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Features of  Narrative Writing ©  J Munro 2007
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Develop a Personal Voice when Writing VOICE shows your personality when writing. The writing has a sound different from everyone else's. It has feeling and emotion so that it does not sound boring. The reader should be able to tell if you are happy or sad. The writer should be writing from the heart and bring the topic to life for the reader.  One day my mom took me to the circus.  I LOVE the circus.  There are always some very funny clowns.  My favorite clown there came up to me and told me he had a secret for me.  He got real close to me and I thought he was going to whisper in my ear when POW he squirted me in the face with his water flower.  I never laughed so much.  I had a great time at the circus and will remember it for the rest of my life. Funny
It was the day for the big test.  I studied all week and knew I was ready.  I was still a little bit nervous, but knew once I started I would be fine.  The teacher asked us to get some books out to read when we were finished so we wouldn't bother the other kids if we finished early.  The test was a breeze.  When I was done I started to read my favorite book. Serious
Yesterday when I was on my way to the grocery store I saw a very strange man.  He had on a brown trench coat, red hat and was carrying a purple umbrella.  I'm sure he was some kind of investigator.  As he began walking I noticed he was just peeking over the top of his coat and I could only see his eyes. He was very sneaky looking.   I'm sure he was watching somebody, I just wonder who! Mysterious
As a baseball let me tell you I have some pretty frightening experiences.  Imagine being hit by a hard bat.  OUCH, I want to scream every time someone hits me.  Then for the flight through the air.  You can't believe how scary that is.  I am always asking myself three questions.  Will someone catch me?  Will I fly over the fence and land with a hard thud?  Or will I just go bouncing across the field? The next time you are frightened, stop a  minute and think about how I feel.  That is the true meaning of frightened!   Frightening
Look at the picture below and reading the short paragraph.   Choose the voice that you think is being used in each paragraph. Remember when writing with voice it can be:   Funny, Serious, Mysterious, Frightening Have you ever seen two Martians in a play before?  Well you should have been at the same show as I was.  I never laughed so hard in my life.  These two green creatures were trying to back to their land safely, but came across many strange people.  They never saw humans before.  They kept trying to act like us.  Well, that is where the fun begins.  You should go see the Martian's On Earth if you get a chance.  It is your chance to sit back and laugh!
Halloween night was finally here.  I was very excited to trick or treating with my friends.  There is always one house that everyone is afraid to go to and this year we decided we would go.  We slowly crept up the steps and tap lightly at the door hoping nobody would hear us and we could get out of there quickly. Before we could turn around there she was.  There were bats flying around her head, a frog in one hand, a broom in the other hand and a black cat next to her leg. Before she could speak my friends and I let out a scream and ran all the way home.  That is one house we will NEVER go to again.
The first day of school is always a tough one.  You are always waiting to see who is in your class, what your teacher will be like and how your day will run.  Usually everyone is very quiet trying to set a good example.  We all get out our books, sit in our seats nice and tall and do everything the teacher says with very little noise.   I bet this is the teachers favorite day of the year!
I will never forget my 5th birthday.  My mom surprised me with a clown to entertain my friends and I.  This clown was very funny and had many tricks up his sleeve.  When his show was over he made everyone at my party a balloon animal.  This was a great day for me!
Exercise: You and your friends were playing a ball game outside on the top quad.  You know that you are not allowed to kick balls on the quad.  When the ball was passed to you, you kicked it back.  The ball didn’t go where you wanted it and you broke Mrs. Jones’ office window. Describe what happened to Mrs Jones,  using a serouis voice, and then in a funny voice described to your friends what happened.
