Diction: Putting it Into Practice <ul><li>First, preview the following reading.  Then click through each slide, considerin...
Hospital feels like war zone Blood ran out slowly onto white sheets as Dr. Ron O’Gorman put his gloved finger into the hol...
It was shortly after 11 p.m. Thursday when the ambulance containing the badly wounded patient arrived at Ben Taub General ...
Practice: <ul><li>The following slides pull phrases and clauses from the reading and suggest alternate wordings. </li></ul...
Blood  ran  out slowly onto white sheets   oozed   seeped   trickled   exuded
Ron O’Gorman  put  his gloved finger   poked   shoved   jabbed   inserted
the man  cried  loudly, his   bawled   boo-hooed   screeched   wailed
continued to  move  his finger   wiggle   snake   worm   actuate
patient’s  out-of-control  trembling   uncontrollable   endless   spasmatic   nutszoid
doctors  had already been told  he was coming   contacted   informed   alerted   forewarned
had to physically  remove  the man off a spiked fence   pry   pluck   wrench   extricate
after he had  stuck  himself   impaled   harpooned   shish-kabobbed   perforated
according to  a medical technician.   said   exclaimed   snickered   remarked
What next? <ul><li>Now that you’ve completed your rewrite of the reading, I’d like to read it.  In fact, I’d love to hear ...
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Diction practice show

  1. 1. Diction: Putting it Into Practice <ul><li>First, preview the following reading. Then click through each slide, considering the effect that would be achieved from each suggested change of wording. </li></ul><ul><li>This activity can be individual, or you can have a classmate or friend go through the presentation with you. Whether on your own or with a friend, consider each option and decide the best rewording for the whole composition. </li></ul>
  2. 2. Hospital feels like war zone Blood ran out slowly onto white sheets as Dr. Ron O’Gorman put his gloved finger into the hole in the man’s chest to determine if a lung had been punctured. “Please stop…no more!” the man cried loudly, his face contorted with pain. “Oh my God, it hurts.” The doctor, deadpan, didn’t stop and continued to move his finger around inside the wound on the right side of the chest. Although the man kept yelling and trying to kick his legs, the patient’s out-of-control trembling had stopped.
  3. 3. It was shortly after 11 p.m. Thursday when the ambulance containing the badly wounded patient arrived at Ben Taub General Hospital, but doctors had already been told he was coming. Paramedics reported they had to physically remove the man off a spiked fence at a downtown hotel after he had stuck himself trying to climb over the barrier. “ He was just hanging there,” according to a medical technician.
  4. 4. Practice: <ul><li>The following slides pull phrases and clauses from the reading and suggest alternate wordings. </li></ul><ul><li>In the Diction Practice document file you have opened on your desktop, make changes to the wording of highlighted sections, choosing from the options suggested. </li></ul>
  5. 5. Blood ran out slowly onto white sheets  oozed  seeped  trickled  exuded
  6. 6. Ron O’Gorman put his gloved finger  poked  shoved  jabbed  inserted
  7. 7. the man cried loudly, his  bawled  boo-hooed  screeched  wailed
  8. 8. continued to move his finger  wiggle  snake  worm  actuate
  9. 9. patient’s out-of-control trembling  uncontrollable  endless  spasmatic  nutszoid
  10. 10. doctors had already been told he was coming  contacted  informed  alerted  forewarned
  11. 11. had to physically remove the man off a spiked fence  pry  pluck  wrench  extricate
  12. 12. after he had stuck himself  impaled  harpooned  shish-kabobbed  perforated
  13. 13. according to a medical technician.  said  exclaimed  snickered  remarked
  14. 14. What next? <ul><li>Now that you’ve completed your rewrite of the reading, I’d like to read it. In fact, I’d love to hear it! </li></ul><ul><li>You can either save the changed document or record a reading of your rewrite. Send either one to me by Vista email, and I’ll reply with feedback. </li></ul><ul><li>Remember that you can follow this same process with your own writings and make them sound just as you would like. The decisions are yours to make. </li></ul>

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