ISTE 2011 - Using Google Docs to Improve Student Writing

Using Google Docs to Improve Student Wri7ng ISTE 2011

First... My lenses ‐ I’m “home‐grown” in a 1:1 program at SLA‐ I don’t love gadgets‐ As an English teacher, I DO love teaching wri7ng

Now... where are you  coming from?  AND What skills do you want your students to  gain from wri7ng?

What we* wanted *The English teachers at SLA, but also students, based on their feedback‐ Independent thesis development‐ Formal analy7cal wri7ng‐ Metacogni7on about the wri7ng process

The Original AssignmentA 2Fer is a 2‐page analy0cal paper on any topic you choose. There are four basic guidelines that must be followed:1. The 2fer has a thesis statement that is unique, insighRul, and debatable. It does not re‐state a commonly held belief or choose sides in a worn‐out debate ‐‐ it reﬂects an observa0on and conclusion you have come to on your own. 2. The 2fer uses at least two outside sources to support your thesis, and cites them correctly. 3. The 2fer never uses the ﬁrst or second person (“I” or “you.”) 4. The 2fer proves its thesis statement through the quality of analysis and factual support, not raw force of opinion. 

The year‐long plan 11th graders write 2Fers (almost)  every two weeks for the en0re year.  By the end of the year, they have  come to both master and appreciate  (and maybe even love) the process  of formal analy0cal wri0ng.  HOORAY!

The Original Rubric (Categories and wording stolen from  Pennsylvania standardized tests)

The Original Sign‐Oﬀ Sheet (In response to common errors and oversights) (This is a lie. I required  one all the ?me.)

Our HopesStudents would...Build meaningful peer‐edi7ng rela7onships with each otherAbsorb feedback in each category and work to improve in all of themSee the assignment as a year‐long, individualized process 

The RealityOBen ?mes, students would instead...Get superﬁcial edi7ng, and some7mes even ignore the edits when revisingLook only at the ﬁnal grade on each 2Fer, then forget about it / lose the paperSee the assignment as a year‐long pain in the bu]

First Semester: Google Docs Begins

One Document, All Year

Space for dra_s and ﬁnal... ...accompanied by in‐class  edi7ng 7me.

Early week: Thesis Brainstorming + Feedback

Brainstorming threads in Moodle... (Could be hosted elsewhere, or on paper!)

More teacher feedback at ﬁrst...

...A freer ﬂow of ideas later

More student‐based feedback too.

Mid‐week: Research, Thesis  Revision, Mini‐Lessons... Class.

Fridays: Peer Edi7ng!

Peer Edi7ng Protocol “A complete draN (wriOen up to the conclusion, with your minimum two outside sources cited at the end of the paper) is due by the beginning of class on Friday.”Once students were in class, they immediately paired up with another student. Their ﬁrst responsibility was to the peer they were edi0ng, not their own paper.

Students Comment on Dra_... student student student student student

...Teacher Comments on Final. student

The second week: Grading and Feedback

The Rubric Points earned  doesn’t get its own  box, is typed in at  the end of the  wri6en  commentaryNo “Total Grade” sec?on at the bo6om (which you  can’t see in this slide)

This essay was for a “Media Cri?cism” 2Fer assignment. It analyzed  a Garnier Fruc?s  shampoo commercial. The “Content and  Development”  comment refers to a quote that I also wrote a s?cky‐note for in the  essay text.

Built‐in reﬂec7on space... ...which leads right into the  next assignment.

Grammar, re‐wri7ng, research... ...there were a lot of  possibili7es. 

A place to celebrate success... Some?mes I typed in  focus areas for them...  helpful, or controlling? ...and also set goals for the  next essay. 

Good Moments

Success!Students have...Stopped thinking about page length, and started thinking about adequate supportShi_ed their focus from overall grade to the feedback (and grade) for each categoryGo]en more feedback and edits from peers, and recognized pa]erns and issues faster

Student X Student X Student X student student student Excellent.

Student X Student X Student X student student student Excellent. Essays that do not  meet the four basic  requirements get  “bounced back” to  the author for  revision.

Before Google Docs, if I wanted to  “bounce back” a paper, I had to track down the student and make  sure I had the paper in hand. Now I know at a glance  who needs more work,  and I e‐mail them right  away.

