Sample essay writing process- jane schaffer revised for uvm hs

4,918 views

Published on

1 Comment
0 Likes
Statistics
Notes
  • Hello! I can recommend a site that has helped me. It's called DigitalEssay.net They helped me for writing my quality research paper on diabetes, and of course by keeping my all other needs fulfilled.
       Reply 
    Are you sure you want to  Yes  No
    Your message goes here
  • Be the first to like this

No Downloads
Views
Total views
4,918
On SlideShare
0
From Embeds
0
Number of Embeds
3
Actions
Shares
0
Downloads
26
Comments
1
Likes
0
Embeds 0
No embeds

No notes for slide

Sample essay writing process- jane schaffer revised for uvm hs

  1. 1. BRAINSTORMING Violence. damage Aggressive . Problem.Thesis statement:The violence is a social problem and it causes a lot of damage in México.Topic sentence 1:Violence it’s one of the most important problems in México.Topic sentence 2The damages that violence causes are physical, psychological and emotional.
  2. 2. OUTLINE Violence in Mexico.Introduction. 1. Violence is an action when someone hurts another person intentionally, the majority of victims are women. 2. The domestic violence is the most common in our country. 3. More than 133 thousand women in Mexico were victims of violence last year. 4. The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages. 5. In México we need new laws to try to prevent and eliminate violence.Body Paragraph 1 1. Violence it’s one of the most important problems in México. 2. For example, “Violence can range from physical abuse within the family to revenge killings”. Jose Luis Lacarriere (Dnonald, 2011). 3. I think that we need to improve the security in every place and try to make campaigns against violence. 4. We should be more respectful with other people, try to control ourselves to prevent violence. 5. Violent people are like that because they want to feel more powerful than others hurting people.Body Pargraph 2 1. The damages that violence cause are physical, psychological and emotional. 2. For example, “In Mexico, one in every seven families have been victim of violence or at least one member of the family has been victim of a crime” (Pereyra & Luis, 205). 3. Any kind of violence it’s an abuse, and you have to tell the authorities about that, if every person do that we can control this problem. 4. To eliminate this social problem we don’t have to tolerate any violence. 5. We have to be a united and strong country to fight against this big problem.Conclusion 1. The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages in México. 2. We need to be united to destroy the problem. 3. This problem almost always starts at home with the parents. 4. In México it’s more common because here the “machismo” is too strong. 5. Most of the women that are abuse don’t present charges because they’re afraid.
  3. 3. ROUGH DRAFT Violence in Mexico Violence is an action when someone hurts another person intentionally, themajority of victims are women. The domestic violence is the most common in ourcountry. More than 133 thousand women in Mexico were victims of violence last year.The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages. In México we need newlaws to try to prevent and eliminate violence. Violence it’s one of the most important problems in México. For example,“Violence can range from physical abuse within the family to revenge killings”(Dnonald, 2011). I think that we need to improve the security in every place and try tomake campaigns against violence. We should be more respectful with other people, tryto control ourselves to prevent violence. Violent people are like that because they wantto feel more powerful than others hurting people. The damages that violence cause are physical, psychological and emotional. Forexample, “In Mexico, one in every seven families have been victim of violence or atleast one member of the family has been victim of a crime” (Pereyra & Luis, 205). Anykind of violence it’s an abuse, and you have to tell the authorities about that, if everyperson do that we can control this problem. To eliminate this social problem we don’thave to tolerate any violence. We have to be a united and strong country to fight againstthis big problem. The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages in México. Weneed to be united to destroy the problem. This problem almost always starts at homewith the parents. In México it’s more common because here the “machismo” is toostrong. Most of the women that are abuse don’t present charges because they’re afraid.
  4. 4. BibliografíaDnonald, D. M. (13 de agosto de 2011). Forbes. Recuperado el 25 de agosto de 2011, dehttp://www.forbes.com/sites/greatspeculations/2011/08/24/fracking-takes-more-flack-from-gray-lady/Pereyra, C., & Luis, F. (205). Historia ¿pora que? México: Siglo XXI .
  5. 5. PEER REVIEW-APA FORMAT (1 POINT EACH)1. Does student have a cover page?YES or NO WRITING PROCES2. Does student use double space? 11. Brainstorming (4 POINTS)YES or NO Student focused his or her ideas, got the3. Does student use ARIAL ? thesis statement and topic sentence .YES or NO YES or NO4. Does student use font 12? 12. Outline (1POINT)YES or NO Student organized his or her essay in an outline format (5X4)5. Does student have margins set to APAstandards? YES or NOYES or NO 13. Draft/Peer review (1POINT)SPECIFICATIONS (1 POINT EACH) Student has a draft reviewed by a peer.6. Does student have 4 paragraphs? Yes /NoYES or NO 14. Final draft (1 POINT)7. Does student have 20 sentences (5 in Student made corrections according to hiseach paragraph)? or her Peer recommendations.YES or NO YES or NO8. Does student use a printed resource?YES or NO9. Does student have an electronicresource?YES or NO10. Does student have a bibliography APAformat?YES or NO
  6. 6. 1Running head: Violence in Mexico Violence in Mexico Oscar Ramos Pérez Universidad del Valle de México Group: 5T
  7. 7. 2Violence in Mexico Violence in Mexico Violence is an action when someone hurts another person intentionally, themajority of victims are women. The domestic violence is the most common in ourcountry. More than 133 thousand women in Mexico were victims of violence last year.The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages. In México we need newlaws to try to prevent and eliminate violence. Violence it’s one of the most important problems in México. For example,“Violence can range from physical abuse within the family to revenge killings”(Dnonald, 2011). I think that we need to improve the security in every place and try tomake campaigns against violence. We should be more respectful with other people, tryto control ourselves to prevent violence. Violent people are like that because they wantto feel more powerful than others hurting people. The damages that violence cause are physical, psychological and emotional. Forexample, “In Mexico, one in every seven families have been victim of violence or atleast one member of the family has been victim of a crime” (Pereyra & Luis, 205). Anykind of violence it’s an abuse, and you have to tell the authorities about that, if everyperson do that we can control this problem. To eliminate this social problem we don’thave to tolerate any violence. We have to be a united and strong country to fight againstthis big problem. The violence is a social problem and it cause a lot of damages in México. Weneed to be united to destroy the problem. This problem almost always starts at home
  8. 8. 3Violence in Mexicowith the parents. In México it’s more common because here the “machismo” is toostrong. Most of the women that are abuse don’t present charges because they’re afraid.
  9. 9. 4Violence in Mexico ReferencesDnonald, D. M. (13 de agosto de 2011). Forbes. Recuperado el 25 de agosto de 2011, de http://www.forbes.com/sites/greatspeculations/2011/08/24/fracking-takes-more- flack-from-gray-lady/Pereyra, C., & Luis, F. (205). Historia ¿pora que? México: Siglo XXI .

×