Persuasive Essay Peer Revision

Content
Opposition/Rebuttal (First two body paragraphs)
Highlight (pink) the two opposing arguments
Do they thoroughly explain why these reasons, given by the opponent , are not adequate?
Reason to support View (3 rd body paragraph)
Highlight the Reason Yellow
Is the reason a compelling one?
Do they support the reasons with explanations, facts, examples, details

Organization
Is paper organized in way that makes sense?
They Say/ I Say arguments in first two body paragraphs
Third paragraph gives strongest reason to support position
Transition words and phrases used to glue together ideas
Box transition words/phrases used at beginning of all body paragraphs.
Box transition words/phrases used within the paragraph.

Sentence Variety
Do they use a variety of sentences?
Look at sentence beginnings
Look at types of sentences
Are they writing mature sentences?
Participial phrases, infinitives, absolutes
Joining sentences in variety of ways (subordinators and coordinators)
Give them feedback for making changes!

Trash Words
Circle trash words:
A lot, stuff, things, something, anything, everything, you
I think, I feel, I believe, in my opinion

Muscle Verbs
Circle the “be” verbs
am, is, are, was, were, be, being, been
Can you replace any of these with a muscle verb?
Original Sentence : If we extend school, we would be less stressed.
Revised Sentence : Extending school would free students from the prison of stress that shackles them.

Look at Introduction
Start with a catchy Attention-Getter ?
Underline Thesis:
Does it Spell out the argument without listing three reasons?
Is the writer’s position on the topic clear?

Look at Conclusion
Does it sum up argument without repeating the exact same words?
Does it end in a witty way, such as…
Tying with the attention-getter
Offering a solution
Making a recommendation

Overall
Have they presented a convincing argument ?

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