Point of View When  a writer begins a new story he must decide:"Who will tell my story?"   An author can tell a story from the first-person point of view. OR      The author can use the third-person point of view ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object]
First - Person Point of View I  walked home from school today with  my  friends.  We  stopped for ice cream.   I  had vanilla. It's  my  favorite.  When  I  got up this morning  I  brushed  my   teeth.  Then  I  got dressed and ate  my  breakfast.   Third - Person Point of View Ted plays on a baseball team.   He  loves to play with  his  team.   He  has a game next week.   His  coach thinks  he's  a good baseball player.      The princess was locked in the tower.   She  had no way to escape.   She  hoped that a prince would rescue  her .   Her  wish came true.   He  came and took  her  to  his  castle.
Read each group of sentences.   Decide if it is written in first person or third person point of view. The hunter had a cottage in the woods.  He lived there all alone.  I ride the bus to each every day.  I like to sit with my friends. My friends and I went camping.  I toasted marshmallows over the fire.  Joey likes to go swimming.  Sometimes he asks his  friend Sam to go with him.  He brings his ball to play with.  Frosty the snowman had a hat on his head.  He also had a pipe and a carrot nose.  He held a shovel in his hand.
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Narrative Writing In a good narrative, the reader relates closely to the story, feels involved with the plot and often identifies with the characters.  A good story is hard to put down and the reader feels a sense of loss when it ends.  The features of  a narrative are: ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object]
Planning your Narrative Brainstorm your ideas.  This does not need to take to long and can be added to.
Plan the path your writing will take.  This plan is in a flow-chart form.
 
Opening Paragraphs The opening paragraph of a narrative will often give us an introduction to the characters, the setting, or both and will often give us a hint about the plot.  Another name for this is  orientation .  You orientate your readers, give them an idea, right from the start, that your text is going to be worth reading.
Opening Sentences The Opening Sentence To write an opening sentence which will grab the reader’s attention. Stories can start using the following ways: Dialogue:  “Hands in the air this is a stick up!”  he hollered roughly. A statement:  The school principal had to collect the boy from the roof. Problem: David didn’t know what to do: the school bully, Ted was  expecting him to hand over five doallars and all he had  was fifty cents. Action: Without a moments hesitation, Maude Drinkwater lifted  the revolver and fired. Description of people: Mr Sherman looked ordinary for someone who had just  solved one of the world’s most difficult maths problems. Description of place: The sky was the colour of dish water. Description of time: As the clock struct twelve it echoed around the hall.
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Active Beginings In order to capture your reader’s attention, the beginning of your story must be interesting and lively enough to make your reader want to keep reading.  One way to do this is to begin with an action. Directions : Revise each story beginning.  Put your main character in the setting, and have the character do something relevant to the story. Example: One rainy day I went to the mall. Revision: I splashed across the parking lot, yanked open the tall glass  door, dripping wet, stepped into the mall. ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object]
Exercise 1:   The Keeper ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object]
Exercise 2:  Rocco ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],Here is an orientation that gives a setting.
Exercise 3:  Uncles Three at Kamahi The following extract also starts with a setting. ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object]
Exercise 4:  Opening Paragraphs Choose a title and opening sentence from the list below.  Use the sentence beginnings to write an opening paragraph which will orientate a reader into your narrative.
Plot A plot starts with an introduction to the narrative.  A plot will include problems or crises and how these are solved, and the conclusion to the narrative.  If it is a good plot, there will be situayions which happen throughout the narrative thaat will make you want to read on. What happens in a novel has been carefully planned by the author.  Some authors use a flow chart to plan their work.  Others might write a brief overview of events noting each crisis, climax or problem and how each will be resolved.
Improve your Plot Who are your story’s main characters? What are their main needs?(motives) Who or what tries to stop or thwart them from achieving their needs? (conflict) Do the characters succeed or fail in achieving their goals? How do they succeed or fail? (resolution)
Exercise 1: Plot Development The folowing extract from The Keeper is an example of a crisis in a plot.
Plot development: The Keeper ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],This text gives a good example of the rise and fall of a crisis within the plot.  There is a build up with all the action of trying to get out of the way of the tiger and it leaping, then the feeling of relief when the animal is dead.  Short quick sentences: “Then it looked at me.  It did not see me.” keep the feeling of excitement and suspense going.
