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  • GHSGWTGHSGWT LessonLesson Peachtree Ridge High SchoolPeachtree Ridge High School Don’t let this happen to you! Be prepared for the Georgia High School Graduation Writing Test!
  • Overview of the GHSGTOverview of the GHSGT 100 minutes- brainstorming, drafting,100 minutes- brainstorming, drafting, editing, & revision (final draft in pen)editing, & revision (final draft in pen) Persuasive Prompt- you need a clearPersuasive Prompt- you need a clear opinion supported by multiple concreteopinion supported by multiple concrete detailsdetails May take various formats depending onMay take various formats depending on the prompt: letter, speech, essay, etcthe prompt: letter, speech, essay, etc 2 raters will grade you on 4 domains2 raters will grade you on 4 domains
  • POP QUIZ!POP QUIZ! Which of these domains of the GHSGWhich of these domains of the GHSG Writing Test will be the most important (i.e.Writing Test will be the most important (i.e. worth the most amount of points!)?worth the most amount of points!)? A. IdeasA. Ideas B. OrganizationB. Organization C. StyleC. Style D. ConventionsD. Conventions
  • And the winner is....And the winner is.... IDEASIDEAS (40%)(40%) Stay controlled and focusedStay controlled and focused Support your ideas with DETAILS andSupport your ideas with DETAILS and make your details relevantmake your details relevant Create depth in your development of ideasCreate depth in your development of ideas Be aware of your persuasive purposeBe aware of your persuasive purpose Show a sense of completionShow a sense of completion Make the move from general to specificMake the move from general to specific
  • Pop Quiz!Pop Quiz! Indicate whether the following details are:Indicate whether the following details are: (a)(a)GeneralGeneral (b) Specific(b) Specific 1.1. The storm was violent.The storm was violent. 2.2. The death penalty is wrong and unjust.The death penalty is wrong and unjust. 3.3. Homework is horrible and should beHomework is horrible and should be banned in schoolsbanned in schools
  • How to Make Your WritingHow to Make Your Writing More Specific...More Specific... Use personal examples or specificUse personal examples or specific hypothetical situations that illustrate yourhypothetical situations that illustrate your pointpoint Use an abundance of meaningfulUse an abundance of meaningful adjectives, adverbs, vivid verbs, sensoryadjectives, adverbs, vivid verbs, sensory language, and imagerylanguage, and imagery Use evidence to back up your claimsUse evidence to back up your claims SHOW, don’t tell!SHOW, don’t tell! Propose specific solutions/alternatives toPropose specific solutions/alternatives to fix the problemfix the problem
  • Helpful Rhetorical DevicesHelpful Rhetorical Devices AnecdoteAnecdote- a small story (usually in the- a small story (usually in the intro) to illustrate (not prove!) a point.intro) to illustrate (not prove!) a point. ImageryImagery (descriptive language)(descriptive language) EthosEthos- appeal to ethics- appeal to ethics PathosPathos- appeal to emotion- appeal to emotion LogosLogos- appeal to logic- appeal to logic Figurative LanguageFigurative Language- similes, metaphors- similes, metaphors and personification (be creative and makeand personification (be creative and make sure they make sense!)sure they make sense!) Rhetorical QuestionsRhetorical Questions
  • TheThe KEY toKEY to IDEAS!IDEAS! Controlling Idea (Focus) Relevant Supporting Ideas Major Details Specific Examples And Elaboration
  • Key for DoD Samples:Key for DoD Samples: Blue= RelevantBlue= Relevant Supporting IdeaSupporting Idea Red= Major DetailsRed= Major Details Green= Specific DetailsGreen= Specific Details and Examplesand Examples
  • Ideas: Score Point 2Ideas: Score Point 2 The United States government has spent billions of dollars on the space program for over 25 years. That needs to stop. The first reason this needs to stop is there have been problems with the space program. The second reason this needs to stop is, there are really important issues to deal with in the U.S. and across the world. The first reason this needs to stop is there have been problems with the space program. For one, it is really expensive. Secondly, it is not really safe. There have been two major accidents and lives lost. So, the program needs to stop because there are many problems with it. The second reason this needs to stop is, there are really important issues to deal with in the U.S. and across the world. A fact we can not forget is that America is at war on two fronts. Plus, there is the constant threat of another terrorist attack. Also, let’s not forget the people in America who are hungry and don’t have homes. There are many important problems we need to deal with instead of sending people to space. So, I think we need to stop funding space travel. Remember, there are many problems with the space program. Secondly, there are really important issues we need to address here at home. Thanks for reading my letter.
