Tell them a story worth remembering... <ul><li>Writing in the yearbook </li></ul><ul><li>for today,  </li></ul><ul><li>for...
No one  reads our copy.
I mean, who  likes  all those words?
Our stories are so  boring .
We’d rather have pictures than that boring  stuff .
No one  reads our copy. Our stories are so  boring . I mean, who  likes  all those words? We’d rather have pictures than t...
Art students do pottery, drawing and painting. “ I took art because I like to draw,” art student Alexis Hernandez revealed...
Art students do pottery, drawing and painting. “ I took art because I like to draw,” art student Alexis Hernandez revealed...
Alexis Hernandez tucked the unruly wisp of hair back into place with her mud-caked hands. She had been battling with her b...
Do you see Alexis at the pottery wheel?
Do you see the hair falling in her eyes?
Do you see her hands?
Do you hear her voice?
Do you see her feet?
So, maybe they like stories, just not boring ones.
Every drafting table in the architectural/engineering graphics classroom was filled. Heads were bent over their work. The ...
Every drafting table in the architectural/engineering graphics classroom was filled. Heads were bent over their work. The ...
Every drafting table in the architectural/engineering graphics classroom was filled. Heads were bent over their work. The ...
Every drafting table in the architectural/engineering graphics classroom was filled. Heads were bent over their work. The ...
“ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.”
“ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.” Da...
“ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.” Da...
“ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.” Da...
“ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.” Da...
“ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.” Da...
“ The best part about finishing,” Daron said. “is being able to look back all that detail and know your time was well spent.
“ The best part about finishing,” Daron said. “is being able to look back all that detail and know your time was well spen...
“ The best part about finishing,” Daron said. “is being able to look back all that detail and know your time was well spen...
It’s time to people watch.
To watch. To look. To see. To hear. Take everything in. The details. The words. The interaction.
It’s time to people watch. Just like going to the mall. Observe .
Body motion:  gestures, facial expressions, eye movements, posture Observe .
Body motion:  gestures, facial expressions, eye movements, posture Example As the judges took The Blain Cleveland Mudsling...
Paralanguage:  voice qualities, speech habits, inflection, volume, tone, laughing.  Not what is said, but how it is said. ...
Paralanguage:  voice qualities, speech habits, inflection, volume, tone, laughing.  Not what is said, but how it is said. ...
Space:  perception of physical space, how people interact with each other. (Seinfeld’s Close Talker episode) Observe .
Space:  perception of physical space, how people interact with each other. (Seinfeld’s Close Talker episode) Example She r...
Objects:  things we surround ourselves with such as jewelry, notebooks, backpacks, eyeglasses -- signs of wealth, poverty,...
Objects:  things we surround ourselves with such as jewelry, notebooks, backpacks, eyeglasses -- signs of wealth, poverty,...
Touch:  Handshakes, embraces, pats on the back, punches, taps Observe .
Touch:  Handshakes, embraces, pats on the back, punches, taps Example With a strong push in the back, the girls fell into ...
Time:  The way people use time may speak volumes. Observe .
Time:  The way people use time may speak volumes. Example Walking up the steps from the table in the cafeteria, sophomore ...
Every drafting table in the architectural/engineering graphics classroom was filled. Heads were bent over their work. The ...
“ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.” Da...
“ The best part about finishing,” Daron said. “is being able to look back all that detail and know your time was well spen...
Show, don’t tell .
Listen to my buddy, Bruce. Show, don’t tell .
Listen to my buddy, Bruce. I had a friend was a big baseball player back in high school. He could throw that speed ball by...
Listen to my buddy, Bruce. I had a friend was a big baseball player back in high school. He could throw that speed ball by...
Remember
Avoid jumping to conclusions about nonverbals. Report what you see. Don’t interpret. Remember
Avoid jumping to conclusions about nonverbals. Report what you see. Don’t interpret. Be discriminating. Too much descripti...
Avoid jumping to conclusions about nonverbals. Report what you see. Don’t interpret. Be discriminating. Too much descripti...
Lori Oglesbee McKinney High School McKinney, Texas [email_address] [email_address] http://www.homepage.mac.com/lao4 Quickt...