This is how the plot of  The Keeper  might look in graph form. The plot may have many parts to it.  It may have subplots within the main plot.  Whether the plot is action-packed or slow and leisurely, a good plot will keep the reader interested. A  crisis  is a turning-point, a moment of danger or suspense.  A  climax  is the highest point in a series of events.  There is often a build-up to a big climax near the end of the narrative.
 
Characterisation A person’s appearance, their posture and ways of walking, their hobbies, the way in which they express their emotions, their secret wishes, fears, prejudices and religious beliefs are all pointers to their character. We develop character through the following: Dialogue what the characters say and how the say it Action what the characters do Reactions how the characters think and feel in different situations Relationships how the character interact with each other, and how others view  them Crisis a turning point in the story for the character; the way in which  the characters respond in a crisis revaels true character
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Characters Narrative Characters may be people of animals.  Although they are imaginary, the author may have modelled their character on people they know.  A reader can usually identify with characters, either through a character’s personality, actions or experiences, or physical appearance. Characters in a book may be built up over several chapters with the reader getting an impression of their personality through actions, reactions and relationships to other characters.
 
 
 
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Planning a Setting
Things to think about These settings all paint a picture for the reader.  Think carefully about which style of scene setting appeals to you. Do you prefer to be given a clear description? Do you prefer imagery where the writer’s use of words lets you use your imagination? Do you prefer a character in the text to help establish the mood of the setting by talking about it?
Create a setting Write a setting that vividly portrays the background to the plot.  The setting is where the action is happening and when the action occurs ie. Time of day, month, year. ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object]
Add Phrases Phrases add information and interest to short, dull sentences. To add an adjectival phrase, you can ask questions like ‘how’, ‘when’, or ‘where’. Adjectival phrases: The boy was a culprit. The boy with a cheeky grin was a culprit.  Adverbial phrases: We skipped. We skipped across the playground. We skipped across the playground with great abandon  after our win in soccer. ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object]
Join Short Sentences Sometimes short sentences can be combined to create longer, more interesting sentences. Example First Draft: The rosella was feeding in the tree.  It was attacked by  another bird.  It flew away Revised: Attacked by another bird as it fed in the tree, the rosella  flew away. ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object]
Vary Sentence Length When you vary your sentence lengths, it creates a pleasant rhythm. A story can become boring if all the sentences are the same length. Example Listen to what is happening.  These sentences have five words.  Here are another five words.  Five more words to follow it.  The sentences begin to drone.  There is no variety here.  It’s like a stuck record.  It goes on and on. ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object]
Smooth Transitions One way an author can get the reader’s attention is by using pharases that we call “red flags.”  red flags, such as  all of a sudden  or  the next thing I knew , indicate a new twist in the plot.  Red flags can replace predictiable words and phrases, like  next  and  then. Read the sample sentences below.  Create your own “Red Flag Menu” by filling in the blanks. Suddenly  I manage to escape from the monster. Just then  I manage to escape from the monster.   I manage to escape from the monster.   I manage to escape from the monster. I manage to escape from the monster. I manage to escape from the monster. I manage to escape from the monster. I manage to escape from the monster.
 
 
 
Improve Your Dialogue What is Dialogue? It's the conversation that takes place between characters in a story.  You can tell more about your characters' thoughts and  feelings if you include dialogue in your stories.
Let's add some dialogue to that story. Sharing a room with her sister wasn't always fun.  Kristi was tired of always having to clean up their room.   "Ashley, you've left your clothes on the floor again!  I'm not picking them up for you this time," said Kristi.     "I'm sorry, Kristi, I don't mean to be a slob!" joked Ashley.   "I just don't notice the mess--really!  I guess it just doesn't bother me.“ "Well, it bothers me!  You know it does," said Kristi.   "I'll try harder, I guess," sighed Ashley.  "But I can't promise anything.  Neatness just isn't my thing!"  Let's look at a story without dialogue. Sharing a room with her sister wasn't always fun.  Kristi was tired of always cleaning up after her sister Ashley. Just because they shared a room, that doesn't mean they had to share the mess!  Ashley was always leaving dirty dishes on her desk, and there were always dirty clothes under the bed.  Kristi had tried to talk to Ashley about cleaning up the mess, but somehow talking didn't help.
