Masthead not bold enough, it needs to be made bigger and jump forward from the page more.
Cover lines don’t stand out enough, easily missed at first glance.
The WIN circle is the most noticeable thing on the page needs to be more transparent.
Picture too dark for the plain black headline.
Pattern in the banner at the bottom of the page is too distracting from the text, so its not easily read. The Lure’s need to stand out to interest the reader.
Masthead bigger and therefore stands out more however could still use a drop shadow to lift it from the page.
Strapline doesn’t stand out enough, hard to read.
Top20 stands out better now the red makes it more exciting and eye catching so the reader cant miss out on this opportunity.
Exclusive interviews stands out really well and the list makes it seem like the magazine is packed full of exclusives.
The glow around the Headline allows it to jump forward from the page.
The plain box matching the background with the plain black text makes it more readable.
Thin outline and drop shadow on the masthead makes it stand out more
Adding a glow around the strapline makes it stand out more.
Switching the win circle to the other side balances the top of the page strapline on one side circle on the other.
Circle is still too bold needs to be more transparent
Remove the & the bullet point alone is enough (& Joshua Radin)
Acoustic guitar image refers back to the genre.
Acoustic Newcomers and gig guide cover lines not readable too dark.
Get rid of & many more not suitable for my audience too casual.
4th & Final Draft
Masthead is now the most noticeable thing on the page.
Grey circle now sits better on the page as it is more transparent. The boldness of the WIN still grabs the readers attention.
Adding a light grey glow around the cover lines means they can be easily read at first glance.
Spreading the glow around the Headline looks like sparkles reflecting the fame and celebrity of the cover star.
Again I added glow around the banner at the bottom so it stand forward from the image.
Overall I am very pleased with my cover, I think it is exciting and will stand out on a magazine stand the direct form of address form the model and the bold headline and masthead and a lot of lure words such as Exclusive and WIN!