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  1. 1. Revisions<br />How to give relevant and useful feedback<br />Drew Dondelinger<br />
  2. 2. You should always revise your work before turning it in, even if it’s “just” a rough draft.<br />When and Who to Revise<br />Revise any work you plan to turn in, or share. However don’t revise immediately after finishing a draft. Always allow time to step back from your work before going back in and revising.<br />
  3. 3. <ul><li>Revise your work as if you were a third party, the easiest way to do this is to read your work out loud so you can hear if what you are trying to say is being portrayed clearly.
  4. 4. Revise others’ work with the attitude as if it was your own, in the fact that the most important part of revising is actually caring.</li></ul>Revising Tips<br />
  5. 5. <ul><li>Revising doesn’t mean editing  don’t go through looking for typos or spelling and grammar mistakes
  6. 6. Revising should be used to make the piece better. Don’t be afraid to suggest, or make, changes. Pieces are not perfect the first time and every time you revise a piece it should get better</li></ul>Revising Tips<br />
  7. 7. Questions to Guide you<br />Who is the author’s audience<br />Does the author address his/her audience effectively<br />What is the author’s argument/hypothesis<br />What type of argument is the author making, and for what purpose<br />What is the author’s evidence for his argument<br />Is the piece focused and efficient on the authors goal(s)<br />
  8. 8. Question to Guide You<br />Think as a 3rd party reader, with no prior knowledge of the subject<br /><ul><li>Is it clear to you what the author is saying
  9. 9. How can the material be presented clearer
  10. 10. Does the author convince/persuade you
  11. 11. Was this an interesting/new concept to you
  12. 12. Did the piece excited you, did you enjoy reading it, or did you fall asleep</li></li></ul><li>Change<br />You may be an excellent writer and write a great piece the first time out of the gate, but there is always room for improvement.<br />A piece should change, often dramatically, from your first draft to the final day<br />Take a moment and skim/read these two pieces written by a student the first is a rough draft and the second is a final<br />DraftFinal<br />
  13. 13. Differences<br />Some editing was done (flow, structure, spelling, etc) but the biggest difference was in the overall feeling of the paper. The second piece is much more clear and to the point. The first draft left the reader wondering exactly what the author was looking for or trying to argue, because of a poorly defined hypothesis and other useless filling information that led readers off track from the main idea.<br />Once the hypothesis was more clearly defined the overall piece reads much more focused.<br />
  14. 14. Sample Paper<br />Example Project<br />Take this sample paper and go through and suggest revisions to the author. Specifically focus on the authors argument and his focus on his argument. There are no right or wrong answers here, your goal is to help the author better his project.<br />
  15. 15. Things to Remember<br />Care (whether your partner’s or yours), if you don’t care you wont be a beneficial resource<br />Revising isn’t editing, change the piece not fix sentences<br />Revising is meant to make the piece better<br />Revise anything you plan to turn in<br />Always read from an outsiders point of view<br />