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Read the following story: Paul and his dad were planning their first fishing trip of the year.  Paul wasn't sure what to bring with him, so he asked his dad.  His dad told him to bring his pole.  His dad would bring everything else.  His dad also told him to dress warmly because it's always cold in the morning near the lake.  Paul told his dad he was excited about going and would have trouble sleeping.  Rewrite the story adding dialogue. 
Here's a sample of what your story  might  look like. Notice the quotation marks and commas.   Check your story to make sure you have the correct punctuation.            Paul and his dad were planning their first fishing trip of the year.            "What should I pack, Dad?" said Paul.  "I don't want to forget anything."    "Just bring your pole, Paul.  I've got everything else we'll need already in the car," said Dad.  "Mom's already packed us a big lunch.  We want to get an early start!"        "Should I bring a sweatshirt?" questioned Paul.         "Oh, it's always cool in the morning near the lake.  You'll need more than a sweatshirt.  You need to make sure you dress warm."         Paul headed up to bed.   "I don't think I'll be able to sleep, Dad.  I'm too excited!"
Create Similes ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],LEARNING INTENTION:  To liken something to something else, by using similes. Examples: My attention was as far away as love on a  battlefield. Her skin is pale as eggshells.
METAPHORS A metaphor is like a simile. That's because it is a comparison that is made between things, which is not always likely or obvious. We don’t use ‘like’ or ‘as’ in a metaphor. We often use metaphors without realising it. For instance, when we say that your parents  'bark a command ' at you, you are comparing them to a dog, and hence engaging in metaphor!  Other Metaphors A heart of stone He has the heart of a lion You are the sun in my sky You are the light in my life She is my East and my West, my compass. You had better pull your socks up Love is a lemon - either bitter of sweet
Create Metaphors Try to write three metaphors for each of the following examples: the sun an apple clouds cheese a cat the ocean fog anger LEARNING INTENTION:  to understand that a metaphor is a word picture in which the writer replaces the thing to be described with another image.  It makes a more direct and vivid comparison to a simile. Examples: The moon is a pearl from a necklace. The moon is a cold, cheesy pizza. The moon is earth’s halo
Personification ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],LEARNING INTENTION:  to understand that in personification, the non-human is identified with the human or given human characteristics. Examples: The steel beam clenched its muscles. Clouds limped across the sky. The pebbles on the path were grey with grief. Cricket has been good to me.     The New Zealand dollar had a quiet month.   Life dealt him a heavy blow.
Onomatopoeia ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],LEARNING INTENTION:  to understand that Onomatopoeia is found in a group of words that attempts to replicate certain sounds. We have words like  woof-woof , or  bow wow ,  tweet-tweet , and  cock-a-doodle doo . However, these words are still the creation of the human mind. Examples: crackle, splat, ooze, squish, boom.  The tyres whirr on the road. The pitter-patter of soft rain. The mud oozed and squished through my toes.
IMPACT Show Don’t Tell To write what is happening in the story without explicitly stating it. Telling sentence:  Joe was old. Showing sentence:  Joe creacked when he moved, his arthritic limbs  bowed beneath the weight of his eighty years Below are some  telling sentences  which simply state facts.  Transform them into  showing sentences: 1.  It was cold on the beach. 2.  Dad was angry. 3.  My friend is a great rugby player. 4.  The house needed repairs. 5.  The car braked suddenly.
