ResolutionSHOW! Reinforce what is being said about character’s growth by showing it in scene, description, dialogue…
Observational Writing and Sensory Description
S a H l O w W a y D s O N T ’ ETelling = facts or reflection T LShowing = meaning, Ldescription, development
How do you “show” your audience an essay?
Remember your five senses?
ACTIVE, VIBRANT word choiceEnergized
Figurative languageSimiles…“…Like a patient etherized upon a table.”Metaphor… Sylvia Plath uses a cut on her finger to represent soldiers going to war.
Using Sensory Language to CreatePositive & Negative Images/Feelings
In-Class ActivityCreate a POSITIVE start to Keith’s day. First, he eats breakfast. Then, he goes to the store, where he runs into a woman he knows; they talk and then he returns homeFlesh out the details of Keith’s adventure/misadventure using sensory detail, description
In-Class Activity…again…Take Keith’s good day and ruin it, using description that evokes negative feelings or images.
Description createsmood, or atmosphere, inan essay
How do you expand the atmosphere of your essay?
Examples of atmosphereFrom The Haunting of Hill House, by Shirley Jackson No live organism can continue for long to exist sanely under conditions of absolute reality; even larks and katydids are supposed, by some, to dream. Hill House, not sane, stood by itself against its hills, holding darkness within; it had stood so for eighty years and might stand for eighty more. Within, walls continued upright, bricks met neatly, floors were firm, and doors were sensibly shut; silence lay steadily against the wood and stone of Hill House, and what ever waked there, walked alone.
In-Class ActivityYour main character arrives at a party, butfinds the atmosphere in the room sohorrendous that he/she decides to leave.What is said? Why is he/she uncomfortable?What is going on in the room? Create theatmosphere for this party.
Dialogue MUST…Move plot alongDevelop charactersSet atmosphere or moodBe concise and efficient
Strong dialogue must have tensionEvery word should count and have meaning
In-class ActivityWrite dialogue between you and the personwho taught you to drive during your firstdriving lesson behind the wheel.
Subtexthttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W4fvYCFaa9 I (Jurassic Park example)
In-Class ActivityWrite dialogue between a couple who isfighting over one of the partner’s never doingthe dishes. The subtext is one partnersuspects the other of cheating.
Writing Reflection Writing about what you are writing, about the story
Reflection acts as a narrative voice to guide your audience……an interpreter that tells not only whathappened, but why it happened and what itmeans.
Reflections answers the question, Why? Something the narrator can often not answer in the heat of action
Metaphors as reflection“not the sharpest knife in the block…” Others?
What mightthis onion bea metaphorfor?
In-Class Activity Think of three episodes in your life. What recurs in those three stages? It could be a hair style, a song, a person, a piece of jewelry, a car anything. Write just a few sentences about why this item was present in your life during those three stages and what role it played.This is how metaphors are found.