One cold evening two sisters arrive at an isolated house; Molly is dragging her feet and is
continuously stopping outside the house with a stressed face. Macy is leading the way and eventually
they reach the old front door. They are inside the house; Molly slouched on the sofa while Macy is
looking around for drink continuously glancing back at Molly. Macy rushes back with the two drinks
and hands one over to Molly while she is still slouched against the wall. Macy is glancing at Molly
while she sips back her drink. Macy forces Molly over to a group of girls, Molly is staring into space
while everyone is talking; she hastily rushes away from the group. A few seconds later Macy is
cautiously starring round the house, she quickly leaves her group of friends. Macy is uncomfortably
pacing round the house and then enters the cold garden, from a poor sight peeking round the corner
she can see a group of girls and Molly knocking back shot glasses laughing. Macy watches and
catches Molly staring at a boy with a glow in her eyes until Macy herself is locked onto the boy gazing
at him, a few seconds later she realises she has lost track of focusing on Molly then goes steaming
over. Molly is continuously staring at the boy with a gleam until she is interrupted with her sister’s
entrance. The group of girls are talking, Ellie’s hand is digging down inside her pocket which Macy’s
eyes are locked onto and suddenly drugs appear, the girl Ellie begins to roll a joint. Macy stares
shamefully and uncomfortable at the group of girls and her sister. Molly grabs the joint off of Ellie and
sparks it up gazing into the lightened end. The boy is glancing at the group. Macy’s eyes are glued
onto Molly as she inhales the smoke, the joint gets passed round to Ellie who then passes across to
Macy who stands frozen looking angered towards the girl Ellie, smoke is weeping into Macy’s eyes
until the boy Daniel comes rushing into the group of girls and looks disgusted with the girls inhaling
the joint. Molly raises her voice at Macy and has her eyes all tucked up and wrinkled, later on Daniel
and Macy walk off together with a sparkle in their eyes leaving Molly looking dis-heartened.
Can you recognise specific themes
or issues within the synopsis?
Answers: ‘Yes I could recognise relationship and drug issues’, ‘Drug issues and
protection’, ‘drug use, relationships and sister rivalry’, ‘Drug abuse, romance
and relative relationships’, ‘drugs’, ‘protection’, ‘drug abuse’, ‘under age drug
abuse’, ‘drugs and alcohol abuse’.
A high percentage of my results show that they have some understanding of a drug issue
being represented. They have all successfully pointed out an issue/theme within my
These results have shown me that some of my issues and themes are clear for my
audience to depict. It enables me to carry on with my selected themes and issues within
Overall the majority of the results recognise a drug issue and have been able to pick out a
variety of themes and issues. This will impact my creative process as I no which of my
themes and issues are easily recognised and which need more detail to become visual.
Was there anything you particularly
liked within the synopsis?
Answers: ‘The characters were portrayed well’, ‘the focus to drug use that is represented’,
‘I liked the sense of tension that built up’, ‘the realism’, ‘the use of expression’, ‘the
place/setting’, ‘I liked how it reflected the youth of our generation’, ‘It keeps the reader
attracted as its interesting’, ‘the tension within the two sisters’.
The results I have received show a variety of parts to the synopsis that my audience liked
and were attracted to. The results were a mixture of answers.
The results show the parts people were interested in therefore i can see things that were
not mentioned within my results for being liked and I can pay attention to so I can create
them more attractive and interesting to my audiences eye.
Overall the majority of the results showed a range of answers to what they liked within my
synopsis, this is going to help impact my creative process because I now no what is popular
within my synopsis and what is not.
Can you visualize the idea? Explain
Answers: ‘Yes because of the detailed description’, ‘Yes because it is very detailed’, ‘Yes as
lots of adjectives helped set the scenario within my head’, ‘Yes because it is well written’, ‘Yes
because of the descriptive text’, ‘Yes as it is a situation which often occurs within our society’,
‘Yes because you can identify and relate to it’, ‘Yes because I felt a sense of familiarity’, ‘At
some parts I can because of its detail however the ending structure needs more’.
A high percentage of the answers to this question selected yes however there was one
person who stated ‘At some parts I can because of its detail however the ending structure
needs more’, this shows that I need to focus and pay attention to the end of my structure
and create it clear to my audiences eye.
Overall the results have pointed out the positive aspects of my idea being visualized, this
shows I can carry on with my idea as the majority could visualize my idea. This will impact my
creative process because even though there was a high percentage who were able to
visualize it I have found out I need to improve my ideas ending so that It is easier for my
audience to visualize it.
Were you able to relate to the
protagonist? Explain why.