Make every word count ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],You can  improve your writing by removing unnecessary words.  It is possible to eliminate unnecessary words but still retain the same information. First Draft The idea was thought of by Jim at four o’clock early in  the morning. (14 words)  Revised   Jim’s idea came at 4 am. (6 words)
Create Word Pictures We can add details to a sentence to make an image more vivid and life-like. Bland The man had a hairy face. Interesting The hair on Mr Twit’s face didn’t grow smooth and  matted as it does on most hairy-faced men.  It grew  in spikes that struck out straights like bristles of a  nail brush.   ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object]
Focus on the Facts We can add on sufficient information to help the reader understand better. Example A boat came to the island. What kind of boat was it? Who was aboard the boat? What were the feelings of the passengers about reching  the island? When did the boat arrive? What was the purpose of the visit? Read the following sentences.  What questions would you ask the writer to ensure that all the essential information was given. 1.  I don’t like school. 2.  My aunt is in hospital. 3.  We like going out for dinner. Select one of these sentences.  Rewrite them with sufficient information.
Replace Overworked Words For my birthday I  got lots of  presents. It was a  lovely  day. We  got off  the train at Wellington. My sister  got  fifty dollars a week. In the war,  lots of  men got injured. Feeling annoyed, the teacher  went  out of the room. We had a  nice  holiday in Dunedin where we met many  nice  people. LEARNING INTENTION:  To think of as many different ways as you can to express the same idea. Example:   Mary is a  good  person.  Mary is a  lovely  person.  Mary is a  wonderful  person.  Mary is a  superb  person.  Mary is a  delightful  person.
Strong Verbs By using strong verbs we can express movement and help to create a picture in the reader’s mind. Well-chosen verbs can give writing power.  With throttles open all the way, big bad bruce and his gang charge down the highway on their Harleys.  Bruce blasts along the highway at top speed.  Icy wind whacks into his face. He whacks it back, twice as hard.  He zooms around corners and shoots up the straight.  He pushes his bike to the max. from Big Bad Bruce by Dianne Bates ,[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object],[object Object]
Using a Thesaurus A thesaurus extend your word power. declared exclaimed questioned  replied repeated bellowed shouted responded whispered asked Don't Say "Said," Say

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Writing Narratives

  • 1. Features of Narrative Writing © J Munro 2007
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  • 3. Develop a Personal Voice when Writing VOICE shows your personality when writing. The writing has a sound different from everyone else's. It has feeling and emotion so that it does not sound boring. The reader should be able to tell if you are happy or sad. The writer should be writing from the heart and bring the topic to life for the reader. One day my mom took me to the circus.  I LOVE the circus.  There are always some very funny clowns.  My favorite clown there came up to me and told me he had a secret for me.  He got real close to me and I thought he was going to whisper in my ear when POW he squirted me in the face with his water flower.  I never laughed so much.  I had a great time at the circus and will remember it for the rest of my life. Funny
  • 4. It was the day for the big test.  I studied all week and knew I was ready.  I was still a little bit nervous, but knew once I started I would be fine.  The teacher asked us to get some books out to read when we were finished so we wouldn't bother the other kids if we finished early.  The test was a breeze.  When I was done I started to read my favorite book. Serious
  • 5. Yesterday when I was on my way to the grocery store I saw a very strange man.  He had on a brown trench coat, red hat and was carrying a purple umbrella.  I'm sure he was some kind of investigator.  As he began walking I noticed he was just peeking over the top of his coat and I could only see his eyes. He was very sneaky looking.   I'm sure he was watching somebody, I just wonder who! Mysterious
  • 6. As a baseball let me tell you I have some pretty frightening experiences.  Imagine being hit by a hard bat.  OUCH, I want to scream every time someone hits me. Then for the flight through the air.  You can't believe how scary that is.  I am always asking myself three questions. Will someone catch me?  Will I fly over the fence and land with a hard thud?  Or will I just go bouncing across the field? The next time you are frightened, stop a  minute and think about how I feel. That is the true meaning of frightened!   Frightening
  • 7. Look at the picture below and reading the short paragraph.  Choose the voice that you think is being used in each paragraph. Remember when writing with voice it can be:  Funny, Serious, Mysterious, Frightening Have you ever seen two Martians in a play before?  Well you should have been at the same show as I was.  I never laughed so hard in my life.  These two green creatures were trying to back to their land safely, but came across many strange people.  They never saw humans before.  They kept trying to act like us.  Well, that is where the fun begins.  You should go see the Martian's On Earth if you get a chance.  It is your chance to sit back and laugh!