 
 
Types of Stories <ul><li>Snapshot of a moment </li></ul><ul><li>Observation </li></ul><ul><li>Personality profile </li></u...
<ul><li>Meaningful quotes. </li></ul><ul><li>Dialog. </li></ul><ul><li>Sensory descriptions. </li></ul><ul><li>Strong verb...
<ul><li>Mining your notes. The message you want when it’s all done. </li></ul>
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  1. 1. Tell them a story worth remembering... <ul><li>Writing in the yearbook </li></ul><ul><li>for today, </li></ul><ul><li>for next summer, </li></ul><ul><li>for 20 years from now </li></ul>
  2. 2. No one reads our copy.
  3. 3. I mean, who likes all those words?
  4. 4. Our stories are so boring .
  5. 5. We’d rather have pictures than that boring stuff .
  6. 6. No one reads our copy. Our stories are so boring . I mean, who likes all those words? We’d rather have pictures than that boring stuff .
  7. 7. Art students do pottery, drawing and painting. “ I took art because I like to draw,” art student Alexis Hernandez revealed. Some students think art is fun. “ I think art is fun,” Alexis added.
  8. 8. Art students do pottery, drawing and painting. “ I took art because I like to draw,” art student Alexis Hernandez revealed. Some students think art is fun. “ I think art is fun,” Alexis added. Why isn’t this a story?
  9. 9. Alexis Hernandez tucked the unruly wisp of hair back into place with her mud-caked hands. She had been battling with her bangs for the last 30 minutes as she her bowl took shape on the pottery wheel. “ Anybody got like a clippie?” Alexis said to no one in particular in her Art I class third period. Her feet kept the wheel in a steady rotation with alternating tapping as the bowl became rounder and rounder. “ My grandmama will love this bowl,” Alexis said. “It has to be like absolutely awesome.”
  10. 10. Do you see Alexis at the pottery wheel?
  11. 11. Do you see the hair falling in her eyes?
  12. 12. Do you see her hands?
  13. 13. Do you hear her voice?
  14. 14. Do you see her feet?
  15. 15. So, maybe they like stories, just not boring ones.
  16. 16. Every drafting table in the architectural/engineering graphics classroom was filled. Heads were bent over their work. The earlier laid back atmosphere had dispersed as each student concentrated on the paper before them.
  17. 17. Every drafting table in the architectural/engineering graphics classroom was filled. Heads were bent over their work. The earlier laid back atmosphere had dispersed as each student concentrated on the paper before them. Senior Daron Hook swung the movable protractor and lined up the angle just so. He took his 2H drafting pencil and lightly traced a line. Frowning at the seemingly straight line, he erased it. Then he grabbed a brush to wipe away the bits of rubber left on his paper.
  18. 18. Every drafting table in the architectural/engineering graphics classroom was filled. Heads were bent over their work. The earlier laid back atmosphere had dispersed as each student concentrated on the paper before them. Senior Daron Hook swung the movable protractor and lined up the angle just so. He took his 2H drafting pencil and lightly traced a line. Frowning at the seemingly straight line, he erased it. Then he grabbed a brush to wipe away the bits of rubber left on his paper. “ We’ve been drawing this house all month,” Daron said. “It’s a basic floor plan, and it doesn’t look like much, but it’s taken a lot of effort.”
  19. 19. Every drafting table in the architectural/engineering graphics classroom was filled. Heads were bent over their work. The earlier laid back atmosphere had dispersed as each student concentrated on the paper before them. Senior Daron Hook swung the movable protractor and lined up the angle just so. He took his 2H drafting pencil and lightly traced a line. Frowning at the seemingly straight line, he erased it. Then he grabbed a brush to wipe away the bits of rubber left on his paper. “ We’ve been drawing this house all month.” Daron said. “It’s a basic floor plan, and it doesn’t look like much, but it’s taken a lot of effort.” He aligned a three-sided rule and tried again. This time the line came out straighter, and he sighed in relief.”
  20. 20. “ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.”
  21. 21. “ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.” Daron used the drafting machine to help him add another room to his floor plan. He carefully started writing on the page.
  22. 22. “ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.” Daron used the drafting machine to help him add another room to his floor plan. He carefully started writing on the page. “ We had to practice lettering a lot,” Daron aid. “Drafting has only way to write a letter, so e all need to learn how to do it right. On the first day of school we wrote an entire page of alphabets.”