  • Ideas: Score Point 3Ideas: Score Point 3 The United States government has been funding billions of dollars to the space program for over 25 years, and I believe that that needs to stop. For one, there have been problems with the space program. Two, there are really important issues to deal with in the U.S. and across the world. I am asking you to redirect funding for space exploration into other programs. In the past 25 years, the space program’s main vehicle for transportation to outer space has been the space shuttle. Now though, there are problems with it. For one, it is really expensive. Secondly, it is not really safe. Until we can fix these problems, I think it would be getter to spend this money elsewhere. If funding isn’t going to the space program, it needs to be going to fund more pressing issues. A fact we can not forget is that America is at war on two fronts. Plus, there is the constant threat of another terrorist attack. Also, let’s not forget the people in America who are hungry and don’t have homes. There are many problems in our country we need to solve before sending the next group of astronauts to the moon. Finally, there is the energy and oil situation. It is getting tough for people to afford gasoline. The government really needs to fund the research and development of new and cheaper alternatives to oil. For example, we should invest money in biodiesel technology and cleaner, wind and solar power. I am unhappy about where government funding has been going, especially when it comes to the space program. In the past years, the space program has had many problems. The money could be better spent on keeping America safe and finding new energy sources.
  • Ideas: Score Point 4Ideas: Score Point 4 Would you continue to fund something that was basically failing? The American space program has been filled with problems, and we have really important issues to address here on Earth. For this reason, I believe we should redirect the funds. In the past 25 years, the space programs main vehicle for transportation to outer space has been the space shuttle. Now though, I feel it is becoming obsolete. There have been serious failures with the space program. For example, there were the explosions of the Challenger lift off, and more recently with the Columbia re-entry. Both of these disasters cost the lives of the crews on board. The lost shuttles also cost the taxpayers millions. If funding isn’t going to the space program, it needs to be going to fund more pressing issues. A fact we can not forget is that America is at war on two fronts. How can we spend money on space when all of our troops don’t have adequate supplies? Plus, there is the constant threat of another terrorist attack. We need to bring our troops home and keep America safe from people who want to harm us. Let’s not have another September 11, 2001. Finally, there is the energy and oil situation. It is getting tough for people to afford gasoline. The government really needs to fund the research and development of new and cheaper alternatives to oil. For example, we should invest money in biodiesel technology, in addition to wind and solar power. Not only are these sources cheaper, but they are also cleaner. By now, I hope it is plain to see what needs to be done. Don’t get me wrong: space is cool, and we benefit from exploring it. It’s just that our current program is filled with problems, and we have serious concerns to address here on Earth. Let’s get to work!
  • Ideas: Score Point 5Ideas: Score Point 5 The United States government has been funding billions of dollars to the space program for over 25 years, and I believe that that needs to stop. Because of recent failures involving the space program, and more specifically the space shuttle, and also with more pressing domestic and foreign relations issues at hand, I am asking you to redirect funding for space exploration into other programs. In the past 25 years, the space programs main vehicle for transportation to outer space has been the space shuttle. Now though, I feel it is becoming obsolete. There have been two major failures with the explosions of the Challenger lift off, and more recently with the Columbia re- entry. Both of these disasters cost a lot of money, and more importantly, the lives of the crews on board. If there is not an alternative to the shuttle, I don’t see how we can continue to safely and successfully reap the benefits of space exploration. If funding isn’t going to the space program, it needs to be going to fund more pressing issues. A fact we can not forget is that America is at war on two fronts, in Iraq and with terrorism. Troops in Iraq should not be going without adequate body armor so that astronauts can gaze at moon rocks. Let’s not forget about protecting the homeland from another terrorist attack. The Department of Homeland security needs adequate funding in order to catch the terrorists who could be planning future attacks. The last thing our country needs is another September 11, 2001 while we’re dealing with the Great Recession.
  • Ideas: Score Point 5 (cont.)Ideas: Score Point 5 (cont.) My final plea in asking you to redirect your funds concerns what I believe is the issue in the most dire and immediate need of attention and that is this countries energy and oil situation. It has come to the point that your average American family is having trouble financially with heating their homes and fueling their cars. The government really needs to fund the research and development of new and cheaper alternatives to oil. For example, we should invest money in biodiesel technology and cleaner, wind and solar power generation. These energy sources are not only cheaper; they are renewable and do not impact or pollute our environment with CO2 emission. I am unhappy about where government funding has been going, especially when it comes to the space program. In the past years, the space program has had notable failures with only modest successes. Given the many challenges confronting our world, I believe the time is now to think seriously about redirecting NASA’s funds. Your next generation of voters will thank you.