  • 8. Halloween night was finally here.  I was very excited to trick or treating with my friends.  There is always one house that everyone is afraid to go to and this year we decided we would go.  We slowly crept up the steps and tap lightly at the door hoping nobody would hear us and we could get out of there quickly. Before we could turn around there she was.  There were bats flying around her head, a frog in one hand, a broom in the other hand and a black cat next to her leg. Before she could speak my friends and I let out a scream and ran all the way home.  That is one house we will NEVER go to again.
  • 9. The first day of school is always a tough one.  You are always waiting to see who is in your class, what your teacher will be like and how your day will run.  Usually everyone is very quiet trying to set a good example.  We all get out our books, sit in our seats nice and tall and do everything the teacher says with very little noise.  I bet this is the teachers favorite day of the year!
  • 10. I will never forget my 5th birthday.  My mom surprised me with a clown to entertain my friends and I.  This clown was very funny and had many tricks up his sleeve.  When his show was over he made everyone at my party a balloon animal.  This was a great day for me!
  • 11. Exercise: You and your friends were playing a ball game outside on the top quad. You know that you are not allowed to kick balls on the quad. When the ball was passed to you, you kicked it back. The ball didn’t go where you wanted it and you broke Mrs. Jones’ office window. Describe what happened to Mrs Jones, using a serouis voice, and then in a funny voice described to your friends what happened.
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  • 13. First - Person Point of View I walked home from school today with my friends. We stopped for ice cream.  I had vanilla. It's my favorite. When I got up this morning I brushed my   teeth. Then I got dressed and ate my breakfast.  Third - Person Point of View Ted plays on a baseball team.  He loves to play with his team.  He has a game next week.  His coach thinks he's a good baseball player.    The princess was locked in the tower.  She had no way to escape.  She hoped that a prince would rescue her .  Her wish came true.  He came and took her to his castle.
  • 14. Read each group of sentences.  Decide if it is written in first person or third person point of view. The hunter had a cottage in the woods.  He lived there all alone. I ride the bus to each every day. I like to sit with my friends. My friends and I went camping. I toasted marshmallows over the fire. Joey likes to go swimming.  Sometimes he asks his  friend Sam to go with him.  He brings his ball to play with. Frosty the snowman had a hat on his head.  He also had a pipe and a carrot nose.  He held a shovel in his hand.
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  • 17. Planning your Narrative Brainstorm your ideas. This does not need to take to long and can be added to.
  • 18. Plan the path your writing will take. This plan is in a flow-chart form.
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  • 20. Opening Paragraphs The opening paragraph of a narrative will often give us an introduction to the characters, the setting, or both and will often give us a hint about the plot. Another name for this is orientation . You orientate your readers, give them an idea, right from the start, that your text is going to be worth reading.
  • 21. Opening Sentences The Opening Sentence To write an opening sentence which will grab the reader’s attention. Stories can start using the following ways: Dialogue: “Hands in the air this is a stick up!” he hollered roughly. A statement: The school principal had to collect the boy from the roof. Problem: David didn’t know what to do: the school bully, Ted was expecting him to hand over five doallars and all he had was fifty cents. Action: Without a moments hesitation, Maude Drinkwater lifted the revolver and fired. Description of people: Mr Sherman looked ordinary for someone who had just solved one of the world’s most difficult maths problems. Description of place: The sky was the colour of dish water. Description of time: As the clock struct twelve it echoed around the hall.
