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Proofreading & editing course student produces outstanding coursework

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CTJT proofreading and editing course student, Tracey Clifford, has produced an outstanding piece of coursework.

CTJT proofreading and editing course student, Tracey Clifford, has produced an outstanding piece of coursework.

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  • 1. Distance learning proofreading course assignement by Tracey Clifford Query list. Pages need numbering, eg Page 1 of 6 Page 1. Line 2 Line starts: at the Remove the first ‘the’ in the line, as it is not needed. Add a comma after ‘at’ and after ‘are’. Paragraph will now read: If you are thinking of going to the cinema, or trying to decide which restaurant to eat at, chances are, you may look at the review pages in a newspaper, website or magazine. Review 1 Remove the words ‘journalist’ and ‘because’ as they are not needed. The journalist writing the review would be classed as a reviewer. Paragraph will now read: 1. People often want an objective opinion before they commit themselves to sampling a particular product, and trust a reviewer to give them one. This places the reviewer in an important position of trust with the reader. They have a duty to be fair and objective. Review 2 The sentence is too long. A full stop is needed after ‘product’ (line 2), omit the ‘and’, then start the sentence with ‘They then can’. Paragraph will now read: 2. Readers want to see what the newspaper/magazine/website thinks about a product. They then can match that opinion against their own, having already sampled it themselves. Review 4 Sentence too long. A full stop is needed after (line 2). Omit the ‘and’, and start the sentence with ‘They’. Line will now read: drama ect. They use reviews to do so, especially if they do not have the time No 13 on list Query: Services; what kind of services? Page 2. No 14 on list Would change to: New products. Paragraph 1 Line starts: A review A change to the paragraph as it is confusing. Paragraph will now read: A review is not just there to criticise – to find fault and to censure – but it should also praise the things that are good. Be constructive and suggest what might have been done better. Paragraph 2 Line 4 Line starts: and should Query: Should ‘not’ be italicised?
  • 2. Tip No 1 Line starts: an expert The question mark should be moved and placed after ‘expert’. Tip No 2 Line 2 Line starts: the game The dash should be changed to a semicolon. Tip No 3 All the dashes in the sentence should be changed to commas. Pages 2 and 3. Tip No 4 Line 2 Line starts: what they Paragraph would flow better if a couple of dashes were added. From line 3, paragraph will now read: What they are there for – this enables them to test the product without receiving any ‘preferential treatment’ – others give advance notice. (Rest of paragraph to stay the same). Page 3. Tip No 5 Line 2 Line starts: and constructive The dash should be changed to a semicolon. Tip No 6 Line 2 Line starts: product as Query: should ‘as your reader would’ be italicised? Tip No 6 Line 2 Line starts: product as The word ‘should’ needs to be added after ‘you’ and before ‘avoid’ Sentence will now read: This means you should avoid sitting there writing notes all the way through. Tip No 6 Line 4 Line starts: your memory Full stop not needed after ‘memory’. Change to a comma, and carry the sentence on. Tip No 7 (S)he should be changed to ‘you’ to keep with the “second person” perspective used with the other tips. Tip No 8 Change the ellipsis to semicolons.
  • 3. Tip No 8 Line 6 Line starts: last to be Query: Is the conductor 90-years-old? Tip No 9 Instead of ‘see later on’, add the tip number the fact file is on; See Tip No 17. Tip No 10 Line 3 Line starts: attention: ‘Players’ should be lowercase. Tip No 10 Line 4 Line starts: opened their No comma after ‘sex’. Tip No 10 Line 4 Line starts: opened their No sex please, we’re British, should not be italicised if using the Guardian style, and should capitalised, ie No Sex Please, We’re British. Page 4. Tip No 11 Line 4 Line starts: and who by A ‘t’ is missing at the end of par. Tip No 13 Line 4 Line starts: There is no Change the dash to a full stop. Starts new sentence with ‘Write’. Tip No 14 As there are three different lists with No 3, would be better to say: This takes us back to tip No 3 (page 2). Page 5. Tip No 15 First paragraph on page 5 Dashes should be changed to commas. Tip No 16 Line 2 Line starts: an infant school The dash should be changed to a semicolon.
  • 4. Tip No 16 Line 5 Line starts: no-one No hyphen needed. Should be: no one. Tip No 17 Line 14 Line starts: A star rating Change the first dash on the line to a comma. Tip No 18 Query: Should ‘people’ be italicised? Page 6. Tip No 18 First paragraph on page 6 Change the dashes to commas. Tip No 19 Line 5 Line starts: capabilities ect. Change the dash to a comma. Tip No 20 Line 2 Line starts: reviewing ‘Say’ is not needed. Tip No 20 Line 4 Line starts: work The Copyright Designs and Patents Act, allows you to use extracts of copyright work without charge, but photos are not included. Tip No 21 Line 3 Line starts: reviews. ‘the’ at the end of the line should be ‘their’. Line will now read: Reviews. Readers have the right to know who is expressing their opinions. Distance learning proofreading course assignement by Tracey Clifford