  • Common Ways to Achieve DoDCommon Ways to Achieve DoD Appeal to Facts/InformationAppeal to Facts/Information Appeal to EmotionAppeal to Emotion Personal ExperiencePersonal Experience Humor (get ‘em laughing)Humor (get ‘em laughing)
  • Let’s Analyze the Rubrics!Let’s Analyze the Rubrics! Aim for Exceeds!!!Aim for Exceeds!!! The highest scoreThe highest score in any category is ain any category is a 5.5.
  • 3= Average3= Average Persuasive and on topicPersuasive and on topic Provides some examples to support ideasProvides some examples to support ideas and persuadeand persuade Information is very GENERAL (fewInformation is very GENERAL (few specifics)specifics) Does not use a variety of specifics, facts,Does not use a variety of specifics, facts, emotions, figurative languageemotions, figurative language
  • 5= EXCEEDS5= EXCEEDS Is PASSIONATELY persuasive, exploresIs PASSIONATELY persuasive, explores the topic fullythe topic fully Provides multiple specific examples withProvides multiple specific examples with facts, relevant personal experiencesfacts, relevant personal experiences Information shows depth of knowledgeInformation shows depth of knowledge Shows logical, effective organization ofShows logical, effective organization of thoughtsthoughts
  • Domain 2: Organization (20%)Domain 2: Organization (20%) Brainstorm first so your ideas are focusedBrainstorm first so your ideas are focused Group Ideas within paragraphs andGroup Ideas within paragraphs and include topic sentencesinclude topic sentences Transition between ideas, sentences andTransition between ideas, sentences and paragraphs (study lists of transitionalparagraphs (study lists of transitional words)words) Introduction HOOKS the readerIntroduction HOOKS the reader Conclusion provides a sense of closureConclusion provides a sense of closure without repetitionwithout repetition
  • Thought-provoking QuestionsThought-provoking Questions Setting the stage for the body of the paperSetting the stage for the body of the paper Anecdote (Imagine if....)Anecdote (Imagine if....) Directly address the readerDirectly address the reader Address the counterpointAddress the counterpoint Compelling Statement or QuotationCompelling Statement or Quotation More Effective IntrosMore Effective Intros
  • Questions for the reader to onsiderQuestions for the reader to onsider Summary of key points withoutSummary of key points without repetitionrepetition Reminder of personal connections theReminder of personal connections the reader has to the topicreader has to the topic Compelling Statement or QuotationCompelling Statement or Quotation More Effective ConclusionsMore Effective Conclusions
  • Domain 3: Style (20%)Domain 3: Style (20%) Use precise language and vary yourUse precise language and vary your sentence types. Avoid similar sentencesentence types. Avoid similar sentence beginningsbeginnings Show awareness of your audience andShow awareness of your audience and control in your tonecontrol in your tone Focus on diction (word choice)Focus on diction (word choice) Carefully craft your phrases and makeCarefully craft your phrases and make your language engagingyour language engaging Use figurative language (and even humorUse figurative language (and even humor when appropriate!)when appropriate!)
  • Descriptive Word ChoiceDescriptive Word Choice  Gives the reader a clearer sense of your ideas…works well with appeals to facts/information Simple The first reason this needs to stop is there have been problems with the space program. For one, it is really expensive. Secondly, it is not really safe. Descriptive The shuttle program not only costs taxpayers billions, but it is also dangerous There have been serious failures in recent years. For example, there were the explosions of the Challenger lift off, and more recently with the Columbia re-entry.
  • Figurative Word ChoiceFigurative Word Choice  Allows you to emphasize a point in a humorous or dramatic way Simple UGA’s team line is pretty big Figurative Florida’s defense will find it tricky breaking through the five concrete barriers protecting Matthew Stafford.
  • Domain 4: Conventions (20%)Domain 4: Conventions (20%) SpellingSpelling PunctuationPunctuation Verb tensesVerb tenses Subject/Verb agreementSubject/Verb agreement – Ex: A pencil and an eraserEx: A pencil and an eraser makesmakes writingwriting easier.easier. Correct?Correct? CapitalizationCapitalization Paragraph indentationParagraph indentation
  • Conventions Sentence Correctness Sentence Clarity Sentence Complexity End Punctuation Subject-Verb Agreement Word Forms Verb Tenses Internal Punctuation Spelling Paragraph Breaks Capitalization
  • Grading ActivityGrading Activity In your group you will examine five essaysIn your group you will examine five essays to determine the awarded score in each ofto determine the awarded score in each of the four areas. Look for specific rhetoricalthe four areas. Look for specific rhetorical devices and DoD.devices and DoD. –IdeasIdeas –OrganizationOrganization –StyleStyle –ConventionsConventions
  • Wrap Up: Advice for NextWrap Up: Advice for Next Week’s GroupWeek’s Group