“OMG! I’m making the mistake while I write about it!”

Second Semester: Upgrades

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After a while these people were shamefully characterized as refugees @="."=ABC!DA!EFGF*3,-.!%&++#%(!EF?!%,(7(,&-!5&+!:&(2!(2#!,-=(#D(!%,(7(,&-!7-6!(2#!4&+;3!%,(#6!97.#0 $ 2#%+0"3.$(-"!/-,")"-%8$+",/-",(").$&@$)"-.$+"-.$"1,#&0K)"<,/-."*%+"6%+"),"5%+<"5,#$"7,)-@$" Q02/4!$4.)5+.<4)!)*5!"01/4!$4.)5+.<4)!/4+2+!)2+!)701/!)/!.+)(/!KR!/0!SR!201/+(9!&.(0!/4+2+! because of their race as well as their social class. Classifying these thousands of people as! ! 5,#%&)"%+0"@%&/$); )2+!201/+(!/4)/!/)=+!801!;20>!/4+!L+-0*0>-)..8!5()5:)*/)6+5!)2+)(!/0!/4+!7+//+2! refugees made the poverty line so much higher for middle class citizens.G0!12#!@5#+!(:#$1**$%&$!)#*%$"#$*+"(4$;#*"($<=>?$"#$=-"1/?@$C-3(#76!&5!4+,(,-.!HC!(2,-;! Hathout, Samer. "Challenges Facing American Muslim Women."!"#$%&()&*(+$,. ,"+-!$00),!("$0!&$-$4 "" *+647024005(9(27(000I!J*3(!4+,(#!427(!)&*!(2,-;>!!C5!)&*!K*&(#!7!3&*+%#!42#+#!(2#!39#7;#+!37)3!HCI!&+!H)&*8I! Muslim Women Lawyers for Human Rights, 7/9/ 1995 . Web. 7 Oct 2010. <http:// ! H,#8)"L-$0M !!!!!!!! "#$%&!(!/4+!>)*!2+)(0*!$4.)5+.<4)*(!)2+!)7.+!/0!/2):+.!/0!A1(/!)701/!)*834+2+!*!/4+! Another example to show how America bases its present economy on its past errors is(27(L3!5,-#0 %86!A=BIC!:=6D!78B=>:8!?;5@!K8;5:6D!:==C!;5C!<;C!6F6B@C;@!<>7!A6!O>D7!C=5P7! " -/8!3/4*!)!>)//+2!0;!>*1/+(9!&./40164!/4+!-1(/0>+2(!)2+!5(<.+)(+5!3/4!/4+!(+2:-+!/4+8! the heightened security on airlines after the terrorist attacks September 11, 2001. 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"Lets Get Smart Before Jay Leno Flies Into Town ." -./0##&123()4 27/08/ =>))?022@&)A)&9BA@>&*,*)2&C*D4,?>?E("%$#.6$!"#+$"!$";)()"(/$?<&,6!(&9,%3!42#+#!)&*+!9#+3&-7$!5##$,-.3!6&,-7(#!(2#!979#+8!&+! 786?D6IF6D!95!A;BDL!%89D!5=7!=5I@!6JJ6K7D!786!K=>57B96D!A8=!;K7>;II@!;B6!95F=IF6C!95!786!A;B!<>7! (><.8!7+-)1(+!"#$%&!(!/4+!0*.8!/2)*(/!(+2:-+!*!$4.)5+.<4)!)*5!3/401/!/!<+0<.+!301.5!7+! Norman Shanks stated that these changes "have raised the standard of security of all airports in 2003: 1. Web. 8 Oct 2010. <http://www.mcgillreport.org/ignorant_america.htm>. F*G+)H7*&CI:JB9C*IK9FBJF*G+F@&CI%LMNAC&96OJB9F*IH*+JAB*-)I:P,+#$)!2#7<,$)!&-!,-6,<,6*7$!#D9#+,#-%#3!&+!:#$,#53!N(2#!#D,3(#-%#!&5!7-!75(#+$,5#8!(2#!-7(*+#!&5!$&<#8! ;ID=!K=>57B96D!A8=!8;F6!K6B7;95!796D!=B!;JJ9I9;79=5D!A978!786?L!7!9D!6HE6K76C!78;7!9J!7A=!K=>57B96D! ;02-+5!/0!25+!>02+!7=+(?!52:+!>02+!-)2(!)*5!>0(/!<+0<.+!301.5!4):+!/0!2+(02/!/0!3).=*6! the United States, which was long overdue." 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Americans 40#/)6.1/3)2.)5#)%/)20#)4$./8)1-#)20#)#?&1-#>)@A)-4)%2)./)2#+#,%-%./B()C/#).6)20#)5%88#-2)6.$"-) ,(&+-$,$"+-4/65&-5/2,.,0)7/$/ "#$%!&()*!+%),-. ! !(3$%!)//$6"$(.22*8$4%$,"1$!($-(.*+%$+/"0.//3$!(.!$.1$01".6$-.%!6$9$0/)=$!(.!$.-($.*6$ .6)/#82%,#)%/6+1#/&#)%/)20#)"#3%)&."#-)6$.")20#),#$9)7.71+$),%3#.)8"#)-#$%#-)!"#$%&()*+& -)%(")00&%#/&2,$8 believe that every Muslim is, once was, or is going to be an extremist at point or another +/01-/!-2/!3)(4!(/5)-6/!%/6/70!4#$!2/)%!)8#$-!-2/!9#$-2/)0-/%(!:/((04*6)()! ! =13$!)&$!(.!$!(3$6"$(.22*$!($"2*$!($3%$",$*5&1"5%$(5&.*%$!"$!//$!(&$!(.!$3"5$ ,-+./ in their lifetime. 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Peer Edi7ng improvements... An exit slip showed me  who needed some  guidance during the  next peer edit session.