  23. 23. “ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.” Daron used the drafting machine to help him add another room to his floor plan. He carefully started writing on the page. “ We had to practice lettering a lot,” Daron aid. “Drafting has only way to write a letter, so e all need to learn how to do it right. On the first day of school we wrote an entire page of alphabets.” His floor plan was nearly complete.
  24. 24. “ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.” Daron used the drafting machine to help him add another room to his floor plan. He carefully started writing on the page. “ We had to practice lettering a lot,” Daron aid. “Drafting has only way to write a letter, so e all need to learn how to do it right. On the first day of school we wrote an entire page of alphabets.” His floor plan was nearly complete. “ Our hands hurt so much when we get to the end of our floor plans. We draw all class, but in the end it’s worth it.”
  25. 25. “ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.” Daron used the drafting machine to help him add another room to his floor plan. He carefully started writing on the page. “ We had to practice lettering a lot,” Daron aid. “Drafting has only way to write a letter, so e all need to learn how to do it right. On the first day of school we wrote an entire page of alphabets.” His floor plan was nearly complete. “ Our hands hurt so much when we get to the end of our floor plans. We draw all class, but in the end it’s worth it.” With moments to spend before the bell rang to dismiss them, Daron extracted the paper from its taped position on the page and took it to Mr. Keeton to turn in.
  26. 26. “ The best part about finishing,” Daron said. “is being able to look back all that detail and know your time was well spent.
  27. 27. “ The best part about finishing,” Daron said. “is being able to look back all that detail and know your time was well spent. Laura Shaheen
  28. 28. “ The best part about finishing,” Daron said. “is being able to look back all that detail and know your time was well spent. Laura Shaheen sophomore
  29. 29. It’s time to people watch.
  30. 30. To watch. To look. To see. To hear. Take everything in. The details. The words. The interaction.
  31. 31. It’s time to people watch. Just like going to the mall. Observe .
  32. 32. Body motion: gestures, facial expressions, eye movements, posture Observe .
  33. 33. Body motion: gestures, facial expressions, eye movements, posture Example As the judges took The Blain Cleveland Mudslingers of 1884 to the stage, senior Amanda Roberts’ eyes searched the crowd for approval. Megan Stene Observe .
  34. 34. Paralanguage: voice qualities, speech habits, inflection, volume, tone, laughing. Not what is said, but how it is said. Observe .
  35. 35. Paralanguage: voice qualities, speech habits, inflection, volume, tone, laughing. Not what is said, but how it is said. Example Applause roared through the cafeteria at the final note. Megan Stene Observe .
  36. 36. Space: perception of physical space, how people interact with each other. (Seinfeld’s Close Talker episode) Observe .
  37. 37. Space: perception of physical space, how people interact with each other. (Seinfeld’s Close Talker episode) Example She refused to conform to the slow shuffle of the other students walking in the hallway. Caraline Trotter Observe .
  38. 38. Objects: things we surround ourselves with such as jewelry, notebooks, backpacks, eyeglasses -- signs of wealth, poverty, power, age... Observe .
  39. 39. Objects: things we surround ourselves with such as jewelry, notebooks, backpacks, eyeglasses -- signs of wealth, poverty, power, age... Example Gathering her notes and flashcards with a satisfied expression, Jenelle stood. Laura Shaheen Observe .
  40. 40. Touch: Handshakes, embraces, pats on the back, punches, taps Observe .
  41. 41. Touch: Handshakes, embraces, pats on the back, punches, taps Example With a strong push in the back, the girls fell into the pool with the big sisters chanting “Welcome to varsity.” Meredith Mahoney Observe .
  42. 42. Time: The way people use time may speak volumes. Observe .
  43. 43. Time: The way people use time may speak volumes. Example Walking up the steps from the table in the cafeteria, sophomore Lindsay Davenport gasped as she came to abrupt halt. Danielle Brown Observe .