Answers: ‘Not really as I' am not a teenage girl taking drugs’, ‘Yes because I have seen
people in that position’, ‘Yes because I have experienced situations like this with others’,
‘Yes because I can relate to the experience’, ‘yes because I have friends who do illegal
substances’, ‘Yes because she is a similar age to me’, ‘Yes as some of my friends are similar
to her’, ‘Yes I could relate because the situation reminds me of past experiences’, ‘Yes
because she is the same age and gender to me’.
The majority of my answers agreed to being able to relate to my protagonist, however their
was one response which stated they couldn’t relate due to the difference of gender, these
results shows that it may be harder to make the opposite gender connect/relate to my
protagonist. I need to focus on ways in which I can enable both genders to relate to my
Overall the results have shown successful ways in which people can relate to my protagonist
due to similar real life experiences and that the protagonist is the same gender and age,
however the results also showed a small factor could not relate to my protagonist due to
gender, This will impact my creative process because I need to pay attention on creating my
character in such a way that both genders can relate. The results have made me think that
my character Daniel could become a stronger part of the story.
In what points in the reading did you
feel emotionally engaged?
Answers: ‘when the drugs appeared as it causes tension’, ‘within the drug scene and when
Macy was spying on her sister’, ‘when the drugs are being inhaled’, ‘when the drugs were
being taken’, ‘when Macy felt uncomfortable and stared shamefully’, ‘the prier pressure
issue and drug scene’, ‘when the drugs become involved and it effects the relationship
between the sisters’, ‘when you could tell Macy and Molly felt a longing sense for the boy
Daniel’, ‘the arrival of the two sisters’.
A variety of the results suggest that when the drugs appeared on the scene they felt
emotionally engaged, a small amount were based on the relationship between the two
sisters. This shows me that my audience can emotionally connect or relate to the drug
situation due to real life experiences. It also tells me they are very aware of the issue drugs.
Overall the results have proven that the topic of drugs is very popular for my audience
feeling emotionally engaged, the issue of drugs is a main and key message of my film so it is
positive that my audience have noticed it within the synopsis. This will impact my creative
process because I need to recognise more of the issues and themes within my story and
create them into more descriptive detail within the synopsis in order to build my audience
even more emotionally engaged.
How would you sum up the main
themes/issues of the story?
Answers: ‘substance abuse’, ‘the issue of drug abuse as an attempt to impress others’,
‘They involve a lot of common issues that teenagers will experience and I think they are
very engaging because they are issues people can relate to’, ‘They include serious issues
we have in today’s society’, ‘different views on drugs’, ‘intenseness of drugs’, ‘drugs and
sister rivalry’, ‘teenage phases’, ‘protection'.
A high amount of the results sum up the story to do with the issue of drug use or the
issue of the young teenage youth. The results show me that some of my story’s issues
and themes are easy for the audience to recognise but also how they are very aware of
the main issue of drug use. Although the main issue of drug use has been portrayed
successfully it is not the only main issue I want to be identified
Overall the results have shown me that the main issue of drug use is easily identified,
this will have an impact in my creative process as my other main theme and issue is
sister rivalry, I need to focus on ways it can be recognised a bit more.
Do you think the story works in a 5
minute time period? (if no explain
What were the most visual moments
Answers: ‘When the girl is drinking shots and when the tension and awkwardness built when
the drugs appear’, ‘description of facial expressions’, ‘when she smokes the drugs’, ‘when the
drugs are being inhaled’, ‘description of the sisters arrival’, ‘prier pressure of Macy doing
drugs’, ‘smoking the substance’, ‘the drug abuse and when sexual relationships begin to
form’, ‘I felt visually engaged when the girl partook in smoking the joint’.
A high percent of the results show that the most visual moments noticed by my
audience is the use of drugs. This shows me that the issue of drugs is very realistic
to the eye from my audience.
Overall the results show that the participation of Molly doing drugs is one of the
most visual moments however I'm going to improve my story idea by looking at the
structure from the beginning and end to create more visual moments rather than
just in the middle with the drug scenes.
Did you read it more than once?
Is there anything you would personally
change within the synopsis? And why?
Answers: ‘I would make it even more detailed’, ‘I would change the outcome because I
didn’t like Molly getting judged because of her choice to smoke’, ‘I would change how much
happens in the short space time’, ‘I would change the wording used’, ‘I would use a broader
range of phrases’, ‘create it a bit more exciting’, ‘present it longer with more detail’, ‘some
of the wording’, ‘the wording and particular phrases used’.
The results have shown a variety of different things people would change within my
synopsis, this has given me plenty of feedback on ways I can improve my synopsis.
I am going to pay attention to changing around my wording and using new phrases.
Overall the results have given me the opportunity to improve my synopsis, I will do
this by re arranging my wording and phrases, look at the ways in which I can bring
the end structure more exciting to my audiences eye etc.
Do you think this story is relevant today?
