Advice from site: dogbertcarroll 2004-11-15 . chapter 1 Couple of minor problems. They need the blood of a Daywalker to complete the ritual. So what were they doing? You also glossed over all the interesting parts. Just the scene of Faith convincing Blade to open up is worth a chapter itself.
Advice from site: movieexpert1978 2011-05-02 . chapter 3 Interesting. Slow down with the characters. Once second sabrina is glaring and cursing at Lucian the next she's crying in his arms. Give the characters more time to develope that or some Explination better be coming up soon becuasei am very curious. Give some more detail. The dialogue is interesting as well. Good luck with the next chapter.