  44. 44. Every drafting table in the architectural/engineering graphics classroom was filled. Heads were bent over their work. The earlier laid back atmosphere had dispersed as each student concentrated on the paper before them. Senior Daron Hook swung the movable protractor and lined up the angle just so. He took his 2H drafting pencil and lightly traced a line. Frowning at the seemingly straight line, he erased it. Then he grabbed a brush to wipe away the bits of rubber left on his paper. “ We’ve been drawing this house all month.” Daron said. “It’s a basic floor plan, and it doesn’t look like much, but it’s taken a lot of effort.” He aligned a three-sided rule and tried again. This time the line came out straighter, and he sighed in relief.”
  45. 45. “ It’s hard having to be so perfect. If you overdraw even say like a millionth of a centimeter, Mr. Keeton counts off.” Daron used the drafting machine to help him add another room to his floor plan. He carefully started writing on the page. “ We had to practice lettering a lot,” Daron aid. “Drafting has only way to write a letter, so e all need to learn how to do it right. On the first day of school we wrote an entire page of alphabets.” His floor plan was nearly complete. “ Our hands hurt so much when we get to the end of our floor plans. We draw all class, but in the end it’s worth it.” With moments to spend before the bell rang to dismiss them, Daron extracted the paper from its taped position on the page and took it to Mr. Keeton to turn in.
  46. 46. “ The best part about finishing,” Daron said. “is being able to look back all that detail and know your time was well spent. Laura Shaheen sophomore
  47. 47. Show, don’t tell .
  48. 48. Listen to my buddy, Bruce. Show, don’t tell .
  49. 49. Listen to my buddy, Bruce. I had a friend was a big baseball player back in high school. He could throw that speed ball by you, make you look like a fool, boy. Saw him the other night at this roadside bar. I was walking in. He was walking out. We went back inside sat down had a few drinks But all he kept talking about…. Glory days Well they pass you by. Glory days In the wonder of a young girls’ eyes. Glory days Show, don’t tell . Well there’s a girl that lives up the block. Back in school, she could turn all the boys’ heads. Sometimes on a Friday, I stop by and have a few drinks after she put her kids to bed. Her husband Bobby, well, they split up, I guess it’s two years gone by now. We just sit around and talk about the old times. She says when she feels like crying she starts laughing thinking about
  50. 50. Listen to my buddy, Bruce. I had a friend was a big baseball player back in high school. He could throw that speed ball by you, make you look like a fool, boy. Saw him the other night at this roadside bar. I was walking in. He was walking out. We went back inside sat down had a few drinks But all he kept talking about…. Glory days Well they pass you by. Glory days In the wonder of a young girls’ eyes. Glory days Show, don’t tell . Well there’s a girl that lives up the block. Back in school, she could turn all the boys’ heads. Sometimes on a Friday, I stop by and have a few drinks after she put her kids to bed. Her husband Bobby, well, they split up, I guess it’s two years gone by now. We just sit around and talk about the old times. She says when she feels like crying she starts laughing thinking about
  51. 51. Remember
  52. 52. Avoid jumping to conclusions about nonverbals. Report what you see. Don’t interpret. Remember
  53. 53. Avoid jumping to conclusions about nonverbals. Report what you see. Don’t interpret. Be discriminating. Too much description is ridiculous and distracting. Remember
  54. 54. Avoid jumping to conclusions about nonverbals. Report what you see. Don’t interpret. Be discriminating. Too much description is ridiculous and distracting. Use both dialog to take us there and quotes to fill in what we can’t see. Remember
  55. 55. Lori Oglesbee McKinney High School McKinney, Texas [email_address] [email_address] http://www.homepage.mac.com/lao4 Quicktime copy of this presentation Send me a story or else...
  56. 58. Types of Stories <ul><li>Snapshot of a moment </li></ul><ul><li>Observation </li></ul><ul><li>Personality profile </li></ul><ul><li>First person </li></ul><ul><li>News-based feature </li></ul><ul><li>Creative approach </li></ul>
  57. 59. <ul><li>Meaningful quotes. </li></ul><ul><li>Dialog. </li></ul><ul><li>Sensory descriptions. </li></ul><ul><li>Strong verbs. </li></ul><ul><li>Specific nouns. </li></ul><ul><li>Active voice. </li></ul><ul><li>Anecdote. </li></ul>
  58. 60. <ul><li>Mining your notes. The message you want when it’s all done. </li></ul>
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