in his tolerance, his ability to adjust differences with goodhumor, and to work out an American type from the contributionsof all nations--a type for which he would ﬁght against those whochallenged it in arms, and for which in time of war he wouldmake sacriﬁces, even the temporary sacriﬁce of individualfreedom and his life, lest that freedom be lost forever. Frederick Jackson Turner