Answers: ‘Yes as prier pressure is happening more often these days’, ‘Yes as teenagers are
very much delved into harmless substances yield to peer pressure’, ‘Yes due to all teenagers
being infatuated with others and hooked on drugs’, ‘ yes as it is an issue which occurs all the
time’, ‘Yes as it is a common issue within society’, ‘Yes it shows are generation’, ‘Yes as it
revolves real life issues we have in society today’, ‘Yes because nowadays, these kind of
situations become real life experiences for people’, ‘I feel this story is very relevant with the
youth of today because a lot of young people can associate themselves with the characters’.
A high percentage of my results have given some sort of explanation to why my
story idea is relevant within today. They have pointed out my key issues such as
peer pressure, drug use and the young youth within society today. It shows me that
if the story is relevant within today that I have the chance of creating my film
realistic and visual to my audience.
Overall the results have shown my story is relevant today, this has an impact within
my creative process as now I know I need to make it realistic as plenty of people
have experienced theses issues in there own life's or within society.
Do you think it is important within
society? And why?
Answers: ‘Yes as younger people are getting ignored which leads them ending up rebelling
through drugs and alcohol’, ‘Yes because it is a perfect example on how pre judgements are
made today’, ‘Yes because it is in our society at the moment’, ‘Yes as people will be able to
relate to the story and characters due to real life experiences’, ‘Yes it shows the danger of
drugs’, ‘yes as a large amount of people can relate to it’, ‘It is important as it shows the
portrayal of society today’, ‘Yes it sends a good message to young people’, ‘No films aren't
important to society’.
A high percentage of my results have stated my idea is important within society,
however there was one person who stated 'No films aren't important to society', this
shows a strong difference between the results.
Overall the majority of the results feel it is important within society however there
was a strong answer which felt films were not important to society. This shows that
even if you use real life issues it may not have an impact within society.
Does the story include characters that
are usually not represented? If so who?
Answers: ‘No teenagers are often represented’, ‘No’, ‘Yes teenage British girls are commonly
under represented’, ‘No’, ‘yes, teenage girl drug addicts are not commonly a main character in
films’, ‘yes as teenage girl groups into drugs are not usually portrayed’, ‘No’, ‘No it does not’,
‘I feel Macy is a character that isn't usually represented because young people are usually
shown in a negative light’.
The results given have a balanced view, some of the audience asked feel that
teenagers are represented commonly however some of the audience think 'teenage
drug addicts' are commonly presented within films.
Overall this shows I need to think if there is anyone missing within my film. This has
helped me because I know my characters are a popular choice within films and that
they are recognised easily.
Do you sense a strong message? If yes,
Answers: ‘Yes a strong message of drug awareness and the effects’, ‘I feel a lawfully correct
message which is not to use drugs and how it affects you socially’, ‘strong message of
behaviour, safety, drugs and relationships’, ‘I see a strong message of drug awareness and
the effect it has’, ‘ a strong message of drug awareness’, ‘drug awareness’, ‘strong message
of the impact of drug use’, ‘No it is unclear at what happens at the end’, ‘Yes don’t do drugs’.
A massive amount of the audience asked identified a strong message of the focus
on drugs. This shows my message of drugs is easily recognised, however people
felt the structure towards the end was unclear therefore did not connote a strong
Overall people felt a strong message of drug awareness, to improve my synopsis I'm
going to pay attention to the ending of the structure and create it more clear to the
eye and make sure it correctly fits in with the beginning and middle structure to see if
it later on helps create a stronger message.
Is there anything key being represented?
If so explain.
Answers: ‘pier pressure within teenage groups’, ‘Yes young people’, ‘drug use within British
youth’, ‘yes peer pressure through Macy’, ‘drugs’, ‘drug effects on relationships’, ‘drugs and
parental control’, ‘Everyday life experiences for people’, ‘I feel the key representation is the
youth of today’.
Most of the above results suggest that young youth is a key being represented,
everyone who answered the questionnaire has been able to suggest something key
being represented. This has shown me what is easily recognised within my film and
what is not.
Overall my audience have been able to recognise something being represented,
however I want to improve my synopsis my making sure the key of sister rivalry and
relationships gets noticed more.
Can you identify any types/groups being
Answers: ‘Teenage youth’, ‘I feel like the lower class youth of today is being represented
through this story’, ‘Yes young groups of teenagers’, ‘young peoples society’, ‘yes kids of
today’, ‘sisters, age and social class’, ‘young youth’, ‘teenage girls’, ‘young people’.
A high amount of the results have noticed the specific group of teenage youth is
being represented. This has shown me that my specific group has successfully
Overall all the results suggest teenage youth is the specific group being
represented, this will help me improve my synopsis as I need to also focus on
representing classes, different stereotypes of people etc.