Get out of the way. Peer Edi7ng improvements... An exit slip showed me  who needed some  guidance during the  next peer edit session.

The Reﬂec7ve 2FerYour task this week is to write a 2Fer analyzing... your own 2Fer wri0ng! The goal is to ﬁgure out HOW you can improve your wri0ng, so your thesis statement should analyze a weakness in your composi0on.Consider zooming in on one or two of the following focus areas: Thesis/Focus, Content/Development, Organiza7on, Style, and Conven7ons.For your outside sources, you will quote: your OWN work, comments by Ms. Pahomov and peer editors, and your follow up assignments.

Metacogni7on!“I’d have to say, hands down, my biggestproblem is over-usage of words and phrases...I actually want to repeat the word “over-usage”right now, but there would be no sense intalking negatively about something that I’d beconsciously doing.”

Natural Process“As the year went on... I ended up writingabout anything that came into my head at thetime. I immediately understood how to formanalyses and connections with the informationI found. The flow felt natural and it worked outwithout me struggling to piece togethermismatched facts.”

End‐of‐year Feedback“Unfortunately, I have to say I benefited more from2fers than anything else this year. They may havebeen a pain but they got me to think about how Iwrite and allowed me to greatly improve my style.”“I used to hate editing papers, but the practice thatweve been doing since the beginning of the yearhelped me find... mistakes that I wouldnt havebeen able to catch before.”

My ongoing ques7ons:How public should these Wri7ng Docs be? Can we go beyond “collabora7ve” to “networked?”What’s the right balance between “tradi7onal” essay wri7ng and less‐formal online wri7ng? How could we shi_ to student‐based assessment? How “teacher‐free” can this get?

Now it’s your turn.Step 1: Steal the Template:h]p://7nyurl.com/Wri7ngTemplateStep 2: Tinker/Hack/Mod/Destroy/Rebuild template at will, so it serves YOUR needsStep 3: Post any comments, sugges7ons, and re‐made templates on this google spreadsheet:h]p://7nyurl.com/Wri7ngDocMods

Thanks for your par7cipa7on!The one template:h]p://7nyurl.com/Wri7ngTemplateThe many ideas of the crowd:h]p://7nyurl.com/Wri7ngDocModsPhoto CreditsSlides 9 + 10: http://www.ﬂickr.com/photos/idiolector/19139854/sizes/o/in/photostream/All other slides: http://www.ﬂickr.com/photos/christopherl/Contact me: Lpahomov at scienceleadership dot orgI’m on Twi]er (some7mes!): @LpahomovThese slides and more at: Slideshare.net/Lpahomov

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