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  • 27. Exercise 4: Opening Paragraphs Choose a title and opening sentence from the list below. Use the sentence beginnings to write an opening paragraph which will orientate a reader into your narrative.
  • 28. Plot A plot starts with an introduction to the narrative. A plot will include problems or crises and how these are solved, and the conclusion to the narrative. If it is a good plot, there will be situayions which happen throughout the narrative thaat will make you want to read on. What happens in a novel has been carefully planned by the author. Some authors use a flow chart to plan their work. Others might write a brief overview of events noting each crisis, climax or problem and how each will be resolved.
  • 29. Improve your Plot Who are your story’s main characters? What are their main needs?(motives) Who or what tries to stop or thwart them from achieving their needs? (conflict) Do the characters succeed or fail in achieving their goals? How do they succeed or fail? (resolution)
  • 30. Exercise 1: Plot Development The folowing extract from The Keeper is an example of a crisis in a plot.
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  • 32. This is how the plot of The Keeper might look in graph form. The plot may have many parts to it. It may have subplots within the main plot. Whether the plot is action-packed or slow and leisurely, a good plot will keep the reader interested. A crisis is a turning-point, a moment of danger or suspense. A climax is the highest point in a series of events. There is often a build-up to a big climax near the end of the narrative.
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  • 34. Characterisation A person’s appearance, their posture and ways of walking, their hobbies, the way in which they express their emotions, their secret wishes, fears, prejudices and religious beliefs are all pointers to their character. We develop character through the following: Dialogue what the characters say and how the say it Action what the characters do Reactions how the characters think and feel in different situations Relationships how the character interact with each other, and how others view them Crisis a turning point in the story for the character; the way in which the characters respond in a crisis revaels true character
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  • 36. Characters Narrative Characters may be people of animals. Although they are imaginary, the author may have modelled their character on people they know. A reader can usually identify with characters, either through a character’s personality, actions or experiences, or physical appearance. Characters in a book may be built up over several chapters with the reader getting an impression of their personality through actions, reactions and relationships to other characters.
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  • 43. Things to think about These settings all paint a picture for the reader. Think carefully about which style of scene setting appeals to you. Do you prefer to be given a clear description? Do you prefer imagery where the writer’s use of words lets you use your imagination? Do you prefer a character in the text to help establish the mood of the setting by talking about it?
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  • 48. Smooth Transitions One way an author can get the reader’s attention is by using pharases that we call “red flags.” red flags, such as all of a sudden or the next thing I knew , indicate a new twist in the plot. Red flags can replace predictiable words and phrases, like next and then. Read the sample sentences below. Create your own “Red Flag Menu” by filling in the blanks. Suddenly I manage to escape from the monster. Just then I manage to escape from the monster. I manage to escape from the monster. I manage to escape from the monster. I manage to escape from the monster. I manage to escape from the monster. I manage to escape from the monster. I manage to escape from the monster.
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  • 52. Improve Your Dialogue What is Dialogue? It's the conversation that takes place between characters in a story. You can tell more about your characters' thoughts and  feelings if you include dialogue in your stories.
  • 53. Let's add some dialogue to that story. Sharing a room with her sister wasn't always fun.  Kristi was tired of always having to clean up their room. "Ashley, you've left your clothes on the floor again!  I'm not picking them up for you this time," said Kristi.  "I'm sorry, Kristi, I don't mean to be a slob!" joked Ashley.  "I just don't notice the mess--really!  I guess it just doesn't bother me.“ "Well, it bothers me!  You know it does," said Kristi. "I'll try harder, I guess," sighed Ashley.  "But I can't promise anything.  Neatness just isn't my thing!" Let's look at a story without dialogue. Sharing a room with her sister wasn't always fun.  Kristi was tired of always cleaning up after her sister Ashley. Just because they shared a room, that doesn't mean they had to share the mess!  Ashley was always leaving dirty dishes on her desk, and there were always dirty clothes under the bed.  Kristi had tried to talk to Ashley about cleaning up the mess, but somehow talking didn't help.
