How can we show the difference between the past and the present.
We plan to show the past in grainy/ sepia video effect , ken loach style.
What happens to his wife?
She Cheats on our main character, and writes a letter of confession. She still wants him back but he kills her
How are we going to show voice over video.
It will be narration over the flash backs , when he starts talking about her letter it will switch form his voice to her and then back to his as we return to the present.
The blood Sliding down her arm makes it look she has killed herself
We plan to change the shot so I doesn’t look like a suicide.
It might run over 5 mins
May be due to the way we explained our narrative , it seemed this way but if it looks like it might run over 5 mins we will cut down a killing.
Nothing going on in the middle , which will lead to a distracted and bored audience. Something is missing it seems that the flashbacks will not be enough.
He wont be revealed as the killer until the end , so it will keep our audience interested and we will also edit it in a montage style so it keeps our audience asking questions, which will be answered at the end.
Not enough character motivation. Why is he confessing
Because he has now found God and he is a different person from who he once was.
Why would his sister in law listen to him after he had told her , he killed her sister?
She wouldn’t , it isn’t a realistic situation , so we removed her character and changed it to a priest instead, who we will show his relationship with the killer through flashback, the priest will now stay as he wouldn’t know that he is going to confess to his own crimes, only revealing who he really is at the end.
We want to see more of his back story and more of what drove him to religion
We plan to show more of his life after the killings and a clear incident of what drove him to religion we have done a survey to find a good way to display his ever changing encounter.