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  • 55. Read the following story: Paul and his dad were planning their first fishing trip of the year.  Paul wasn't sure what to bring with him, so he asked his dad.  His dad told him to bring his pole.  His dad would bring everything else.  His dad also told him to dress warmly because it's always cold in the morning near the lake.  Paul told his dad he was excited about going and would have trouble sleeping. Rewrite the story adding dialogue. 
  • 56. Here's a sample of what your story might look like. Notice the quotation marks and commas.  Check your story to make sure you have the correct punctuation.           Paul and his dad were planning their first fishing trip of the year.         "What should I pack, Dad?" said Paul.  "I don't want to forget anything."    "Just bring your pole, Paul.  I've got everything else we'll need already in the car," said Dad.  "Mom's already packed us a big lunch.  We want to get an early start!"        "Should I bring a sweatshirt?" questioned Paul.        "Oh, it's always cool in the morning near the lake.  You'll need more than a sweatshirt.  You need to make sure you dress warm."        Paul headed up to bed.  "I don't think I'll be able to sleep, Dad.  I'm too excited!"
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  • 58. METAPHORS A metaphor is like a simile. That's because it is a comparison that is made between things, which is not always likely or obvious. We don’t use ‘like’ or ‘as’ in a metaphor. We often use metaphors without realising it. For instance, when we say that your parents 'bark a command ' at you, you are comparing them to a dog, and hence engaging in metaphor! Other Metaphors A heart of stone He has the heart of a lion You are the sun in my sky You are the light in my life She is my East and my West, my compass. You had better pull your socks up Love is a lemon - either bitter of sweet
  • 59. Create Metaphors Try to write three metaphors for each of the following examples: the sun an apple clouds cheese a cat the ocean fog anger LEARNING INTENTION: to understand that a metaphor is a word picture in which the writer replaces the thing to be described with another image. It makes a more direct and vivid comparison to a simile. Examples: The moon is a pearl from a necklace. The moon is a cold, cheesy pizza. The moon is earth’s halo
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  • 62. IMPACT Show Don’t Tell To write what is happening in the story without explicitly stating it. Telling sentence: Joe was old. Showing sentence: Joe creacked when he moved, his arthritic limbs bowed beneath the weight of his eighty years Below are some telling sentences which simply state facts. Transform them into showing sentences: 1. It was cold on the beach. 2. Dad was angry. 3. My friend is a great rugby player. 4. The house needed repairs. 5. The car braked suddenly.
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  • 65. Focus on the Facts We can add on sufficient information to help the reader understand better. Example A boat came to the island. What kind of boat was it? Who was aboard the boat? What were the feelings of the passengers about reching the island? When did the boat arrive? What was the purpose of the visit? Read the following sentences. What questions would you ask the writer to ensure that all the essential information was given. 1. I don’t like school. 2. My aunt is in hospital. 3. We like going out for dinner. Select one of these sentences. Rewrite them with sufficient information.
  • 66. Replace Overworked Words For my birthday I got lots of presents. It was a lovely day. We got off the train at Wellington. My sister got fifty dollars a week. In the war, lots of men got injured. Feeling annoyed, the teacher went out of the room. We had a nice holiday in Dunedin where we met many nice people. LEARNING INTENTION: To think of as many different ways as you can to express the same idea. Example: Mary is a good person. Mary is a lovely person. Mary is a wonderful person. Mary is a superb person. Mary is a delightful person.
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  • 68. Using a Thesaurus A thesaurus extend your word power. declared exclaimed questioned replied repeated bellowed shouted responded whispered asked Don't Say "Said," Say

Editor's Notes

  1. Resources Used Ideas to Teach Deeper Feature in Writing, Di Skilton, Literacy Adviser, CCE Year 8 English, ESA Publications (NZ) Ltd, 2001 www.Studyzone.org